*Rabir FF: True Love...Note, Chap 55 @ pg 143, 145 (2/1) - Page 113

Originally posted by: Aarti.1

So I started blushing a bit as I read your disclaimer since I have never read an FF before so I had absolutely no idea what to expect and your disclaimer only scared me about how explicit you would get. Boy was it explicit, a bit too much I honestly thought. I think you write the subtle nuances of holding hands and hidden glances so well that you didn't need to go so much into detail. Of course those are just my own thoughts. Who am I to say what you should and shouldn't post? I do hope that there aren't any more chapters like this because it kind of sickens me a bit to read such stuff. Sorry for such a strong review, but I feel that I should be honest with you since you have so much potential in writing a sweet meaning romance rather than a hot trashy one. You don't need to give into B-grade stuff to gain readership. Your strong point is your writing and your shouldn't resort to cheap descriptions of sex because I think that takes away from the beauty of the other parts and leaves a bad taste in people's mouth (at least it did for me). Sorry if you felt bad reading these words but good also comes with bad and I couldn't sugar-coat the words to only shower praises on something that I didn't necessarily like.

Best,

Aarti

Originally posted by: Aarti.1

That was an intelligent update. I gather from what Sneha said that she is some sort of psychiatrist that specializes with rape victims. It was very interesting to read about the science behind all this, so I gather that you are well-versed in this topic? I do like that Rachna reached out for Kabir this time and that she was able to trust him this time around. I'm too eager to read what will happen next so I won't ramble on in this part.

Best,

Aarti

Originally posted by: Aarti.1

I gathered this time from your note that you are in school, so I presume you are studying some sort of medicinal science since all your related chapters about the science have been such well researched and thoroughly informative posts. I have to say that I loved the re-emergence of the flashback in this chapter. I think you write those really well and you should use that technique more often. The entire situation with Rachna still has me confused, but I guess you are going to run this track simultaneously with Gunjan's track. It was nice to see Kabir talking with Sneha and showing her the mirror about how Gunjan and Rachna's actions were not too different from each other. It seems to me that Sneha is most likely going to call Gunjan back home now and rectify the situation.

Best,

Aarti

PS: I got the dreaded note about not being able to make more than 10 posts in 24 hours so I have to stop here tonight (though again I was able to make 11 posts, so go figure).

PPS: The review that I wrote for the last part I read.

Wow, what a twist you put in? Firstly I loved the entire part about Gunjan reuniting with her family. She seems to have really missed out on a lot in these past few months that she has been away. Now as for the surprising revelation that Mayank assaulted Rachna, I don't know if I am ready to believe that. After all, Gunjan has been living with Mayank for the past few months and she seems quite happy in her own marriage so it makes me think that perhaps Rachna has some sort of misunderstanding. Or of course Mayank could be the true evil here and Gunjan might actually be hiding her misery. I am looking forward to reading about the sisters' reunion since Sneha has called Rachna and Kabir for a surprise lunch. Also, I wonder if it was just a filler bit when you threw in the part about Karan and Rhea or if that has any significance to the overall plot.

Best,

Aarti

Originally posted by: Nuritzur

When Kabir Say to sneha that he lost the girl he love with was one of the hurt part. I understand Rachna it not easy to be woman that cant have kids and KT Really like Kids. I am maybe will choose the bad idea but maybe it good idea that Kabir take the car. maybe then they can think about what happened.

I like how you write the part in the car Look like Rachna will never leave him even he will be away.

Kabir don't know that is the same Rachna she just want to give him the best gift that woman can ever give for her husband I hope they fix that out. they both need each other. they both pass same not easy days.

again Great write dear. keep it up

Originally posted by: nividances

We will just conveniently forget that Skype exists to gloss over this error and leave it as something where I exercised my creative liberty.😛

Let's also assume that Karan was just so busy in his studies that he never got time to talk on the phone with his bhabhi. While we're at it, let's make Kabir so forgetful that he never mentioned his wife's name to his brother and he never sent any of the wedding pics to Karan either.😆

Originally posted by: nividances

Oh you cannot even imagine the twisty ride that you are in for if you decide to continue reading. I won't say too much lest I spoil the surprise for you, but there are more shocks that await you in later chapters. Thank you for liking the way I wrote the chapter.😊