Mayan n Rabir ff [Play Date] -Completed Last chap @pg 49 - Page 31

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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: hapo

Loved it saranya...
Thanks a lot for the update...
I was do happy wen i saw the pm...
Wonderful update...
Kabir teasing rachna was just super cute...
This s for u again👏

I should thank you for ur support
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: hangok

you are really too good,
like the scene in the hospital, hope their plans dont fail and create more problems for mayan...

and now im about rachna and kabir alone in the house, and to add all his afforts for rachna...was just great ...
and rachna is too much, did she really belive that he has made this all for her mom😆

hope we can see more of such scene

great work and thanks for pm

Thanks for ur precious comments,Rachna s little innocent here lol
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Posted: 10 years ago
Saranya i am so sorry for being always so late even now i sumtimes think that may be u forgot me but i know u didnt and thanks for that 😳 👏 thanks for all the pm gal even when i was not reading but still love u loads for that 😳 for chap13 i shud say omg what a cul and locked rum updates 😳 first of all i was sad seeing gunjan ignoring rachana 😳 then rabir locked them and by your grace they were too locked and give us such a beautiful lip lock 😳 sumtimes after reading ur updates i yhink to have relation like this 😳 amazing upatd and atlast mayan are together and accepted their feelings 👏 i was missing theirhot scenes too
😳 lovely update and thanks for it and i am again sorry but what to do i m getting hell busy in my studies not even geting tym for my ff which seems will be incomplete now as i am not avle to complete and even the schedule is like what i cant even imagine
Sorry for late reply again
Awesome update as always
Love ur writing as always 😃 😳 👏 hats off
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Posted: 10 years ago
😉😉

Originally posted by: mkakkar93

Saranya i am so sorry for being always so late even now i sumtimes think that may be u forgot me but i know u didnt and thanks for that 😳 👏 thanks for all the pm gal even when i was not reading but still love u loads for that 😳 for chap13 i shud say omg what a cul and locked rum updates 😳 first of all i was sad seeing gunjan ignoring rachana 😳 then rabir locked them and by your grace they were too locked and give us such a beautiful lip lock 😳 sumtimes after reading ur updates i yhink to have relation like this 😳 amazing upatd and atlast mayan are together and accepted their feelings 👏 i was missing theirhot scenes too
😳 lovely update and thanks for it and i am again sorry but what to do i m getting hell busy in my studies not even geting tym for my ff which seems will be incomplete now as i am not avle to complete and even the schedule is like what i cant even imagine
Sorry for late reply again
Awesome update as always
Love ur writing as always 😃 😳 👏 hats off

ohmy gosh,am I dreaming
Hey am sooo happy seeing ur comments
Don't dare to think I will forget u,I always missed u
Even thought to pm you but felt it might be disturbing
Feel so spl to know you reading t even in ur busy times
n u will get a good relationship like this soon lol
U don't need to say me sorry n all dear..love you always
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Posted: 10 years ago
wow saranya😳👏👏this one was very cool and hot at the same time😳a day before yesterday i was not able to read all as was feeling sleepy but read it know oh wow
first of all gunjan pain was clearly visible omg i cried for her at that time
but all now are on mission mayan thats pretty gud i would love to see what these foursome thought for them
and kabir making rachna week in that dark yet beautiful night and amidst the blue sky,he was mesmerized with shining beauty of rachna that was very well written 👏
then kabir accepting his love and now he is on a mission to impress rachna mom 😳
that was so gud and i was laughing when kabir caught rachna eatting food
that was lovely update thanks a lot for it
thats chap 14
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Posted: 10 years ago
wow wow wow
day by day i am getting in love with your writing 😳👏 first mayank acted very well and even rachana started crying omg hahahaa😆👏 then kabir looking at rachana lips😳
I WISH THAT WERE CANDLES TO DIE IN YOUR BREADTH THAT WAS MESMERIZING😳
KABIR DID SO MUCH SPECIAL FOR RACHANA 😳😳😳LOVELY
But how rachana think that it will be for her mom😆 that was lovely and pretty good 😳👏loved itt to the care😳
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Posted: 10 years ago
Waiting eagerly as always
Edited by mkakkar93 - 10 years ago
saravathi thumbnail
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Posted: 10 years ago
Chap 17:
Gunjan was sitting next to her Dad feeding him lunch.Gunjan's mom entered along with Mayank.Seeing Mayank Gunjan's Dad raised his body from bed Mayank:Uncle pls dont get up
Gunjan's Dad:Mayank,Gunjan's mom said so much about you,Am too proud to see someone like you in this age
Mayank:Uncle before you am a small kid,I heard how much u helped people of this village,for a kind hearted person like you nothin wrong will happen,you will get well soon.
Gunjan:Ya Daddy you will be good soon
Gunjan's Dad:Mayank am fine only Gunjan s crying whole day,Pls advice her
Mayank:Uncle can I take ur daughter out,I feel she needs sone change of environment
Gunjan's Dad:Sure, Gunjan behave good to him.
While they left together
Gunjan's mom:They both look good together
Gunjan's Dad:I like the boy too,Who know's whats written in Gunjan's future
Gunjan n Mayank heard the comment hiding behind the walls n gave a tight hug.
Gunjan:Mummy Daddy likes you Mayank
Mayank:What about their daughter
Gunjan blushed n broke the hug
Mayank:Say Gunjan
Gunjan:I think She loves you
Mayank:Can u recommend her to give me a kiss
Gunjan took his palm to give a kiss but he pointed his lips.
Gunjan:Friends waiting for us come soon.
Mayank tried to stop her but she ran to her friends.
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Rachna:Am so happy for u guys but now we need to be more careful,They might talk to u both about it,You should act well that time.
Kabir:Rachna why dont u stop ur lectures n let them enjoy their moment
Gunjan n Mayank were in a eyelock n didnt listen to Rachna at all
Rachna:You r right let them spend time,lets go home
Kabir n Rachna in car
Rachna:Atlast our mission is going in right way
Kabir:But my mission s left
Rachna:What's your
Kabir:To find my girl
Rachna:Oh is it? All the best my dear Kabir
She said opening the car door in front of her home.Kabir admired her hair jumping everytime as he ran in to home.When Kabir entered home he found house too noisy.Rachna's sister n her husband have come.All were in some argument but seeing Rabir they stopped it.
Rachna:Di you here,
She ran n hug her sis,but stopped seeing her teary eyed.Understanding the situation Kabir left to his room silently.
Rachna:Somebody say me what happen
Rachna's Dad:Rachna our business s going in loss nowadays
Rachna:But Jiju was seeing it well
Rachna's sister:No Rachna Dad asked him to take care,But this business s new to him n he took risk to increase market but it was a failure
Rachna:So what we can all make it big again.Daddy pls dont give up.
But her Dad left from there hiding his tears.
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In terrace
Rachna was alone n deep in thoughts starring at sky.
Kabir:Hey beautiful,counting stars?
Rachna:Pls Kabir am not in mood ,let me be alone
Kabir sat near by her n both their hands were touching.
Kabir:I know whats happening in home Rachna,its you who should support them today n u r here crying.
Rachna:I want to support them Kabir but dunno how
Kabir:look in to my eyes Rachna
Rachna turned to him n her teary eyes looked in to his.
Kabir:Why you worried when am near you
He wiped her tears n Rachna remained locked in his eyes
Kabir:You trust me right,I will make everything right,Smile a little Rachna
Rachna was so badly in need of support n his words gave her more confidence n she hugged him.Kabir who missed her embrace wanted to held her in his arm for long time but he felt wrong to take advantage of that situation.Rachna broke the hug feeling shy.
Kabir:I think we should go down
Rachna in her thoughts" Why he avoiding me,He didnt even hug me,He cant stay for sometime with me too?Did he think am behind him I cant get this Kabir at all.
In morning
Rachna woke up early n sat with newspaper magazines to see how to market their handicrafts business.Kabir came in to her room without knocking
Rachna was only wearing Salwar top n on seeing Kabir in her room she got shocked n pulled her bedsheet to cover her bare legs
Rachna screamed Get out
Kabir:Am sorry sorry,I will come later
Rachna took her pant n wore it scolding Kabir badly n,opened the door.
Kabir's eyes directly went to check if she wore her pant on or not n she was throwing a kill you look.
Rachna:What,Say now
Kabir pushed her hand n went into her room n sat on bed.Seeing the magazines Kabir gave disgusting expression .
Kabir:Whats all this ,In which century r u,Come on. Rachna its century of E read n u r behind magazines.
Rachna:But am searching for any similar Ads
Kabir opened his laptop n showed her whatever he collected.He said all his ideas of marketting n Rachna was impressed.
Rachna:But when did u do all this?
Kabir:Night , Did you forget I promised you I will help you
Rachna:Whole night, what didnt you sleep?
Kabir:Are you mad,I cant sleep untill I complete my mission.
Rachna:So helping me s ur mission now. Not searching your girlfriend
Rachna questioned him raising her eyebrows.
Kabir:You r too intelligent Rachna
Kabir to himself" Both my mission will be completed same time "
Rachna n Kabir together started to work together in creating a website.
Mayank n Gunjan joined them.
Gunjan:Rachna am so happy n proud of you that u r supporting ur family
Rachna:I didn do anything All thanks to Kabir.
Mayank:Kabir s best in this
Rachna:Ya I never knew he is this much talented
Kabir:Rachna its only the start,we need to advertise it which s more challenging
Rachna:You asked me not to worry while u there,So its your problem now
Gunjan Rachna n Mayank giggled while Kabir gave a shock look.
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In evening
Mayank:Guys take a break. from morning u r working,Why dont you both go for a walk
Kabir:No u both take Rachna with you,I have small work
Rachna closed the laptop n pulled Kabir's hand.
Kabir:Rachna u go pls
Rachna:If am ur friend u should come now
Rachna placed her hand on her hip n waited for his answer.
Kabir:As u command
Gunjan:Something smells fishy here
Rachna:Nothin like that Gunjan we just friendsFriends Kabir said with disappointment.
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Kabir:Hey Rachna this place s too nice,so greenish
Rachna:From my childhood whenever I feel stressed I will come here,This pure air will make that magic happen
Rachna lecturing about the beauty of place n Kabir admired her small movements.
Kabir:Yes its truly beautiful
As they walked Kabir held Rachna's hand n Rachna too enjoyed it.
Gunjan:They both look cute together
Mayank:Yes Gunjan I wish they join like us.
Gunjan:First all the problems settle soon then lets talk to them.
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Late night,
Rachna woke up from sleep disturbed n she was not getting sleep again,She came out to take water n found still there was light in boys room n walked to it.Kabir was working in his lap.
Rachna:What r u doing still Kabir
Kabir:Hey you,Didnt sleep yet
Rachna:First u go to sleep
Kabir:Rachna I have pending work n moreover its a new place so I am not getting sleep
Rachna:So that's your problem,hmmm get up
Kabir stood from bed in confusion n Rachna took his hand n ran to terrace
Kabir:Why you took me here
Rachna:Shhh don't make sound
Rachna sat down the floor with her legs stretched.n she pointed her lap to Kabir.
Kabir:What?
Rachna:Oh god are you kid?Come on lay on my laps
Kabir:Are you sure?
Rachna got irritated n pulled his hand n he slided down n fell on,floor.
Kabir smiled n placed his head on her lap n he raised his head to look at her
Rachna:Hope you will get some sleep now
Kabir:Thanks a lot Rachna,You r so sweet,You know this s the best moment of my life
Rachna:Shhh slp first
Rachna leaned back on wall n dozed off to sleep
Kabir lost his sleep totally,for him it was like dream come true.He admired her whole night n placed his hand over his chest n without his knowledge he too dozed off.Knowing their love,The moon n the stars reduced their brightness to let them sleep peacefully.
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Posted: 10 years ago
I am right withy my guessing?
@Saranya it is beautiful update for Mayan's side.

But Rabir had to go long way i think.Just started their way.But is it feeling?means special feelings?i can't understand.

Somewhere i fell Kabir didn't want to take advantage of Rachana and Rachana is misguiding that.

But last part was beautiful.Mayank and Gunjan doubted but Rachana oh no!not again.

The strory is moving slowly but steadily from Rabir's side.

Thank you for your fab update
Edited by parmarA - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: parmarA

Hello saranya.Posting new chap?

Yes dear

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