DiRa SS : Apke Datahukum (updated on Page 4) last part

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Posted: 7 years ago
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Diya stood still outside the building, she kept on staring at everyone passing by her but she did not blink. Suddenly she took her gun out and stopped everyone from entering.
'koi andar nahi jayega, koi nahi...Datahukum ke pass koi nahi jayega'' she kept on shouting with tears rolling down her cheeks. She couldn't believe this had happened and now everyone had become a monster for her. Someone grabbed her hand and tried to snatch the gun
'Ap kya kaar rahi hai Diya bai sa?'' Snapped Abhay
'woh hi jo pichle 12 saalo se karte aa rahe hain, pehredaari...12 saal Abhay sa 12 saal taak hum nei unko mehfuz rakha aur aj'' her voice was shaking 'aj hummare wajeh...'''
'Apki wajeh se?? nahi diya bai sa...apki wajeh se yeh nahi hua hain''
She dropped the gun and knelt down in the ground.
Once so strong Diya who couldn't be moved by anything was shattered today.




just the first part let me know if i should continue or not 😳

Edited by ramisaaAli - 7 years ago

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luvzindagi thumbnail
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Posted: 7 years ago
#2
You should continue or not? Is that really a question to ask???😲
Of course you should... You must continue😃
Its so gripping
What has happened to Ratan?

Sorry of overacting 😛
But you should really continue this
Please update soon
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Posted: 7 years ago
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U should continue, the plot is interesting
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Posted: 7 years ago
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So nice...
Keep doing 😃
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Thankyou so much for the response guys

here is the continuation


Flashback


Ratan was standing or one could say hiding behind the door, watching Abhay and Diya. They were sitting in the garden, Diya was watching the Stars and Abhay was watching her.
'Hum 12 saal se apka intezaar kar rahe hai Diya, aj bhi nahi bhule woh paal jo humnei saath mein bitaye the ...humara pyaar ek kartavyeh ki wajeh se adhoora reh geya diya''
She did not look at him and remained silent.
Slowly he took her hand and kissed it.

And a spear went through his heart.

Diya did not stop him and neither did she took her hand away this made both of them realized what she wanted. But then she spoke
'Hum apke saath nahi ja sakte hain, Ratan sa ke sabse baade dushman ko hum abhi bhi nahi pakar paye aur humare zimme dari ko bina nibhaye hum nahi ja sakte hain''
And she took her hand away.
He was standing there watching and hearing all this, when a female voice spoke from his behind
'Kya dekh rahhe hai Datahukum?'' asked Chotima
Ratan turned around abruptly. 'yahi ki Diya bai sa ki khushi kaise zimme dari o ki zanjeer o mein baandhi hui hain?'' she smirked.
Ratan walked away from there.


She was one strong lady who sacrificed her family, her beloved, her life for him and his protection. She did not think once before risking her own life to save his then why today is he thinking so much while thinking about her happiness?
Ratan stood in front of the mirror reminiscing all the moments he had spent with Mr.India and then came the moment where Abhay entered there life and suddenly without thinking he took a pen stand and threw it on the mirror shattering the entire mirror. How badly he wished, he could erase the moment in the same way from their lives so that he could never come.

Akhir woh tou sirf ek pehredaarni hai...nahi woh humse pher o mein bandhi hai aur nahi humari koi yaari hai aur nahi pyaar...

And then he stopped 'pyaar'' what a strong word it was and how it made people do the unthinkable. Ratan closed his eyes and sighed.
'Apko apki azadi dene ka waqt ageya hain Diya''
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Nice update
You story is getting interesting 😊
And I quite like this jealous Ratan
I wish I can see him jealous in the show as well
Please update soon
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: luvzindagi

Nice update

You story is getting interesting 😊
And I quite like this jealous Ratan
I wish I can see him jealous in the show as well
Please update soon



and your comments are just making me wanna write more and more 😆

i knoww right i would love to see a jealous ratan on the show
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: ramisaaAli



and your comments are just making me wanna write more and more 😆

i knoww right i would love to see a jealous ratan on the show


Then write away my dear... 😊
And update soon 🤗
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Lovely...
It's very interesting 😃
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Posted: 7 years ago
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really interesting one, but.. plz, dialogues in english plz.. 😊

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