FF: Hote Hote Pyaar Hogaya Ch19 - Pg72 (31/3/13) - Page 2

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Lovely start , at least u are doing what the cvs should have done with the conversation between gohem abt jigar. Pls update soon . Pm me , thanks for doing the story how it should have played out on screen.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Thanks everyone, am working on the second chapter.

No matter how much I want to focus solely on GoHem, I've put myself in the situation of having to resolve RaJi too. Hopefully I'm taking it in a different direction to the show though.
I will try and get as much GoHem as possible though.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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it was wonderful nazma...
wish this had happened in the serial but the cv's are not that smart
anyway this was very nice
update soon...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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superb start fabulous part plz update soon
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Right here is the next part.
No matter how much I tried to keep Rashi out of this she managed to insert herself.
Hopefully there's enough of Ahem and Gopi to keep everyone happy for now.

Chapter 2.

The next morning Ahem woke up early. Thoughts of his brother had made his sleep troubled and kept him restless. He sat up in bed and noticed Gopi still asleep. For some reason recently he couldn't seem to stop looking at her. He'd always known she was beautiful, he'd noticed it the first time that he'd seen her, but never before had he been drawn to looking at her as he had done in the past few days. He saw Gopi stir and lay back in his bed, not wanting to be caught staring at her, pretending to sleep.

Gopi felt a tingling sensation as she woke up, almost as if someone was watching her. She turned and looked but saw no one there, Ahemji was still asleep. She stood at the foot of the bed and looked at him. Early mornings were one of the very few times that Gopi could look at her Ahemji to her hearts content, without getting shy and embarrassed. She'd felt a change in him recently but she didn't want to chance anything.

Gopi saw the time and realised it was almost time to collect the milk, she reluctantly went into the bathroom to get ready.

Ahem watched her walk away.

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Jigar lay in bed, he hadn't slept all night. Last night coming out of the bathroom he'd seen Rashi tidying the room with a sulk on her face. For the first time since their marriage he hadn't felt the need to console her or cheer her up.

Now he watched her sleeping with not a care in the world. It was hard to reconcile what he was seeing with what he had heard and found out about her. His head understood but his heart was unwilling to believe it.

Yesterday had just increased his fear that his marriage was based on a lie. Rashi hadn't thought twice about claiming credit for something she hadn't done. If he hadn't already known the truth from his mother he would never have doubted that Rashi had decorated the room. He wanted to confront Rashi then and there but yesterday while at the mandir he had decided he would wait to make sure he had everything right before he said anything. He wasn't leaving anything to chance. His whole life was at stake.

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At breakfast that morning Ahem was observing Gopi once again. He could see her hard at work ensuring everything was ready on time and that everyone had something they enjoyed eating. She had managed to make herself indispensable in the time that she had been in his home. Looking at his mother he could see she was relaxed and comfortable in letting Gopi handle the kitchen. Glancing in the kitchen he could see that Rashi was less than useless. Thinking about Rashi made Ahem glance at Jigar. Even now Jigar looked preoccupied. Ahem decided he would talk to Jigar later in the day, when they were on their own. Jigar needed him now and he was determined to be there for his little brother. Looking back at Gopi he could see the worry on her face as she also looked at Jigar. Ahem wanted to reassure her, let her know that he would take care of it, but before he could even try and do anything he heard his kaka ask him if he was ready to go to the office.

"Ahem, Jigar shall we go?"

"Ji kaka." With a final look at Gopi Ahem went with his brother and uncle.

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With the men gone, the ladies of the house got on with their household duties. Gopi thought about Jigar. She wondered what it could be that had taken the customary smile off her devar's face. Looking at Rashi, she could not see anything amiss in her. Should I ask Rashiben if anything is wrong? No, I should leave it. Ahemji is going to speak to devarji today so I'll wait to see what Ahmeji has to say.

"Gopi vau, come to the lounge, and you Rashi."

Once in the lounge Gopi saw that both Kokila and Hetal were waiting for them.

"Ji maaji?"

"Gopi vau Diwali is approaching and the whole house needs cleaning and all the preparations need to be made. You and Rashi need to look in the house and make sure we have everything we need for Diwali preparations. Gopi vau you need to make a list of anything that we need to buy and me and your papa will go and get them. Do you understand?"

"Ji maaji."

"Rashi dhikra," Hetal spoke as Rashi looked like she was about to leave. "You should collect the clothes everybody is going to wear on Diwali and make sure they are ironed ok."

"Ji mummyji" Rashi replied.

Kokila and Hetal walked out of the room, with Gopi going soon after, leaving Rashi stewing in the lounge on her own.

"All the time they are after me to do work. They themselves are going upstairs to rest and are making me do everything. I had such dream when I came here, I was going to live like a princess ordering servants about but instead here I am being treated like a servant. It was bad enough when kagdi was giving me orders but now even mummyji has started telling me what to do!" Rashi stormed out of the lounge muttering to herself.

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So I'm changing it slightly from what the CVs did, although the basic outline is similar.

I know my GoHem haven't progressed much either but I'm trying to keep some continuity for now, hopefully my mind will work into getting them to be a bit more lovey dovey with each other sooner rather than later but you'll just have to bear with me for now!!

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Chapter 3 - Page 5
Please leave your comments!!
Edited by NazmaJ - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#16
Hey Nazma, just read both parts, it looks wonderful. Continue soon please. I am really liking how you are developing it.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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it was wonderful...liked it a lot

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Posted: 13 years ago
#18
Wonderful update , you doing a fab job , I love the fact that yiu are giving us ahems inner thoughts , I am enjoying it very much . Pls update soon , thanks for the pm
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Posted: 13 years ago
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really lovely chapter.so will be interesting to read how ahem deals wid the trouble.great job.

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Hi Nazma, great going so far, the problem I'm having with all fan fics is I want them to continue, I want to turn the page and the nextt bit is there, like a book..lol.

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