THE LAST LOOK....AY ONE SHOT... - Page 2

omg its so nice yaar....very well written...

ooooooooommmmmmg after reaidng d first half neva thto d story wud turn out in dis way....u really left me speechless i dunno wat 2 say...hwo shdu i react it reli amde me cry and mad eme feel sum reality feelingss

and made me understood oen imp thng

it is nt necessary dat if u love a person dat perosn shdu love u u shdu b happy dat atleats u luv him and dat eprson is happy dats wat u want......

d story was jusst 22 gdu re.....

haatss off 2 u


luv ash

loved it yaar..... this was really really good .....toooooooo emotional.....but tooooooo good.....

excellent shot .... 👏

this was so beautifully written 👏 👏 👏 the last 2 paras made me cry 😭 u actually made me hate yuvi 😭 bt i think this experiance had only helped ay love becum even more stronger 😳 very well written smriti.....keep it up 👏 👏 👏

this was so beautifully written 👏 👏 👏 the last 2 paras made me cry 😭 u actually made me hate yuvi 😭 bt i think this experiance had only helped ay love becum even more stronger 😳 very well written smriti.....keep it up 👏 👏 👏

this was so beautifully written 👏 👏 👏 the last 2 paras made me cry 😭 u actually made me hate yuvi 😭 bt i think this experiance had only helped ay love becum even more stronger 😳 very well written smriti.....keep it up 👏 👏 👏

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Originally posted by: *nitz_rocks*

Awwwwwwwwww.... I just don't know whether to cry or blush... coz feeling soooo bad for ashi😭😭😭 truely says how she would have felt at that time😭😭😭 nd on the other hand... loved your shot way too much ☺️☺️☺️ It not only touched my heart...but it touched my soul☺️🤗🤗 It;s just awesum smriti... you rock at writing all senti stuff!👏 Just can't imagine how ashi must be feeling at that time😭😭 Now i soo hate yaa-mama-ni😡😡 i mean i did before...but now even more after reading your shot! How could yuvi do that?😭😭😭 but loved your shot...because it also showed that it wasn't yuvi's fault too...but still😭😭😭And like harshu me too luved this part a lot😳😳

She was feeling like a fool who had ran after a silly dream. Yet she felt badly hurt and jealous and immediately a pinch of haltered took over jealousy. She envied that girl with whom he had walked out and closed the door to reach him. For the first time in life she felt sad of not being a beautiful lady. For the first time she wished that she had given more concern to her looks. For the first time she realized that just being real from inside was not enough and beauty did matter after all. And for the first time she felt her confidence being shaken into tears of empty sadness.

Just perfect description of ashi's feelings at that time👏 It did really showed her insecurities and in this para. this line touched me the most 'For the first time she realized that just being real from inside was not enough and beauty did matter after all. ' Just perfect feelings in a perfect shot! Hats off to you for writing such beautiful shot☺️ It really moved me...nd no matter what... I loved it!!!! 🤗 Write another one shot soon😳😳☺️

Luv,
Nitz

awwwwwww nitzyyy thank you for such a wonderful reply thats by for ur best reply in al my shots.....🤗🤗🤗am glaad that u liked it soo much that it touched ur tiny miny soul which is always set at torturing me😛and u knw even i am glaad that i cld potray daat uv was nt at fault at daat time i mean it obvious that ashi wld hate him bt still she reasoned his case too....am glad i cld shw her rationale even in dispair....and u knww am even gladder daat i didnt took a certain meansys help in formatingnww u wait u wld never get a sneak preview of my ficcys😛meanooo..love yaaa🤗

Originally posted by: xMarauderx

Hey awesome man smriti!!! It was too good...esp this para:

She was feeling like a fool who had ran after a silly dream. Yet she felt badly hurt and jealous and immediately a pinch of haltered took over jealousy. She envied that girl with whom he had walked out and closed the door to reach him. For the first time in life she felt sad of not being a beautiful lady. For the first time she wished that she had given more concern to her looks. For the first time she realized that just being real from inside was not enough and beauty did matter after all. And for the first time she felt her confidence being shaken into tears of empty sadness.

This para rocked. It showed ashi's insecurities so well!
I loved the last line as well!

But Yamini n voluptous???😕 that's gotta be huge joke!😆

Keep it up dear! Great, awesome one shot!
N nice editing too!😆😆😆

thaaanx devvilzz am glaad u liked it and yee i hanvt seen daat yamini so i thot of using my imagination and flaunting a bit of more angrezii wid voluptious😉 😛an ofcorseee the EDITING ROCKS i spend my one and half hrs on it just erasing red lines by right clicking and givng para spacing all coz of u tow meanooos 😭😭😭i soo hate both of u..neways i guess the para of the fic is the one u guys loved and even saya loved it too...frankly daats my fvt para too coz maybe perhaps dis was the only one time wen ashi wld hav felt dis aways apart frm daat bet thngyy...thaanx again for ur awshemee comments 🤗

😳 😳 i didnt have words to comment earlier neither do i have em now 😳 😳 u rock 👏 👏

sry for the late reply

Awesome one shot man!

i loved the way that you described everything in depth.



i hope to see lots more one shots from you...and a couple fics!

jus can't tell u how i felt reading it re!! 😭
simply awesum 😃