'Saudade'-- A SwaSan O.S

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

#21

Originally posted by: tootiefrootie11
Viji 🤗 You probably won't be that surprised reading this but- saudade has always been one of my favourite words for the connotations it carries- it always transported me to think of something exotic and compelling- almost like tones of Arabian Nights and smouldering passion if that makes sense?!
Coming to the OS- how have you managed to make it both poignant and still so funny, without losing any of the grip?! 👏👏👏.
I love how it flits from the pain of their relationship to how Swara makes it right, as in their situation it has to be her now who acts. I would love to see Sanskaar in the show distance himself (sadist I know) as nothing else will really bring the silly girl to her senses. I am unable to cut and paste sections but there are so many snippets that I love- e.g. the bit about far worse prisons than words and the section about being the person who breaks the heart of the one that loves you so much.
The Uttara and Swara "gang" was hilarious- 😆. Poor Sanskaar but also lucky Sanskaar 😆.
I have had some very bad news today and am trying desperately to focus on good things, and this certainly counts as one! Not allowed to say thanks but will say- lovely!

Hey Shru...🤗 🤗 No, I am not surprised that you love the word "Saudade" as well. 😊 We do tend to think alike, several times! This is the virtual soul sister connection! 😉 Thanks for all your lovely words, glad to know you liked this O.S.

Oh, I do feel that if Swara decides to postpone the divorce decision/ fake giving their marriage a chance, just so as to reunite her pyari behna with Yucky, then Sansku should distance himself from her. It would be fun to see Swara wooing him, na? 😊

And I wanted Uttara to do something. 😊 She has tho completely vanished from the serial!

Sorry to hear about the bad news. Hope its not too bad. PM or Scrap me if you wanna talk about it. Glad to help if I can.

Edited by CogitoErgoSum - 9 years ago

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Monica_Suhasini

@Monica_Suhasini

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Posted: 9 years ago

#22

Hi viji

Thankyou so much for the PM

Saudade. ... ur o.s is wonderful n beyond perfection

Title itself is very different n graceful

U penned it very beautifully. ...swara's solution of locking the cupboard is tooo good...

And wen he was amazed by seeing his wife z wonderful

Perfect scene...

You wrote very delightfuly itseems all this z happening infront of me...hatsoff dear👏... great job⭐️

And wen sanskar confessed infront of swara wen he couldn't take it any more...it's awesomeness filled scene...
ur os is perfect perfect perfect

Loved it

Tx again 4 pm... God bless😊

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Cogito_Ergo_Sum

@Cogito_Ergo_Sum

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Posted: 9 years ago

#23

Originally posted by: medhasankar
Viji,⭐️
The part where sanskaar started distancing himself from Swara, because he simply had reached the end of his tether...was really heartbreaking. You described it well...'like a bull being led for slaughter'

Then the part where Swara set about trying to get him to understand her love for him...that was funny and of course exciting to my SwaSanofied mind. It was also very close to canon.

The way Sanskaar slowly started giving in to all this newfound show of love from the significant other..and started getting all husband-y...was a treat.

And the finale...The part where both ends met...and a new beginning was born...was beautiful.

I hope to see this in the show...and I have a feeling it will be close to what we will see.😉 I got one word for you which I felt, when I read this. Its certainly not unheard of. Its bliss.

You said, you will be travelling for Nabami to Ekadashi...Safe journey, and enjoy yourself with your family...and yes, get good Wi-Fi.😃

Love,
Medha.

Medha my dear friend...🤗 🤗 Am so glad you liked this one. Seriously, if Swara decides to "fake" staying in the marriage, just to ensure Lakshya takes back Ragini, Sansku needs to distance himself from her. He really can't let himself be the bull led to slaughter!

I would like to see Swara pining for him, and doing her best to win him back. 😊

Have left to our hometown. No wifi!! But will be trying to catch up with the forum action over my phone. 😉

Thanks Medha...

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DarkPhoenix93

@DarkPhoenix93

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Posted: 9 years ago

#24

I really hope that in the show they show Swara chasing and wooing Sanskaar like this. I really like the whole thing baout her pecking Sanskaar's cheek and infront of family so he can't do anything. I love your writing style and I am eagerly waiting to read your SS. What is it about and when will it be posted?

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Swathy

@SwathyS

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Posted: 9 years ago

#25

You are making me a fan of yours along with swasan.

Coming back to the story . We all want swara to do a lot of chasing to get sansku back and i liked your version of the chase. He can never be cruel or mocking like lux was towards her .

Loved the photo wala scene were swara takes help of uttara the most.

The red saree thing some how remindede rags aag laga de red saree 🤢

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Flame.

@Flame.

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Posted: 9 years ago

#26

Breathtaking! Absolutely breathtaking.

I really have no words to describe how much I loved it. What a delightful piece of work.

I never had a clue about this word, 'Saudade'. What a beautiful meaning it has and almost anyone who has felt the pain of losing someone can relate to it and just how perfectly it suits Swasan. Thanks so much for letting me know of this new word.

The way you've penned Swara's pain in the beginning is heart stopping. Its like I could feel all her pain, Like it wasn't Swara but I was the one going through all the agony and regret. Truly great writing. You made me feel what she felt. 👏

Coming to Sanskar, it was a totally different take on his character. Him not trusting Swara. I agreed with every word that you composed for him and found myself nodding when he spoke about trusting her or rather her version of love that she has for him, however my heart broke when he announced his decision with regard to divorce 🥺

Then I was engulfed with teenager types excitement (Btw, I'm just a month away from getting out of teens 😉 ) and weak in the knees kind of a feeling when Swara started executing all her tricks to win him back. God, This was just so adorable. Her choosing everyday clothes for him...Him reluctantly caving in and her excitement for this daily routine and her firm belief of no one in the world being better than her darling husband. I actually chuckled at her natural cuteness here 😆 ❤️

And then Of course, the whole hotel incident. Sanskar's jealousy and Swara's genuine efforts to get that beautiful smile back. Totally went insane when the kiss happened. It was so beautifully written that the readers block that I was having since a few months is off I guess. I'm soo gonna go order the book that you've mentioned.

Please write more. This was breathtakingly beautiful and I and I'm sure all who have read this OS would want to read more from you 👍🏼

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Shivangi

@Annei123

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Posted: 9 years ago

#27

Aamazing OS !!!!

Do write more 😃

P.s can u try write something completely romantic on swasan 😛

Edited by Annei123 - 9 years ago

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Smilelicious

@Smilelicious

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Posted: 9 years ago

#28

Viji 🤗 This took my breath away, once again 👏
I heard this word Saudade for the first time, so thank you for letting us know this new word 😊
I loved Sanskar's character here. The way he tried to stay away from Swara and avoid her was bang on!
Even though a bit late Swara realized her feelings but kehte hai na der aaye drust aaye😆
The last part was mesmerizing So beautifully written.
Your works are a delight to read and make my day😳
I just fell more and more in love with SwaSan whenever i read any FF or OS, especially yours, Medha's and Shruti's. 👏
Happy Dussehra to you and your family 🤗

Edited by Smilelicious - 9 years ago

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mistofshadows

@mistofshadows

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Posted: 9 years ago

#29

Your stories are always rich!
Yup, I didn't find any other appropriate adjective to honour them with.

Rich in almost everything. Love, Pain, Angst, Joy, Philosophy, humane understanding...I can go on and on.

Coming to the plot, I would love it if the show follows this pattern. But alas...
Sanskar too badly hurt and Swara;s late realization reminds me of Ranveer and Ishaani's story.
I loved the way Swara tried to woo him back and Sanskar though angry at her allowed himself to be wooed back. Their bonding is immense. Unique, simple and yet encompassing.

Thanks for the pm.

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samiya.059

@samiya.059

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Posted: 9 years ago

#30

Finally an os from u that is all about swason..!!!
The title itself was so intriguing ...I so loved the title
I so want swara to run behind sanskaar to accept her love.The girl has tortured poor sanku so much..It was a treat to read
I thought when she wud leave MM she mgt miss sanskaar n know his worth in her lyf ..I thought she needed a practical demo of "love knows not its own depth until the hour of separation"
I liked how swara tried to make it up to him and how sanskaar ignored her
You write so amazingly that one can see a film running through the minds eye what ever u pen down
The last part where sanskaar gave her hanky was so cute..its high time he gives her rumaal for reasons other than wiping tears
I wasn't expecting a story from u so soon...but wen I got the pm I was jumping in joy
Great work
looking forward to reading more of ur works
You write such brilliant stuff that one becomes greedy to read more n more of ur works...
thanks for pm

Edited by samiya.059 - 9 years ago

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