OS - Gopi confides in Aham - part 4 Pg7 - 24Oct10 - Page 3

Originally posted by: lovtv

Wow...Just listened to the song and it is fabulous. And it goes perfectly with the story.

Thanks for the suggestion.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zSHOcuAAvEQ

Originally posted by: saomom

I listened to the song too. It's beautiful. What's the translation of the title? (Read: Tammie has no idea what they're saying. 😆) What movie is it from?

OMG OMG ...... Shelly my dear you did it !!!!!!!!!!!! .............

Originally posted by: -tellyaddict-

we all would love to help u shelly and due to that can njoy the scene a bit more 😉

Thanks Sadhli for volunteering to be my editor. I may take you up on that :)

Originally posted by: rusha4003

OMG OMG ...... Shelly my dear you did it !!!!!!!!!!!! .............

You wrote the OS on the "gopi confides in Aham about Kinjal " .....

Am sooooooo sorry I didn't read this earlier ... was busy with Navrathri Pooja. ....

I just happend to log in now and I was rewarded with this wonderful piece of work !!!

*Applause* ..... 👏

Awesome writing Shelly ! ..... loved the thots that chased each other in Aham's mind on seeing Gopi .....

and loved the way you ended it ... both of them felt they belonged ....

AWESOME !!!!

Do write OS s like this, there are so many scenes you can do better than the CVs.....

Waiting for more ..... ! 😃

Was waiting for you to read it, Usha. But glad you read it after my edits...it was full of typos before (I am sure it still has some)

I think I can take on rewrites of scenes ...writing a FF sounds too daunting at this point.

I am glad you liked it.

really nice...especially the last part.👍🏼

Originally posted by: lovtv

Was waiting for you to read it, Usha. But glad you read it after my edits...it was full of typos before (I am sure it still has some)

I think I can take on rewrites of scenes ...writing a FF sounds too daunting at this point.

I am glad you liked it.

i really wish u were the writter for the frama atleast our expectations would be alive lol...that whole gopi ahem crap is getting boringg man we need change and abit of gopi being stronger ...we need rashis whole truth to be out....

Okay my Gopi complex, pathetically high from the praise of my previous writing, couldn't get this story out of my head. Here is the next part...Remember some of you said you would over look the grammatical errors and typos!

Part 2
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Time stood still as they lay on the floor looking at each other through Gopi's hair, Aham's arms were still around Gopi and Gopi's hands were resting comfortably on Aham's shoulders, until Aham felt a tear drop fall on his face.

"Tum ro rahi ho?" he asked in a puzzled voice. Then worried he said, "Are you hurt?"

Gopi shook her head and in an almost inaudible voice said, "nahih." She took a deep breath which came out like a sob.

Aham moved one of his hands from Gopi's waist, to push her hair back behind her ear to get a closer look. Gopi still had tears in her eyes. Aham raised his finger to Gopi and said, "chup!" But from current his position and frame of mind it came out like an endearment because that same finger then went to wipe the tears from Gopi's face. Gopi's face transformed with a tiny shy smile and Aham into his almost smile.

All of a sudden the lack of sleep from the night before, the stress of day and not eating or drinking all day caught up with Gopi. She felt an uncontrollable exhaustion take over her body, her eyelids felt like they weighed a ton and she could no longer keep them open. She murmured, "Ahamji, I am so tired," and with those words her exhausted head fell on Aham's wide shoulder and Gopi fell asleep.

Aham was flabbergasted; he could not believe that Gopi had relaxed enough in front of him to fall asleep. At first he didn't believe it and tried to shake her awake, "Gopi, what are you doing? Are you really sleeping?" From Gopi's even breathing it seemed like she really was asleep. Aham lay there for a few minutes trying to figure out what to do next with his wife or un-wife sleeping on top of him on the floor of his guest bedroom. Finally he turned over, carefully transferring Gopi to the floor, and then he moved one of his arms from around her waist to under her knees, while at the same time, he moved to his knees. This took some manoeuvring but Aham was finally able to gently pick her up and quietly, without waking her, walked to the bed and laid her down on his bed. Gopi moved to her side and found a comfortable position and continued to sleep. Aham pulled the blanket over her and watched her sleep for a while; he was still in disbelieve about what had happened. How could Gopi, who was deathly afraid of him, fall asleep like that. What if she was sick? Or hurt? He moved back closer to Gopi and placed the back of his fingers to her forehead to check for fever, her temperature seemed normal, her breathing was good. Aham's fingers seemed to have a mind of their own; they moved from her forehead caressingly down her the side of her face, to slowly move to her cheek, down to her chin before he realized what he was doing. He quickly pulled his hand away and went back to his desk. During their journey his fingers had noticed that her creamy skin was perfect, it was soft, smooth and flawless.

Aham forced himself to snap out of it and tried to finish his report but his eyes kept wondering back to where Gopi was sleeping. His mind kept reliving the entire conversation with Gopi. What had Kinjal gotten herself into? Was she involved with Umang? Was there something wrong with Gopi that she fell asleep like that on the floor? Ok on top of him. He needed to talk with Kinjal right away. Finally Aham too was exhausted, without any thought he closed the laptop and climbed into bed and he too let sleep take over him. As Aham fell into a deep sleep he hasn't had in forever, his last thought was that having Gopi in the same room gave him a sense of well being that was missing in his life.

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Okay friends that is it. It's late in my part of the world and I too am exhausted. Please don't press the like button or say anything nice. Please don't encourage my Gopi complex...it can't say no.

Enjoy!

Girlfriend, I'm telling you, I like the way your mind works! That was simply beautiful. You need to write more often. You're good at it...