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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: sbp1971

Shruti, that was just too perfect for words. It was very emotional and so like what Ahem is feeling now. You are doing an absolutely wonderful job in describing his guilt and at the same time wanting to be close to her. I can't wait to read more. Please update soon.



Thanks so much Shilpa. Your comments mean a lot to me. I want so much that Ahem should live his guilt without letting a trace of his sadness being revealed to her.

He has a lot to work upon to get her love which she already does but only he has pushed it deep into her and only he will bring it out.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: 5cents

Shruti, abs super duper⭐️...very emotional and LOVELY👏. This part is so well described goes with his present state of mind...I just watched fridays episode & it flows so well with it...

He could not help his anger conceal his guilt and frustration at not being able to control the present as he could not change the past.
JUst WOW!!! Your thoughts abt Ahem's feeling and his inner desperation is spot on. Really, the past hurts given by him won't heal so soon😭

The empty bed stood a testimony of their bitter past and he was feeling utterly helpless.
This past brought tears to my eyes...I'm sure in the future we'll get a sc like this...beautiful and very emotional😭

He wanted to hug her and tell her that he was there for her and wanted her to be by his side but the path from his heart to his mouth was too long to be traversed by words easily.
The past is bitter and he just can't go back in time and make it BETTER. The turmoil is so well depicted by you...

All I can say is keep up the good writing *CHEERS*


I have no words Tina to show my gratitude to your appraisal! You have said it all. Thanks for the boost and liking those moments I wanted to depict in their relationship. It feels good that they touched your heart!
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Posted: 13 years ago
#43

Originally posted by: navyab

Shruts...lovely part...

Ahem is looking at the effects of what he did to Gopi & his relationship with love filled heart...& hence it is killing him now...the worriedness on her part, being scared of him , taking care of him was always there but since he did not care for her, it did not bother him then...but he knows he is responsible for what has happened...
I like the Ahem here as he is not looking at the situation & justifying it on it...rather he is only thinking about his behavior towards her & he realised it...
Though hard Ahem needs to go thru this to understand what true love is & how lucky he is for being blessed by a wife who did not give up on him !!!
Waiting for the next part Shruts 😉 !


Thanks a lot Navya!

i wanted Ahem to see the past through his present and realize everything without showing it to her.

But nonetheless he has to undergo the pain and suffering he caused her and that too silently but he has to bear it and then deal with it.

This will be his redemption and his path to true love.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Part 3

After winding up the kitchen, Gopi came upstairs to her room and saw Ahem sitting on the bed working on his laptop. She entered the room tired after day's work and looking after her Ahemji. He had recovered from his fever and had become normal after a full day's rest in the comforts of their room and her constant care and attention.

She went close to the bed and asked him whether he needed anything. He didn't look up as if he was really busy in doing something. She went to the washroom and changed her night saree.

It was 10:30pm, time to sleep and she moved to the bed and stood there. She was figuring out on how to sleep when Ahem was working there. Maybe Ahemji had just lost the track of time having slept half of the day. She thought of not disturbing him and looked sidewards only to find that couch was also missing from there.

She was confused and perplexed at what to do and where to sleep. Ahem looked up at her standing there in confusion, "Gopi! What happened? Why are you standing like this? What are you thinking?"

"Ji Ahemji! Nothing...I was just thinking to sleep. But you are working so I don't want to disturb you. Where has the couch gone? I am not able to see that?" she asked looking puzzled.

"Couch? I have moved it back to the store room. I had started getting backache due to it so I thought better to sleep on bed from now on." He replied her plainly.

"Ahemji, but I could have slept on the couch..."

"Why? Do you want backache? I don't want to put you in problem." He interrupted her.

She nodded her head and silently picked the pillow and a sheet from the bed.

"What are you going to do with that?" Ahem asked her looking mysterious.

"Ji! I will sleep on the floor. I am perfectly fine with it and now when the weather also has changed. You can comfortably sleep on the bed." She replied as naively as ever.

"Okai fine as you wish. I thought two people can easily sleep here on the bed. But if you want to sleep on the floor it's up to you to decide that. But maybe one or two cockroaches might come and befriend you and play with you in the night." He smirked at her trying to hide his smile.

She turned almost white hearing about cockroaches and kept the pillow and sheet back on the bed. "No Ahemji! I cannot sleep on the floor. I will sleep on the bed only." She didn't wait for his approval and sat down on the bed in no time keeping her feet up on the bed.

He was looking amused at her reaction. Gopi I won't let you put yourself in trouble anymore for my or anyone else's sake! This is my promise to you and to me from here on. I am going to be by your side forever and will see to it that you get the best in life. I have done enough to you and now I will do more than enough always to see that what I have done would be undone in your life. Thanks for being there always. Even when I didn't appreciate you, you always stood like a pillar by my side! Now it's my turn to become a foundation on which our pillar of trust and love created by you would stand forever!

xxx

Thank you guys for the support you have given me. I want Ahem to see through the past without letting her know what's going on in his mind. She also underwent all the pain and craving silently without showing it to him at any point of time. It is his turn to silently see and observe what she has gone through and feel the pain and then make everything to be the best for her, bringing ease and an element of fun in their life and love that she always wanted, which he has started longing and craving for now! But having said so he would have to bear the pain he has caused her for he cannot change it so only way is to feel it as he cannot just have it easily. There is always give and take for everything I believe very strongly and he is yet to deal with his wrongdoings though intentional or unintentional.


This would be his true repentance to undo everything what he did without ever giving her a single moment of pain and healing her with his touch for only he has got the power and responsibility to do that.

I'll update the last part of this story soon. Thank you everyone.

Edited by shruts18 - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#45
That was so sad and so happy that ahem is thinking about gopi...
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Posted: 13 years ago
#46
shruti read all 3 parts

awesome SS👏⭐️

part 1 : wow gopi taking care of him ... she went to his work place...he is in the mode of repenting👏

part 2" loved it fabulous... it was emotional update... he is repenting on every deed,,, sharing of a meal to sharing of a bed... he is going through hell now... while she went through in the past

part 2 ; 😆 he is a smart man... managed to get rid of the sofa and got her to sleep on bed because of cockroach😛 LOL that was a smart move...

will wait for the last one😃
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Posted: 13 years ago
#47
I just finish reading all the part s .. I really love it ... so nice tht our boy has grown up . thank you.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Hey Shruts ...I was just about to log off till post lunch & get some work done...but could not hold reading your SS till then 😊

Loved how Ahem is repenting of all that he has done to Gopi...today he is using excuses of getting Gopi where he wants but Im sure there will be a day he will tell her, looking eye to eye sharing what he feels for her & where he wants her !!!
Ahem is going thru all the pain without letting her know...but for how long will he be able to hide from her !!!
He has made a promise to himself to take care of her, to love her & he will only think of her even before thinking of himself...so will he be able to keep the promise if she is on one side & his family or mom is on the other side ???
Well I love 2 sentences...1) do you want backache?? 😃 2) abt cockroaches...he knows her way 2 well...he never forgot any instance of the past...but was just indifferent to her at point !!!
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Posted: 13 years ago
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AWWW abs wonderful update...story is moving beautifully with keeping true Ahem in mind...lolz cockroaches I can imagine Ahem actually saying that to Gopi how adorable😳. The man is repenting and is able to actually heal her in the process...super -duper👏
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Posted: 13 years ago
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great update
loved the way ahem managed to make gopi sleep on the bed

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