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Sumi_162710

@Sumi_162710

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Posted: 15 years ago

#561

Awe.....I love this one Bhoomi....gr8 one!! The way the girl is conveying her love n care for her husband....its gr8!! I mean....every lacking is being seen from a gr8er, a larger point of view....and thats really lovely Bhoomi.

I wud point out these lines specially....bcoz I really loved them a loooooooooottt..........

Mere kadmo ki raftar pairoo key nas sey judi hai,

Dhadkan ki raftaar tumharey Dil key taarr sey judi hai,

And yes even these lines r lovely....

Sakhiyaan sawaal karti ,"woh tumhey bahon mey uthakar nahi chal sakta",

Main kehti ,To kya huaa Apni bahoo mey samakar palko par bithakar jo rakhta….

And haan....the other lines r awesum as well....but pura poem to quote nahi kar sakti na....so do wid these only....hehe. Gr8 work Bhoomi....love you for this!!

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ssh57

@ssh57

Inactive

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#562

Hi bhoomi,
A very touching poem. In real life, i feel its very difficult for a normal person to just accept a disabled person as their life partner, unless there is so much love between them. The whole poem was wonderful but I liked these lines the most -

Pati sang chalney mey mujhey Khushi , garv aur thodi laajj Aati,

Sharabi kadam nahi ,jo sharmindagi mehsus hoti,

Sakhiyaan sawaal karti ,"woh tumhey bahon mey uthakar nahi chal sakta",

Main kehti ,To kya huaa Apni bahoo mey samakar palko par bithakar jo rakhta….

Usey pati sang chalne mein laaj aati hai sharmindagi nahi, that was superb.Then to face the world so boldly and give them 'mooh thod jawab' was fantastic. 👏👏👏👏👏👏 Love ssh57

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adi_gupta

@adi_gupta

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+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#563

lovely poem bhoomi
aaj he mein pyar ke barre mein or is ke ahsaas ke barre mein soch rahi thi ke kassie log pyar mein kissi ke kami ko swikaar ker lete hein ....lkassi unki bahut se baat ko maan lete hein

mer bahut se swaal ke jawab pata nahi kyo bus is poem ko padtein padtein mil gaye .......
uska apne pati per ye viswas dekh ker laga ke pyar he viswas ka first step hein jassi unhe unme koi kami nazar nahi aayi
uska apne pati ka saath dena ye sochna ke vo sampurn hein
muje bahut acha laga
Mere kadmo ki raftar pairoo key nas sey judi hai,
Dhadkan ki raftaar tumharey Dil key taarr sey judi hai,
Apahij pati hai , kehkar log kyon daya dikhatey hain,
Hastey, ungliyan dikhatey log, meri nafrat key patr ban jatey hain

hum apni daya se kyo kissi ka man ahat ker te hein kyo kissi ko neecha dekht hein ..her kissi ko pyar ke jarurat hein an ke dyaa ke us viswas ke jarurat hein jo hum khud per hein

Sakhiyaan sawaal karti ,"woh tumhey bahon mey uthakar nahi chal sakta",
Main kehti ,To kya huaa Apni bahoo mey samakar palko par bithakar jo rakhta….

bhoomi in lines ne muje mere unsulje se kuch swalo ke jawab de diye
thx for solving some puzzles for me

Edited by adi_gupta - 15 years ago

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monika

@monikaseth

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 15 years ago

#564

Mere kadmo ki raftar pairoo key nas sey judi hai,
Dhadkan ki raftaar tumharey Dil key taarr sey judi hai,
Apahij pati hai , kehkar log kyon daya dikhatey hain,
Hastey, ungliyan dikhatey log, meri nafrat key patr ban jatey hain

Awesome , Mind Blowing , Emotional , but perfectly showing pain of that guy but his love make his life more happy with her love and support i love it 👏👏👏
👏
Sakhiyaan sawaal karti ,"woh tumhey bahon mey uthakar nahi chal sakta",
Main kehti ,To kya huaa Apni bahoo mey samakar palko par bithakar jo rakhta…

awesome great she said it true palko mein bithakar jo rakha hai awesome👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏

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manali

@Revolutionbreez

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#565

Wow bhoomi !!!

another wonderful creation ! 👏 👏 👏

Once again it shows that LOVE is truly an eternal feeling....

Physical attributes may be the trigger factors, but they cant be the lasting factors...

It's your heart and emotions in the end which forms the strong basis for this eternal relationship!

like here, though the husband is a handicap, that hardly matters for his wife...

For she has seen what a gem of a person her husband is ! 😊

And since, their hearts are connected, she can perceive his deformity in a very different perspective, and that to in a very nice way, such that his shortcomings seems to be boon for her some way...

I liked when she said, though he limps, but why should she be ashamed? because, its not like he is swaying or something because he is drunk....

I tell you, I love your poems for the Positive vibes they convey !😃

keep it up dear !!!👏 ⭐️ ⭐️ 👏

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#566

Originally posted by: sumaiya wahid
Awe.....I love this one Bhoomi....gr8 one!! The way the girl is conveying her love n care for her husband....its gr8!! I mean....every lacking is being seen from a gr8er, a larger point of view....and thats really lovely Bhoomi.

I wud point out these lines specially....bcoz I really loved them a loooooooooottt..........

Mere kadmo ki raftar pairoo key nas sey judi hai,

Dhadkan ki raftaar tumharey Dil key taarr sey judi hai,

And yes even these lines r lovely....

Sakhiyaan sawaal karti ,"woh tumhey bahon mey uthakar nahi chal sakta",

Main kehti ,To kya huaa Apni bahoo mey samakar palko par bithakar jo rakhta'.

And haan....the other lines r awesum as well....but pura poem to quote nahi kar sakti na....so do wid these only....hehe. Gr8 work Bhoomi....love you for this!!

Hi Sumaiya,

glad u liked it.. it is in a story form an yup she loves him and doesnt find anything ashmeful if her hsuband has a disability in walking properly.. tried to convey her point of view and that she doesnt need any sympathy..

glad dear u liked the poem and those lines.. yup in friend circle woman do a lot of bitching na and they do go toooo far to rpove how lucky one is how unlucky the other is..but its not the case atall...

Good ot know u liked thepoem and yup u read it really fast i guess... and commented on it as welll very quickly i must say..thanks for reading and with ur kind words encrouraging me..t c

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#567

Originally posted by: ssh57
Hi bhoomi,
A very touching poem. In real life, i feel its very difficult for a normal person to just accept a disabled person as their life partner, unless there is so much love between them. The whole poem was wonderful but I liked these lines the most -

Pati sang chalney mey mujhey Khushi , garv aur thodi laajj Aati,

Sharabi kadam nahi ,jo sharmindagi mehsus hoti,

Sakhiyaan sawaal karti ,"woh tumhey bahon mey uthakar nahi chal sakta",

Main kehti ,To kya huaa Apni bahoo mey samakar palko par bithakar jo rakhta'.

Usey pati sang chalne mein laaj aati hai sharmindagi nahi, that was superb.Then to face the world so boldly and give them 'mooh thod jawab' was fantastic. 👏👏👏👏👏👏 Love ssh57

Hi Shardha,

Glad u liked the poem dear. In real life its difficult for sure but i have seen such woman and they feel all normal and the way they love theri husband and the way he cares i dont feel they need sympathy ..but ya little we can get jealous..lol.. i have seen few and its all about how much u love the other.. she doesnt do more than what she shoudl ..but he does a lot and she is thats why proud to be his wife..and thats what i wanted to bring out thorugh this poem...

very rightly the lines u have pasted and the words u have highlighted are some words whcih even i owudl like to bring out ..as woman whoes husband or boy friends who are into wrong doings should be looked at with pity as they are stayign with such people even afrter knwoing all that.. nor these women ... glad to know u liked and thanks for reading, commenting ..ur comments always make me feel where i can work on and where my thoughts were brought out rightly..tc

dear

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#568

Originally posted by: adi_gupta
lovely poem bhoomi
aaj he mein pyar ke barre mein or is ke ahsaas ke barre mein soch rahi thi ke kassie log pyar mein kissi ke kami ko swikaar ker lete hein ....lkassi unki bahut se baat ko maan lete hein

mer bahut se swaal ke jawab pata nahi kyo bus is poem ko padtein padtein mil gaye .......
uska apne pati per ye viswas dekh ker laga ke pyar he viswas ka first step hein jassi unhe unme koi kami nazar nahi aayi
uska apne pati ka saath dena ye sochna ke vo sampurn hein
muje bahut acha laga
Mere kadmo ki raftar pairoo key nas sey judi hai,
Dhadkan ki raftaar tumharey Dil key taarr sey judi hai,
Apahij pati hai , kehkar log kyon daya dikhatey hain,
Hastey, ungliyan dikhatey log, meri nafrat key patr ban jatey hain

hum apni daya se kyo kissi ka man ahat ker te hein kyo kissi ko neecha dekht hein ..her kissi ko pyar ke jarurat hein an ke dyaa ke us viswas ke jarurat hein jo hum khud per hein

Sakhiyaan sawaal karti ,"woh tumhey bahon mey uthakar nahi chal sakta",
Main kehti ,To kya huaa Apni bahoo mey samakar palko par bithakar jo rakhta'.

bhoomi in lines ne muje mere unsulje se kuch swalo ke jawab de diye
thx for solving some puzzles for me

Hi Adi,

ohh u were thinking about love and so many thigns and here i wrote this poem.. i am glad my poem made u feel so much and try to go across thoguhts discuss with ur self and feel a lot to understnad things better.

Glad that u liked the poem..those lines u flet were well written.. and u felt some complexity has been removed and can think abotu things much easily..i guess my poem has not done that much but yes ur mind ur heart has agreed on the same thats why complex things become easy to get...

dear i havnt solved the puzzle for u ..i am sure u did on ur own and loved ot know my poem just eased ur urge to solve it.. luv..tc.. keep smiling thorugh out and thansk for encouragign my work..

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#569

Originally posted by: monikaseth
Mere kadmo ki raftar pairoo key nas sey judi hai,
Dhadkan ki raftaar tumharey Dil key taarr sey judi hai,
Apahij pati hai , kehkar log kyon daya dikhatey hain,
Hastey, ungliyan dikhatey log, meri nafrat key patr ban jatey hain

Awesome , Mind Blowing , Emotional , but perfectly showing pain of that guy but his love make his life more happy with her love and support i love it 👏👏👏
👏
Sakhiyaan sawaal karti ,"woh tumhey bahon mey uthakar nahi chal sakta",
Main kehti ,To kya huaa Apni bahoo mey samakar palko par bithakar jo rakhta'

awesome great she said it true palko mein bithakar jo rakha hai awesome👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏

Hi Monika dear,

I am glad monu , u liked this poem so much and enjoyed reading it.. felt the love she has and liked the way she replied to her friends..and her point of view at lookign at things... u liked it and i love everytime to get response reply comments from u with such warmth and thansk for always reading my work with such pleasure..i am always touched dear..tc

Bhoomi

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Bhoomi

@bhoomikauttam

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 15 years ago

#570

Originally posted by: Revolutionbreez
Wow bhoomi !!!
another wonderful creation ! 👏 👏 👏

Once again it shows that LOVE is truly an eternal feeling....

Physical attributes may be the trigger factors, but they cant be the lasting factors...

It's your heart and emotions in the end which forms the strong basis for this eternal relationship!

like here, though the husband is a handicap, that hardly matters for his wife...

For she has seen what a gem of a person her husband is ! 😊

And since, their hearts are connected, she can perceive his deformity in a very different perspective, and that to in a very nice way, such that his shortcomings seems to be boon for her some way...

I liked when she said, though he limps, but why should she be ashamed? because, its not like he is swaying or something because he is drunk....

I tell you, I love your poems for the Positive vibes they convey !😃

keep it up dear !!!👏 ⭐️ ⭐️ 👏

Hi ,

aww glad that u felt its a creation.. whatever i felt i wrote and glad u read this one. yes love is an eternal feelign and its not just love but its also in reality not necessary that any physcial disability if it can be seen it harms the relationnship..many times and most of the times unseen disabilites ruin the relationship..as we want to hide it, and never its seen outside .. i dont think disability physcial can destroy relationship..when u go with the thoguht and know the person cant run that fast u think about the journey with him slowly but how much u can share...

glad dear that u liked this one.. and felt shortcomings becomign boon.. as love is blessed in trememdous form... yes those lines were there to show how much she looks at things from a much broader point of view..and she has nothign to be asheamed..

u feel my poems brign postive vibes..aww nice to know that dear..

thansk for ur lovely comments..tc

Bhoomi