OS: Aetebaar (SwaSan)

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hello guys..m not new to this forum..a SwaSan fan hav been reading beautiful stories here nd I loved it .
I tried writing something ..hope u guys like it
it's again on upcoming track from my POV.

No more bak bak ..
Here is my OS



She sat there looking at the ripples in water .her reflection being disturbed with the ripples. She thought how a drop can disturb her whole image .yet her reflection was unfazed by any disturbance.she smiled at her reflection. She walked back towards their home.their comfortable home far away from any negativity ..a place where they could be themselves . their cozy and comfortable tent . better than other luxury . her thoughts drifted back to his confession ..ahaan inebriated confession wrds dat came out due to rage towards ragini and laksh .ragini who could go any length to procure her obsession. And laksh who is being ignorant to anything everything which is truth. She sighed nd got back to her wrk.and the weather got worst than an hour ago .it became too wild to control.too mysterious to be predicted accompanied by deafening silence. Fear gripped her heart .she prayed to the deity let no harm come to her family. Her family which has been through much these days.her dida maa and sanskar. She jerked out of her thoughts when she realised her mind has included him in her family.
And then she realised she hasnt been on talking terms with sanskar after he pulled that drunken act.she has been giving him a silent treatment. And he has been trying to apologise for his mistakes ..and talk to her.
But where could he be now. She remember him telling he was going to visit his mom .who is sick.and didn't want to see her bangalan bahu's face.
But than that was an hour ago .sanskar never stayed there more than fifteen minutes.maybe mom asked him to stay she told herself
Just than she heard screaming and shouting coming frm inside.sanskar she thought and ran without any second thought.

The scenario shocked her wits out.laksh was dragging sanskar by his collar frm there old bedroom.and sujata is pleading for sanskars innocence.followed by parineeta and Annapurna supporting a dishelved ragini.
She stood there like a statue trying to takin the surroundings
Laksh dragged unconscious sanskar to the hall and pushed him to the ground
"Na laksh ..sanskar aisa na kare se" pleaded a weeping sujata
"Chachi ..jo hum sab ne dekha kya wo jhooth tha ?"asked a fuming laksh
" iss sanskar ne ragini ke saath...chiii"said laksh pointing at an unconscious sanskar who was trying to get up
Swara looked at a messy ragini, parineeta covered her with a shawl
Swara couldnt voice out anything she just nodded in no nd slowly walked towards sanskar.unshed tears blurring her vision.
Sanskar had his eyes only for swara who was coming towards him.he was trying very hard to keep his eyes open and his body seems forgot to function.every time he tried to get up he slouched back onto the ground hurting himself in the process.
He some how managed to stand up with help of the couch .he couldn't even stand properly without any support
"S..s..swwaa" he again slouched back on the couch
"Laks ji laks ji..humey bacha lijiye" cried ragini who ran into laksh arms.
Nothing made sense to swara.why was ragini ...in such state..why was laksh angry why was everyone crying and above all why was sanskar being beaten up.
Sujata ran towards sanskar to support him.
There were new audience to the drama being played.DP ram and adarsh joined them.who were equally quizzed at everything.parineeta ran to clear the confusion
"Wo ragini...wo sanskar zabardasti..room" cried parineeta
"Parineeta seedha seedhe batao kya hua hai" demanded an angry durga prasad
Parineeta went onto tell how they all were busy in everything nd then they heard screams coming from swaSan old bedroom when they ran to see the commotion they were shocked to see amessy room, dishelved and pleading ragini.and sanskar arms were around raginis shoulders.her clothes torned and hair was messy.
Swara was shocked as everyone else.
Swara helped sanskar stand up
He could see anger and disgust in her eyes. Which broke his little strength which he had in him.
"Parineeta Jo keh rahi hai kya ho sach hai" asked durga prasad anger evident in his voice
"...papaji...wo sa sankar ne humare saath bat"
"NOT a word ragini...not a word against my husband" spoke swara ..her voice void as hollow as a dead person.seems like the weather outside has found a home in swara ..ruthless,angry and fierce.
There was pin drop silence for minute.
Everyone were shocked at swaras words
"Swara...tum toh humari behen ho..tumhe humara support karna chaa.." Ragini eat her wrds when she saw swaras angry eyes daring her to say anything further.she went to hide behind laksh .
Laksh came forward to punch sanskar. "Don't you dare lay even a finger on my husband .laksh maheshwari"
Laksh stopped his hand in the mid air.
Swara move forward and made him drink water
"Swara ..tumhare iss pati .ne ragini k saath"
"Stop right there laksh" said swara
Who was sprinkling water on his face to keep him awake
"Sanskar u okay ? Are u hurt? Kahin chot lagi hai ?" Swara asked him like everything around dsnt matter.
"Swara tumhe samjh nahi araha is aadmi ne kitni ghinouni harkat ki hai " asked an angry laksh
Swaa ignored laksh every word
"U okay sanskar...u sacred me..main kabse wait kar rahi thi ..aur mausam..mausam bhi kitna kharab ho raha tha...toofan bahar.."swara didn't made sense at all .all her words seems nonsense.
Everyone looked at her as she lostparineeta

" chalo ab hum apne ghar chalte hai " she help him stand up put his left arm around her shoulder and her arm around him waist almost taking his weight upon herself
Laksh pulled him back
"Not easy sanskar.tumhe toh tumhari harkat k liye main jail pahunchaunga" said laksh angry at sanskar for his crime and swara for her concern towards sanskar
"Kis ilzaam main laksh maheshwari ?" Asked swara raising her voice
"Are u fool or an ignorant? Can't u see u own sister's state?" Asked laksh
"Neither I'm fool nor blind ..I can see fine.but I choose not to believe everything which is being shown" she answered eyeing ragini who quivered and moved towards Annapurna and parineeta
"Do you hear yourself swara?" Asked laksh
"And do you realise the crap you are speaking and blaming such horrendous crime on is your brother ?" Asked swara
"Je sab iss bangalan chori ki wajah se hua hai..na je uss pagal ragini se badla leti ..na Mara beta ragini ki chaal main phansta" cried sujata
"Chachiji..aap ye kya keh rahi hai" cried ragini
"Je main sach keh rahi hoon..jhagda tum beheno ka hai Mara bte ko kyon beech main dal rahi hai.." Asked sujata
"Chachiji...hum sach keh rahe hai ..sanskar ne humare saath"
"Are sure of it ragini ?" Asked swara walking towards ragini who moved back in fear
"Ahh...sw.swara ..hum jhooth kyun.."
"Swara ye kaisa ghatiya sawal hai?" Asked Annapurna
"Ghatiya wo ilzaam hai Jo aap Sab sanskar par daal rahe hai " said swara
"Swara tum pagal hogayi ho...hum sabne dekha sanskar.."
"Dekhte wohi hai Jo dikhaya jata hai laksh maheshwari"
"Can't you see your sister is shocked?" Asked laksh
"Can't you see my husband is unconscious ?" Asked swara
"Tum kehna kya chahti ho ? "
"How can an unconscious person force himself on a very much conscious person ?" Asked swara
"Sanskar ne sharab..." Said ragini
"Hum sabne dekha sanskar ek sharabi hai aur usne sharab peekar kitna hungama kiya tha kuch din pehle " said laksh
"Sharab toh sanskar bahar se pekar aaye thay us din..aaj kahan se mili unhe ..woh bhi is ghar main ? Ragini tumne sharab layi thi ?" Asked swara
"Kya bakwas kar rahi ho swara..hum ..hum sharab .?"replied ragini in anger
" batao ragini sanskar ko sharab kahan mili..jab wo yahan aye tab toh unhone pee nhi thi ..aur wo bahut der se mom k saath that..achanak humare old bedroom? ..baat kuch samjh nahi aayi" swara pointed out
"Sanskar bhaiyya chachiji k saath hi thay bahut der se" said parineeta
"Dekha ragini parineeta bhabhi ne bhi dekha ..to batao sanskar room tak pahunche kaise aur unhe sharab mili kaise?" Asked swara
Seeing that everyone almost agreeing with swara ..and her plan of breaking swaras support seem a distant dream ..she changed her plan and acted to faint just when swara threw glass full of ice cold water on her face
Ragini and everyone were shocked at swara's act
"Ab thik ho ? Ab batao..sanskar ne tumhare saath zabardasti ki hai ya tumne sanskar k saath ..u know..." Said swara folding her hands
"Swara" shouted laksh
"Swra kaise ghenoni baat kar rahe ho " cried ragini
"Batao ragini..tumne kaunsa drug diya sankar ko ..warna main attempt to murder k ilzaam main abhi tumhe jail karwa sakti hoon...jahan tak baat hai tumhare sanskar par ilzaam ki uska koi witness nahi hai...sabne srf unconscious sanskar aur tumhe dekha ..but main sab sabeet kar sakti hoon" warned swara
"Swara humari baat" pleaded ragini
"Kaunsa drug diya " asked swara jerking ragini
"Swara ..hum ne kuch nhi" cried ragini
"Swara chodo usey" said laksh coming towards swaragini
Swara raised her hand to stop him
"Okay ..chalo tumhara medical test karwate hai.test reports main sab pata chal jayega ..aur ye bhi ke sanskar k system main alcohol hai ya nahi" she said taking ragini's wrist
"Swara"
"Chalo ragini" said swara her eyes spitting swara
"Swara Hume dard horaha hai" said ragini trying wiggle out of swaras grip
Swara didn't budge and dragged ragini
"Be..behoshi..ki dawa" uttered ragini
Swara left her wrist.
Everyone looked at ragini in disgust and anger
"Ragini" said Annapurna in anger
"Hum kya karte ..sanskar aur swara humare shadi shuda zindagi kharab ..karna ..chahte" cried ragini
"Itna ghinouna ilzaam? Kaise ragini wo iss ghar k beta hai" said Annapurna
"Beta samjha hota toh vishwas bhi karte na badi maa" said swara walking towards sanskar who still slouched on couch again and the bruises on his face turning blue
"Mom kya aap meri help kardengi ? Sanskar ko ghar le Jane k liya?" Asked swara to sujata ..who didn't deny seeing swaras anger
Ragini was silently crying ..everyone were ashamed of her act and were ashamed at themselves for believing ragini and blaming sanskar of such dirty crime.
It was eerie silent when a slaping sound cut through the silence everyone looked up to see ragini caressing her cheek and swara standing right in front of her
"Tumhari har galti to maaf kardiya..par ab nahi ..iss dafa bilkulll bhi nahi kyunki jispar tumne ilzaam lagaya wo insaan par mujhe sabse zyada vishwas..aur tumhai is ghatiya harkat ne to mera hausla mera vishwas bahut bada diya hai..ab iss vishwas ke rishte ko koi buri nazar nahi tod sakti" said swara. Who looked more like a wounded tigress trying to protect her den. Tigress is sure fierce ..but a wounded tigress protecting her family is the most fierce sight one would ever want to witness.
She walked out with sanskar supporting him.who tipsyly walking looking at his companion with pride ,respect,admiration and maybe love?
And she walked with her head held up high .and her best friend who's name was clear on any dirt .she made it clear DAT no dirt could come anywhere near her
And a pair of eyes were weeping in jealous anger and heartbreak..he thought ..he lost something he never had.swara was never her true self around laksh .the day she accepted his love was out of courtesy..and nothing else.
A pair of eyes looked at them in envy .for being the idle couple. How she always thought her and adarsh made an idle couple..nd now they are not even near normal couple leave alone perfect couple.
Two pair of eyes blessed them ..coz they hav seen life this is wat makes relation stronger ..the protector of relation is
faith.they hav been through it and they know it thought AP and DP
A pair of eyes weeped at loss of everything..trust love and being loved.swara tumne ab toh bharosa bhi cheen liya cried ragini
There was a pair of eye who was happy and sad at the same tym.happy her son got such a partner who could fight the wrld for him sad that she realised it very late.

For each moment I will be with you,
Every breath,every step
Till the end of eternity .



Hope u guys like it
Drop in ur feedback/comments

~shab





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Posted: 9 years ago
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Awesome OS dear 👏
Loved the way you described Swara supporting her husband 😳
I really wish to see it in the serial as well 😳 I hope everyone will get to know her truth.
Here Swara proved Sanskar's innocence very quickly and i loved it 👏 But i know in the show they will drag it unecessarily 😕
Anyways great work 👍🏼 Do write more 😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Its so amazing,,, Loved Swara protectiveness and fierceness.
I wish in show itself something like this happen😳
you're an amazing writer... please do write more... 😳
Edited by Lavender_Love - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Wow this is amazing yar...😊👏
Loved Swara...😳 The way she supported Sanky is amazing...👏
Hope to see Swara slapping ragini atleast once in the show as well..
Do write more...😊
Edited by Asha122 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Oh my god this was beautiful... Loved it completely... 😉 😊 ... I hope something like dis is shown on the episode tooo... Ragini shud be exposed like dis only 😡 ... Evil phyco ... ND swara a tigeress for her hubby ... Loved it... 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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very well written dear do write more :)))
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Posted: 9 years ago
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It was so gud and awesome...
Do write more os or ss on swasan...
I'll love to read...
Do pm me while updating any stories...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hope this actually happens!
Nicely written. 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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can i share this on my page cz i loved it :*😛😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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just one word.. *Hands Down*

I so so so wish to see the same in the serial.. please lord.. show us something like this.. please

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