SwaSan OS-- 'Fire' - Page 8

Originally posted by: mistofshadows

And You managed to surprise me this time. Water was predictable cuz none is more adaptable than Swara.
But Annapurna as fire...now that was a bit bewildering for me at first.
However once I read the whole thing and thought on that perspective, things clicked to place too well.
I think you may have actually started a new interpretation of the character's psychology.
Congratulations!!!!!!
Coming to the story, u r a really wonderful writer. You managed to grab the undivided attention right up to the end.
I liked the apparent wariness of Annapurna towards Swara. Fire and water, the opposites.
Annapurna and Sanskar's relationship reminded me of Maharana Pratap and his third mother, Rani Dheerbai Bhatiyani. She too used to wish that her child was like Pratap and envious, she used to present a facade of altruism to all.

Waiting for the next.

-Niki

Originally posted by: drooler

Loved the update. I like the way you have woven annapurna's past and thus justifying her nature.

Will the update be continuing from here or it will be based on a totally different theme ??

waiting eagerly for the next element. ..

continue soon.😊

Originally posted by: JazzyM

Flabbergasted...seriously...the way you wove the story of AP and Swara...Both ladies are tough cookies but then AP has always had it 'given' to her ...meanwhile Swara worked hard for it...

Fantastic writing and the ending about Fire...super summation.

Loved this...👏

Originally posted by: RUQAIYA10

Hello Viji😊

Thanks for the pm. Your characterizationof AP is extremely detailed and built concisely. Her backstory is quite an insight in to Annapurna psyche. How she thinks, what she feels, her motivations and actions. Though this fiery attribute has yet to manifest on screen your version certainly gives her character more depth and dimension.

Coming to Swasan I don't know if AP will pose a threat to their relationship, she is quite fond of Sanskar but that can only be determined once Raginis truth comes out. But would love to see how her character comes in to play in your story. Waiting for Swara to confess her love to Sanskar and hoping for some romance in the next update. 😳

As always brilliant writing😊😊

Sorry for the late response

Originally posted by: bloomnskyrules

Please post the next OS in the series! I want to read about the reactions of Swara and Sanskar!

Originally posted by: kaku17

Thanks a lot for the pm or else I would have missed out on this wonderful part.

Annapurna, ah, that lady really does confound me. You have beautifully brought out her character traits, though I must admit, I never saw her along the lines which you have mentioned.

The paragraph where you mentioned about her being J regarding the remarkable son being born to Rp and Suju were bang on. Her jealousy and her innate resolve to make her younger son be the better one was remarkable. It is her that nature which always make me feel that she was the reason behind KAVITA'S death. I am definite that the goons were somehow sent by her, though motive can be shown as different as per the cvs liking.

Swara and sanskar part I liked and I also feel its only swara who can take on AP head on.

Waiting for the next part in your trilogy n hoping that soon swara will show AP her rightful place without stepping over boundaries.

Originally posted by: Annei123

Such a wonderful os 👏

Hats off to u

Loved it !!!!

Eagerly waiting for next part 😃

Originally posted by: laddu1691

hi

you have a beautiful flair for writing

this was an awesome piece of work

looking forward to the other elements u have mentioned

thank u for such a wonderful story

Originally posted by: piccola1

Viji, this was absolutely mindblowing ! The depth of your analysis, your research into the background, and especially the completely out of the box character sketch you have done is amazing...!

I have been wanting to reply to this, for a full day, but knew I didnt wish to leave it at a shallow "great/amazing/wow" kind of response. I wished to share with you, how much you have gripped me with the power of your thought, your articulation and your passion for writing👏.

AAA as a concept is unique..and I can fully understand why you would want to play with AP as a character..she IS a mystery! With her utter nonchalance, her poise, her regal manner and her writ is law in her house. DP may be the king, but in her home, she rules..and that is visible in the servile behaviour of her devar and his wife (notice how the razor sharp Sujata cow tows to her), in the mice like behaviour of her bahus and servants and in the imperiousness that she commands her family. What I didnt like about her, her complete disregard for anyone else's opinion when she decides SHE likes something, is what you have picked up so powerfully, and built an entire theme around it. Bravo !!😊

The character sketches of the others..Adarsh, Lakshya and very specially, Sanskar is excellent and so precise to what we see on screen..the headstrong, intelligent Sanskar, the maa ka laadla bigda hua Lucky and the "not so" Adarsh...and how she handles them..and her reading of Swara..Wow!👏

I found the ending abrupt..I dont think I'd want any of your recountings to ever end ! They bind you, grip you and make you see beyond what the eyes show..and so when they stop..you can actually feel the vacuum..and you are forced to look around for a possible end that bridges that vacuum..and fall short !😔 Do do give us some closure on this one ! I know its a OS..but this demands closure Viji !

Cant wait for Earth (it can only be the one grounded person in MM) and would love to see Air too..coz Air has the power to blow out Fire..and if DP is designated Air, he wll get all my votes !!👍🏼

Keep em coming ! And if you run out of the 5 Forces..we will find more for you !

❤️

Pic.