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evilseye

@evilseye

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Posted: 16 years ago

Ok ppl...this was the first fic that i wrote..a very very long time ago..thought id share it with u ppl!!Hope u like it!!!Its got both the couples in it...sorry very little romance coz im not the very romantic type...do tell me if u like it!!

Chapter 1
There r clouds all around.........white foamy clouds..........with pearls gleaming in the light.....n birds chirping.n flowers blooming........n a
princess in the middle............she is wearing a beautiful white gown with a magnificent crown on her head....adorned with jewels n lookin
breathtaking.......the princess is floating about on the clouds.....her heart full of happiness......she looks around n feels like she rules the
world..this is her place...her kingdom.......

Suddenly the clouds start to fade away.........n a door emerges............the princess moves forward.towards it.......recognising it at once as
the door to her room..........but as she goes closer...the happy look on her face changes to a horrified one.....
The door which was a beautiful pink colour..is now painted brown.......with signs of KEEP OUT n DANGER written over with spray paint..n
skulls n bones hanging around.........

Horrified..she opens the door........
the entire room is enveloped in a deadly red colour.......her pink walls r covered with paint n pictures.....n the entire room is strewn with
clothes n shoes....a punching bag hangs to one corner.........a music system in the other corner is blaring with loud rock music.............
Her beautiful window is now painted black...........with a huge wooden sign that says......Devils zone....n a develish lookin face drawn on it..
......the princess in shocked beyond words......she stares speechless at the changes in her room......."Oh tias god!!!!Yeh kya ho raha hai!!
Tia ka itna sunder room....yeh sab kisne kiya????"

Suddenly she hears an evil sounding laugh.......she whirls around n wat she sees gives her jitters.......
A dark shadow emerges n approaches her...........
"Tum!!Tum tia ke room mein kya kar rahi ho!!!!!!!"
The figure laughs loudly again.....".Du-uh timbo!!Bhool gayi??Ab yeh mera bhi kamra hai.......remember ...meri mom aur tumhare dad ki shaadi ho
ne wali hai.....toh acc to that hum dono sisters hue...rite tim baby????"

"No wayz!!!Tia kabhi tum jaisi red head ki bahen nahin ho sakti....."

"Sorry princess"....she sneers......."lekin fact is fact.....ab tum iske baare mein kuch nahin kar sakti........
u just watch...ab main tumhare kamre pe hi nahin.....tumhari life pe bhi kabza kar loongi......."
She moves around her.....

"Tumhari saari fashion magazines raddi mein bech doongi......tumhare saare make up ko jalaa doongi...........

tumhare shoes......tumhare shoes ko grease mein marinate kardoongi........
Tumhari dresse ko acid treatment doongi....Aur tumhe???

Tumhe toh main khila khila ke itni moti banaa doongi ki tum xl size ke clothes ke neeche kuch pehen hi nahin paaogi........
tumhari saari hair products n face products kailash kaka ko lagaa dongi.......

Aur fir???Aur fir tum aisi dikhogi....."

She turns her towards the mirror......n laughs loudly..HA HA HA.............

in the mirror is a fat girl with acne n pinples all over her face.....her hair like bush.....all over her head.......wearing an iron maiden T-Shirt.
.....n army pants.......with sports shoes............

The devil laughs again........ha ha ha ha!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

She screams...............AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHH HHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!

She tries to set her hair n clothes right.............."No no no!!Tia ke sath aisa nahin ho sakta.........No no no!!!Tia aisa kabhi hone nahin degi..
no no...never!!!!!Tia ke room se bahar niklo!!!!!Get out GET OUT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!"
She tries to push her away.........no no NO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Tia .................tia...........................tia ...........utho!!!!

Tia..........kya hua tia????Utho!!!!!

Tia opens her eyes.........n sits up on her bed..............she sees kailash kaka standing by her side...tia beti kya hua??????

Suddenly tia realises that it was a dream............Oh Tias god!!Thank u!!!!!
Kailash kaka asks her again.....................kya hua tia???Koi bura sapna dekh liya kya???

Tia:aisa bura sapna toh tia ne poore life mein nahin dekha hoga!!Woh punk!!Usne Tia ka kya haal bana diya tha...n mera room.....usne tia ke
room ko toh ruin kardiya!!!!!!
Kailash kaka unable toh understand anything says.....oh ho tia...ghabrao mat..bure sapne kabhi sach nahin hote......n he leaves.
Tia says to her self........Tia hopes ki yeh sapna kabhi sach na ho......but jab shaadi hogi tab kya hoga!!???

Thats the First chapter..All suggestions and comments.....gud or bad...are most welcome!!!!

Luv

Sur

Edited by evilseye - 16 years ago

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aanchal

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Posted: 16 years ago

hey sur that was really nice...d dialogues in which ashi is describing all d vile stuff she gonna do wid tia seems totally ashi types as though u were one of d remix creatives...they were witty n funny...enjoyed reading it...although im a totally romance kinda person but i still wud luv to read ur fic further...plz do post d next part soon...im waiting

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smriti

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Posted: 16 years ago

oh my god look whos backkkkkkkkkkkkkkk

finalllly tu aa gayi surrrrrrrrrrrrrr kahaan thi mannnnnnnn missed youuuuuuuuuuuuu chooo muuuuuuuuuuuuuuch cho cho happppy to see u back here i was diying to have u back yaaaar i mean Remix wapas aa gaya aur koi dhoom dhadaka na hoooooooooo not happpeningggg

and oh my god aate hi u started bangingggggggggggggg wat a come back wid a new hillarious ficccccccccc yeaaaaaaaaaaah u know wats the best part abt ur fics?? it deals wid a track which remix never hsowed but which allllllllllll we mad remix fans always wanted to seeee and u make that possible for us..i mean as for instance dis ficcy of urs deals wid Sonya Sumeet ka weeddinggg ashi-tia trying ot be sisters alll the changes that wld happen in thier lives all the emotional entaglements all their own feelings abt each otherrrr..i for one always wanted to see this track in remix like dey showed in rebelde i mean in rebelde roberta and miaaaaaaaa were inseperableeeeeeeee..okie i know that wldnt have happend in remix for sure and thank god it didn't happen😆😆😉..but stilll we missed upon a lot of SS fights Ashi smackinggg timbo scenes and both the kids accepting their parents ka wedidng and everythingg...but wooooooooooow...kudddoooooooooooooos to u via dis i can sense that u wld do fullllllllll justice to this track and via ur words we alll wld be able to witnesss this grand weddingggg..i mean seriously yaar tere words main power hai to trascend fiction and reality ke beech ka thin silver lininggggg

looooooooooved the first part...hahaha pooor timbooo..wat a dreammmmmmmmmmm man i could actly imagine allll d wicked grins our devilw ld be throwing her way and i cld actly seee a pimply tia wid hair hanging out in alll directions😆🤣🤣..amzinggg piece of writingggggg as always it really captures ur imagination😃

cant wait for the next chapppppppppppppppp and listen am hellle xcited for this one but am more hyper and helll hellllllllllllllllllllllllllllll excited for Dhoom Dhadakaaaaaaaaa pljjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjj ppljjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjjj Surrrrr ki bacchi pljjjjjjjj continue it that was one of the moooost hillariousssss ay fics i ever readdddddd continue u that surrrrrrrrrrrrrr pljjjjjjjjjjjjjjjj

and welcome backkkkkkkkkkkkkk chooo happpppppy to see u yaaaaaaaaaaaaaaar and why do i feel ki tujhe wapas lane main komzzzyyy ka magicccccccc chupa hai i guesss komz got u back dod she? haye komzzzzzzzzzzzz loveeee u just let me get over wid my boooks den i wld cme and huggy u hard komz for coming bakc in our lvies and along wid u brining all dese awesome peopleee the magic of ay just quadrepplessss wehn ug uys r around yaaaaaar

muaaaaaaaaaaah

Smriti

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evilseye

@evilseye

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Posted: 16 years ago

Thanx a lot!!!

Smriti!!!!I tell u na...this place is addictive!!!I mean TOTALLY!!!!I had devoted all my time is fic ko complete karne mein..so next time even if im busy ill be able to just copy n paste the next chapter!!!

N it feels absolutely gr8888888888 to be back!!!!Luvd remix always n luv it even more!!!!!!

Thanx so much yaar...its all thanks to these encouraging words of urs n komals have i been able to muster up the courage to write a fic!!!

Remix ended so abruptly with so many questions n tracks left out ki it frustrated me to no end!!!So i thought y not pent out all my frustration in a fan fic!!n dont worry..Im workin on Dhoom dhadaka also..so u can expect sum real dhoom n masti in that fic too!!!!

Luv

Sur

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evilseye

@evilseye

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Posted: 16 years ago

Chapter2
Mummum....mummum....
Sonia opens the door to ashis room...Ashi...she says....
On the bed fast asleeep lost in the blankets is ashi
Sonia goes up to the bed n sits on it.....Ashi...i have sum gud news she says...
Sumeet ne abhi abhi fone kiya....usne pandit se baat karli hai n shaadi ka mahurat nikla hai....2 weeks baad ka!!!Isint it gr8 ashi??She says trying to find ashis face in the blanket..

KYA!!!!!!cums a voice from the other end of the bed n ashi pops out 4m the blankets at the end of the bed!!!
Mama!!AApko subah subah mazaak karna zaroori hai???
Sonia is puzzled.........yeh mazaak nahin hai ashi...aur tum kahaan ho...chalo utho...
Ashi taps her on the shoulder from the back..mama main yahaan hoon..
sonia turns around....oh ho ashi.....Im so xcited...2 weeks baad meri shaadi hogi...Ashi main tumhe bataa nahin sakti ki mujhe kitna accha lag raha hai..

Woah!!Hold it mama.She jumps out of bed....u mean to say ki 2 weeks mein u will get married n we will be moving to the ahuja house!!!But mama itni jaldi kya hai??

sonia gets up n walks to her...shona main jaanti hoon ki 2 weeks bahut kam time hai...n tumhe yeh tension ho rahi hai ki tum sab preparations kaise karogi...Ashi has her typical 'Oh my melodramatic mom' xpression....but dont worry..tia hai na tumhari help karne ke liye??
Ashis xpression turns to the 'hey Bhaggu!!'One!!
Mama!!Plz!!Timbo ka naam mat lo!!waise bhi aapki shaadi ke baad usse n uske princess tantrums ko jheelna padega....har waqt make up n dresses n wat not!Pata chala ki woh mujhe bhi apne jaisa bana degi!!Noooooooo hey Bhaggu!!!!
Mimiking tia she says...Tia ahuja hona koi aisi waisi baat nahin hai!!..tia yeh tia woh Oh no!!!

Sonia stops her..bas ashi...bas..ashi dekho yeh shaadi mere liye bahut important hai...Itne saalon baad mujhe pyaar mila hai...meri ek complete family hogi....meri saari khushiyaan mil rahi hain mujhe....Plz dont spoil it ashi..
Dekho tia n tum ab sisters banne wale hain...toh jo problem hai use sort out kar lo..

just then kuki cums there....sonia tumse director saab milne aaye hain...chalo..
sonia looks at ashi....plz ashi...mere liye.....
ashi gives up..all rite mama..main timbet se baat karoongi...

sonia is happy at once...thank u sooo much my baby!!

she hurries out
ashi plops down on the bed...Hey BHaggu!!!!Y me??She says n pulls the blanket over her face..

Sorry its a lil short...Hope u guyz like it!!Suggestions n comments are always welcome!!
Luv
Sur

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smriti

@FollowYourHeart

Stunner

Posted: 16 years ago

aweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

aweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

aweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

dis is the only expression and word i can utter right now after reading such a cuteeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee cuteee part suuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuur

haye mere ashi sonuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu why just hwy r they so cute maaaaaaaaaan??????????

looooooooooooooooved everything abt it from the way u started off by burrying ashi on mountains of blanket hayeeeeeee thats exactly how she wld slepe and me cld actly imagine sonuu ramblling through the blanket to catch hold of her babyyyy aweeeeee choo cuteeee

and d way u wrote all dose bits "oh meri melodramatic mumma" hahahahaha that was so cute man tune kitny sahi tarah se ashi ke expressions ko pakaaaaaaa i mena i know dere r some typical expressions of hers but tere nominclatures of those expressions were spot onnnnnn uska hey bhaggu or duh huh wale expression ke liye toh main jaan de dun by gooooood

and aweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee yeh dono ek dooosre ke liye kuch bhi kar sakte hai man kuch bhiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii all sonya needed to tell her that this means d world ot her that this wld make her happy and daats it ashi wld go to anye xtent to make sure nothing nothing spoils itf or her mommy specially not her and her problems wid life or people dey r just adowableeeeee.."tw"😉

thankoooooooooooooooooooooooooooo for this wonderul part yaar Sur terkeo pata hai before my exams started i saw u updated but i refrained myself from reading it coz i knew i wld get carried awya and start droolingggg in Remix mania isliye reallly showieeeeeee for being so late in commenting but now exams more i pohmish wld be regulaaaaaaaaaaaar pljj continue sooon sooon soon jaldi jaldi jaldi pljjjj surrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr

loveeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee u choo very much

ps...bring whacko ka psycho in jaldi seeeeeeeeeeeeeee

pps..now running to read dhoom dhadakaaaaaaaaaa oh my god getting butterfliessssssssssssssssssssssssss "bluuuuush"

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evilseye

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Posted: 16 years ago

Aww...thanx sooo much!!Im so glad u like it!!!

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evilseye

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Posted: 16 years ago

Chapter 3
Ashi n tia r in their respective rooms....thinking...Pacing from here to there....
Tia:Oh tias go!!Ab tia kya karegi???
Ashi:Ab mujhe timbo ke saath kaam karna padega!!!
Tia:Us Punk ki baaton se toh tia faint ho jaayegi...
Ashi:Timbo ke make up gyaan se meri life nikal jaayegi!!
Tia:No no...tia ko kuch karna padega...
Ashi:Kuch aisa jisse mujhe timbet se gud ridance mil jaaye..
Tia:Lekin aisa kaun hai jo ashi ko control kar sakta hai??
Ashi:Kaun tia ko jhel sakta hai???
Tia s face suddenly lights up.......Yuvi!!!
n ashi gets abright idea...Thakur!!!

They get their fones n dial the numbers......
Ranveer:Ashi kaisi hain aap??
Tia:Uv tia ki life danger mein hai.....
Ashi:Agar tumne meri help nahin ki na...then im dead!!!
Uv:Calm down tia...kya hua hai??
Ashi:Timbo n mujhe mom n sumeet uncle ki shaadi ki arrangements saath mein karni hai..
Tia: Aur tia us punk ko handle nahin kar sakti!!!
Ranveer:Toh ismein hum tumhari madat kaise kar sakte hain??
Uv:n waise bhi tum aur ashi sisters banne wali ho na??
Ashi:Thakur!Ek tum hi ho jo us timbo ke nakhre utha sakte ho!!!
Tia:Uski constant bakbak n stupid silly jokes ko handle karna tumhe hi aata hai uv...
Ashi:Agar tum nahin aaye na...toh main definitely ya toh suicide commit kar loongi....
Tia:Ya phir woh punk tia ko maar daalegi!!!Uv Help!!!!!
Ranveer:Ashi relax....aisa kuch nahin hoga!!Accha theek hai hum aa rahe hain...Ok??
Tia:Thanx a lot uv!!!
Ashi:U r the best thakur!!!!
Uv:Fine main abhi nikal raha hoon....2 hours mein pahunch jaaonga....
Bye!

Tia n ashi both r happy....
Ashi:Thank bhaggu!!!Aap bhi gr8 hain....kis kis form mein meri help karne ke liye aa jaate hain!
Tia:Ab tia ko us red head ki fikar karne ki koi zaroorat nahin!!!
ashi:Ranveer tia ko busy rakhega..
Tia:n pap n sonia aunty ki shaadi araam se ho jaayegi!!!!!!

after two hours tia n ashi meet at tias place....
Ashi:Hey timbo!!Aaj tumhare kisi stylefreak...i mean stylist ke saath appointment nahin hai???
Tia:So sweet of u ashi lekin tia ke appointments ke baare mein tumhe worry karne ki zaroorat nahin hai....
Ashi:Oh ho..woh kya hai na..ab hum SISTERS banne wali hain toh mujhe apni behen ka khayaal rakhna padega na??Kahin tumne koi dress repeat karli toh???!!!n agar...agar...tumhare baal jhadne lage toh!!!???
Tia is totally horrified!!!U..U...Bas karo!!Tia kabhi koi dress repeat nahin karti!!!n tia ke baal NAHIN jhadte!!!Tum apni life samhalo..tia ko akela chod do!!!
Ashi:Aaaah!!I wish abhi koi genie appear ho jataa toh main usse yehi wish mangati ki mujhe tumse dooooooooooooooooooooooooooooor cod aaye!!!!

Suddenly ranveer n uv enter 4m two directions......they notice each other.....
All together say...YOU???!!!!!!!!!
Ranveer:Arre uv bana...aap yahaan kya kar rahe hain??
Uv:Are dude i din know u were cuming???
Tia:So did i!!!
Ashi:Tumhe yahaan kisne bulaya cyco???

Just then sumeet cums there....arre wah!Tum dono ne apne frnds bhi bula liye???Very gud....He turns to uv n ranveer...im so happy ki tum dono inki help karne aa gaye....i hope koi problem nahin hogi??

Uv:Oh no sir...koi problem nahin...
Ranveer:Ji...toh chalo sab kaam pe lag jaate hain...Hum aur ashi ladki wale..i mean sonia mam ki taraf se..
Uv:n me n tia sumeet sir ki taraf se.....k??

All: done!!!

Well thats it for this chapter..hoipe u liked it!!!
Luv
Sur

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sayantika

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Posted: 16 years ago

hey...kool..........caught up wid all d parts 2gether..plz post d next one soon.............

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Komal

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Posted: 16 years ago

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Sur my rockstar that was AWESOME! I didn't even know you had another ff. Thanks for PMing me... NOT! Thank god maine dekhliya warna tum toh bataati bhi nahi. Anyway, kya rocking writing karti ho tum man. Too damn good. I already loved you Dhoom Dhamaal and and now this. It reminds me of my Barsaat ke din aaye. The first ff I ever wrote in this forum and it was on the same concept. Sonia-Sumeet ki shaadi and Ashi-Tia fights, lekin it was an A-Y ff so... thoda difference tha. I love your ffs yaar. Hum dono ka writing style kaafi similar hai so I feel like I'm reading my own stuff only way better! You rock rockstar! Update soon!

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