DiRa FF 'Bonding on the beach' PART 4 ON PAGE 5 - Page 3

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Posted: 7 years ago
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I know that it may seem a little out of character for Diya to wear a slightly plunging neckline... But I tried to take some creative liberty so if anyone is even slightly offended... I'm sorry... I don't mean to offend you.. Thank you 😆
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: mrs_weasley

I know that it may seem a little out of character for Diya to wear a slightly plunging neckline... But I tried to take some creative liberty so if anyone is even slightly offended... I'm sorry... I don't mean to offend you.. Thank you 😆


Hehehhe.. Khalli walli the people who might get offended! 😆 As for me, it was PERRRFECT! 😆😆 (i would have been happy even if it was glaringly,daringly lower too! 😉😛 Aah yess... i am a pervie.. 😉😆)
Excellent piece of writing. Majo aagiyo! 😃
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Oh my DiRa ☺️☺️Superb writing dear.👏👍🏼
Eagerly waiting for the next update
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Love your both parts 1 and 2
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Why the update even ended! It was so great that I got lost in it. ❤️
You are on the right track, liked how you are uploading it in parts!
Loved ratan's reaction on diya's dress, he was awestruck!
Now waiting to see what more diya has planned for both of them!
Keep it up, eagerly waiting for the next update 😳
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Hello everybody!! I'm extremely glad that you liked the previous two parts of the story... Here's the 3rd part...
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(The scene continues exactly where it had been left off...)

** Flashback**

*Diya's POV*

"Diya aaj aap bahot acchi lag rahi hai... That dress really suits you. I mean it" Diya smiled (and blushed slightly) and thought 'chalo aadha plan toh successful ho gaya. Bas ab aage bhi aise hi sabsahi ho jaaye'...

**End of Flashback**

*Diya's POV*

The taxi drove Diya and Ratan to the beach. It was pretty much what she had expected. Pot-bellied men roaming around topless, Foreigners in bikinis, the occasional hawker trying to sell corn or coke or whatever, kids playing with a ball or some of them even trying to make sand castles, shacks selling drinks... nothing new but she was still glad to be there... after all she had gone out for a trip after 12 years...

"Diya aap sabse pehle kya karna chahti hain?" "Whatever you say Ratan.. " she said. "I was thinking we could try a jet ski if you don't mind" "Oh I totally would love that!" "Cool then let's go!" Ratan said excitedly.
They found a guy who hooked them up with a jet ski and off they went into the water... Ratan drove it and Diya sat behind him enjoying the feeling off the wind in her face... A part of her was not able to get over how closeshe was to Ratan in that moment... she was getting a very weird warm fuzzy feeling in the hollow of her stomach but she couldn't really say that it was an unpleasant one... She didn't know what it was but it sure did make her all happy inside so much so that she didn't even realise that she was grinning at nothing...

After the jet ski they decided to take a ride in the speed boat which oddly enough Diya drove like a pro... She loved every moment on the jet ski but she loved every moment on this boat much more... When she turned to see if Ratan was having as much fun as she was having she noticed that his eyes were already on her... That made her feel a sudden touch of giddyness (not like the actual feeling that would make her faint)and so instead of asking him she turned her eyes away again... however now her attention was divided between driving and watching Ratan from the corner of her eye... She noticed that Ratan would keep sneaking a peek at her every few seconds just the way she was...Weirdly that made her blush and gave her some kind of satisfaction for which she had no explanation...

They did a few more activities and enjoyed themselves thourougly... After sometime when they were passing by from near a cornwala's counter Ratan asked her "Diya aapko kuch khana hai? Aapne aaj proper lunch nai kiya tha mere wajah se aapko woh wrap hi khana pada tha..." "Nahi it's totally okay... Aapko kuch chahiye khana ho toh aap kha lijiye..." then she remembered something and automatically said "but it would be better if you don't..." "Kya?" Ratan was genuinely confused at that... "Arre pata nahi yahan ka khana hygienic hoga yaa nahi... dekhiye 6.30 toh hi gaye hain... 7 baje humara pickup hai phir hum hotel jaake kuch kha lenge... " she said and mentally scolded herself for her slip of tongue.

" toh phir thik hai hum ek kaam karte hain pick up point par hi chalte hai waise bhi andhere ho raha hai..." "Uh.. Ratan jaane se pehle please hamaare liye ek pani ki bottle le aaiye na.. hume bahot pyaas lagi hai..." "Sure bas 2 minute yahin ruk jaiye... main abhi aaya..." as soon as Ratan went off to get her some water Diya called up the receptionist at the hotel "hello this is Diya Ratan Singh speaking... humne aapse jo special preparations karne ke liye request kiya tha wo ho gayi hain?... Oh that's awesome... Thank you... " she ended the call and waited for Ratan who came after a few minutes and said "sorry itni der lag gayi.. woh paani waale ke paas kaafi bheed thi... aur bottle nahi mili isliye yeh pouch hi laana pada..." Diya took the pouch, chugged down the water in three sips and they walked off to the pick up point...

*Ratan's POV*

At 7 sharp there was the hotel's car waiting for them... Ratan was once again the perfect gentleman as he helped Diya to enter the car... They rode all the way to hotel but wait... the car didn't stop there... "Bhaiya hotel toh peeche gaya.." he asked the driver. " Ratan hum hotel toh jaa rahe hai par uske dusre entrance se... Hotel ka khudka ek private patch hai beach ka hum wahin jaa rahe hai..." Diya told him and as soon as he was about to open his mouth his she just placed a finger on his lips and said " hum par bharosa hai naa aapko? " Ratan's maximum focus was on Diya's finger which to his utter dismay she took away and all he could say was "Yes"... He wanted to say a lot more like how he trusted her so much that he wouldn't even bat an eyelid before leaving his whole life in her hands... he wanted to tell her that she was the one person he could trust the most in the world and that he had so much faith in her that he knew that when the whole world will be against him she will stand by his side... he wanted to tell her that but couldn't... just couldn't...

So he sat quietly till they reached the hotel's private beach patch. He got down and when he saw the driver getting down to open the door for her he gestured to him to tell him not to and Ratan himself opened the door for Diya, took her hand and entered...

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There.. that's part 3... Sorry for the cliffhanger... ;) Tell me how it was and please tell me if you have some suggestions for improvement please leave a comment... Thank you so much...😆 😆
(also forgive me in case of any typos... )
Edited by mrs_weasley - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Your writing is beautiful and you have beautiful mind.👍🏼👏⭐️
DiRa😳
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Posted: 7 years ago
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There is a slight chance that I may not be able to post an update today... But I promise to do it by tomorrow evening... I'll try to do it today itself but if not then kal tak toh pakka update post kar dungi... Also thank you so much for the support and the lovely comments... Thank you 😆 and long live DiRa...!
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Posted: 7 years ago
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I had a little question.. would anyone mind or report my FF if DiRa share a kiss in the next section?? I feel that it might be important to the plot so will that be okay??
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: mrs_weasley

I had a little question.. would anyone mind or report my FF if DiRa share a kiss in the next section?? I feel that it might be important to the plot so will that be okay??

no dear!! I wouldn't mind if you write more than a kiss too😉😳
Btw!! Just read the 3rd part!! Awesome one!!

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