Alzia OS 'Fighting with one's own heart'

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So first of all the credit goes to arshia as she inspired me to write this separately 😆.
THis OS is on the war between Alzia where he kills Yaqut, hope u all enjoy it😳 plx ignore spelling mistakes and errors of typing i didn't recheck😳

Alzia OS "Fighting with one's own heart"

It was a fine Ramdan day, the sun was shining brightly above all, and the wind blowing a little hot but pleasant blow, Razia Sultan the first lady to succeess her father as the Sultan marched towards Bhatinda, to defeat a rebel, but he wasn't just another governor who went against her for power, he was instead the one who had helped her get back her throne, who had stood by her through thick and thin who was her support her shield and her power once, and now who wanted her to lower her head infront of him, just because she had done what her heart said, what her morals told her, what her duties asked her to do and being a very honest and respectful woman, she didn't care who was her enemy all that mattered now was her kingdom and her authority which was challenged by her arrogant ex-fiance.
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Malik Altunia prostrated before the Almighty and finishing his dhur prayers he raised his hands and prayed.

Altunia; Mere Maula, tu to jaanta he is deewane ne zindagi me sirf khoya hi hai, aur phir tujhse kabhi gila nhi kiya, bas ik Karam krde Maula, mujhe mera khoya hua junoon lota de, meri amanat me jo khayanat hui he us amanat ko lota de, meri jo qeemti cheez kho gai he wo lota de, bas uske liye agr meri jaan bhi jaye to ye deewana uff tak na krega. Aameen

he folded his prayer cloth wrapped it and kept it aside. Atigin entered his tent

Atigin; lashkar tayar he Altunia, Sultan-e-hind bas kuch hi faasle pe he chalo waqt aa hi gya jab hum unse hamari tauheen ka badla len

Altunia; badla nahi Atigin, hamen bas jawab chahiye, agar jawab milgya to theek hai wrna hum unse hamara jawab bhi cheen lenge aur unka gurur bhi

Altunia put on his warrior suit and moved out of the tent.

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Razia stopped all of a sudden

Yaqut; kya hua Sultan, aap achanak ruk gayi? hum jaante hen aap bht thaki hui hen, uparse aapko roza bhi he, humari baat maniye abhi wapas delhi hi chalte hen, wahan ja k soch k phir puri tayari k saath wapas ayenge

Razia; nahi Yaqut, hum thake nhi, Razia Sultan na kamzor he aur na hi bebas, hum to sirf namaz ki adayegi k liye ruke hen, Allah se dua krne k baad hi hum aage badhenge

Yaqut; jee Sultan

Razia offered her prayers and then she sat down to pray

Razia; Ya Allah humen hamare maqsad me kamyab krna, aameen

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It was afternoon time, the sun was dorectly above the battle field as the two armies faced each other, the hot wind touched Razia's face , a strand of her hair moved to her face and irritated her, the same wind reached the other side, and touched Altunia's face, he closed his eyes and sniffed it.

Razia; yahan ki to hawa bhi baagi ho chuki he Yaqut, dekho to kis tarah hamen pareshan kr rhi he

Yaqut; Sultan abhi bhi waqt he lot chaliye

Razia; hum buzdil nhi hen Yaqut jab yahan tak aye hen to ab bina lade wapas nhi jayenge

The armies were at a distance, and so Altunia and Razia could only make out each other's silhouttes , unable to see their faces, but Altunia could figure out that Yaqut was close to her, he clenched his fist tightening his grip on his sword.

Altunia; aaj is habshi ka kaam hum yahin tamam kr denge

Atigin; magar roze me qatl? Altunia mat bhulo tum ibadat ki haalat me ho

Altunia; humen yaad he, hum to hamesha hi ibadat ki halat me rehte hen Atigin, magar tum fiqr na kro roza khulne se pehle hum kisi ki jaan na lenge

Atigin; humne tumse kaha tha na roza na rakho, jung aur safar k doraan roze ki maafi he

Altunia; mijazi khuda k liye hum Haqeeqi ka daman to na chodenge na miyan, aaj humen uske Karam ki sabse ziada zarurat he

"yalgaar ho" ALtunia shouted from his end and Razia from hers, conincidence or not but their voices were in such a sync that they were indistinct to the listeners. And the armies moved towards each other, the large armies collided, Altunia jumped from his horse and started fighting.

Razia and Altunia were quite far from each other, they started fighting with each other's soldiers.

Yaqut; Sultan aap ziada mat ladiye aapko roza he

Razia; to kya hua, hum bht sakht jaan hen Yaqut

Yaqut; Lekin Sultan

Razia; hamari fiqr mat kijiye baaqi sab ka khayal rkhiye aaj roza na sahi sbka magar phir bhi sb wese hi thake huye hen pichli jung se, aur kal se kuch khas khaya piya bhi nahi.

Yaqut; jo hukum sultan

The war went on and on for hours and neither ALtunia nor Razia even had a glimpse of each other, until the sun had lowered it self, and had lost alot of its brightness, it was the time before sunset, the time when sun is not at its peak nor has it set or gone orange, just in middle. Razia pushed a soldier and moved towards the next. It was then that she saw him and at the same time he saw her, their eyes met again, his head armor had fallen down, but so had her turban, and a sudden rushed blow of wind blew her hair so fast that her hair falled loose open on her back, she was covered in dust but her face glowed, her lips were like she just ate a red juicy cherry , her eyes shining, he looked at her blindly, it was a long time since he had seen her, a very long time, the last time was when he was told to move to Bhatinda, because he was a distraction, according to the great Razia Sultan, Malik Altunia was a distraction, someone who didn't allow her to focus when she was at work, who was the reason she couldn't concentrate, she had argued and when things didn't go the way she wanted she ordered him to leave her, because for her, their was no time for love or marriage. He fumed as he recalled their bitter moments, the time when he had pleaded her to marry him, to fulfill the promises she did, to make him a permanent part of her life,the time when she told him she had no time to love, that she was the Sultan and her kingdom came first, that her love life was not as important.

He kept staring at her, she was still beautiful, still the same, or had grown prettier, she was definetly appearing alot more beautiful then usual, not because he saw her after so long, but because he loved her the most when she was in her lioness mode, ready to attack. He had always adored the fearless girl in her, the fire that burned everything, but sadly his heart was also burned by that very fire, he shrugged as the memories were too painful to bear.

Razia stared at him as he stared back, they both stood like statues while their armies fought, his hair were flying with the wind, his eyes open wide and staring at her, like they aways did, with love, with anger, with affection, he looked a little different, or completely different, his usual smirk was gone, his eyes had lost the naughtiness, the lovely Mirza she knew was nowhere to be seen, the person who stood before her was the dangerous arrogant Malik who wanted her down at any cost, the person who had always claimed to love her did this, she couldn't believe her eyes, they did argue and their relation ended on a bitter note, but she never stopped loving him, she couldn't detach a part of her heart from herself ever, and she had explained her reasons well enough but he didn't want to listen, he left her and she was all alone, facing the harsh world which included him too. A tear escaped her eye as she closed her eyes to get rid of their bitter and sweet memories. She opened her eyes again and he was gone, she moved her head in all directions to see where he had gone but she just couldn't find him, she decided to fight with the soldiers instead of wasting time on him, she had come with the intention to find him and talk but she knew he wouldn't listen because his ego had risen above everything else.

She was fighting with a soldier when suddenly she noticed that the soldier was not putting up a good fight, he was just defending himself

RAzia; kya hua miyan? aurat se ladne me sharam ati he kya?

Soldier; nahi Sultan, lekin humne aap pe talwar na chalane ki qasam khai he

Razia was shocked, what kind of a war was this if the soldiers had sweared not to attack kr. She was lost in thoughts when Altunia hit her sword , her grip was still tight, the sword moved but didn't fall, and in a reflex she hit back, their swords hit each other with a loud noice, just below their eye level and she looked up, she saw his eyes, the eyes that used to have nothing but love for her, and surprisingly even now she could see some remains of that love there.

Altunia; Delhi ki Sultan ek mamuli se subedaar ki bagawat ko kuchalne khud yahan aai hen? apni foj ki ek tukdi hi bhej di hoti, ya aapko unki qabiliyat pe shaq tha?

Razia; shaq nhi tha...bas yun kahiye k jin dhagon ki dor khuli chod di jai hen unhe khud aa k bandhna chahiye kya pta ghant phirse koi dheemi bandhe aur kamzor dhage phirse bikhar jayen

Altunia; dhaage to ab kisi ghaanth se na judenge mohtarma, jali hui imarten aur toote hue sheeshe kabhi phirse juda nhi krte

Razia; sahi kaha aapne, lekin jale huye ghar k maalik ka kya, uske paas to bas wahi thikana he na, jesa bhi ho jo bhi ho rehna to sui me hoga na usko

Altunia; yehi hum bhi samjh k chup the mohtarma, lekin esa he nhi, maalik ne to naya ashiyana dhund liya aur us ghar ko to thes nehes krne ka mansooba bhi bna liya, k zameen pe bhi us jale huye ghar ka namo nishan na bache

Razia; wo maalik jabse beghar hua he, usne ek chat tak na pai he sir chupane ko, thikane ki baat to bht door he mirza

Yaqut came running to them.

Yaqut; Sultan aap peeche hatiye is se main nipatta hun

he pulled Razia behind him and hit his own sword, Razia wiped her tears silently, but Mirza got violent, his anger was on its highest peaks as he saw Yaqut touch her, he wanted to slash his hand cut his arm and make its pieces but he was fasting and he wouldn't in anyway harm his connection with God, he hit Yaqut's sword in anger. Razia came in between them.

Razia; ye hamari ladai he Yaqut, hamara hukum he, aap peeche hat jaiye

he nodded and moved back, he went to fight with others, Altunia faked a laugh

Altunia; itna bhi mat dariye Sultan, aapke dil k tukre ko hum abhi chaa k bhi nhi maar skte

Razia; dil ka tukra? Mirza aap?

Altunia looked at her intensely and his eyes frightened her, his eyes were red in anger, his forehead creased, his breaths heavy.

Altunia; thikane ki baat k rhi hen aap? arre us habshi k saath khwabon k mehel saja rkhe hen aapne aur hamen dosh deti hen ap

RAzia; khabardar mirza, mat bhuliye hamara mazhab hamen arbi aur habshi me farq krne ki ijazat nhi deta, sirf is baat pe aap baqi sab turkon k saath mil k humse bagawat pr utar aye? kahan gye wo saare usool jinki duhai dete phirte the aap?

Altunia; usool? usool humne tode hen ya aapne? waade humse kiye aur nibha kisi aur k saath rhi hen aap? Razia Sultan kitni badi fareb dhokebaaz aurat he ye koi humse pooche, akhir he hi kya us habshi me? jo hamen bhatinda bhej k uske saath shuru hogai aap?

Razia couldn't take it she raised her sword to hit him and their swords collided again, they started fighting. Her sword hit his hand and it started to bleed.

"Mirza!" she said panicking, but he was unstoppable, there was nothing more painful then what he was already suffering, he had never planned to love and when he did he suffered a harsh heartbreak and the already tough Altunia had turned into a marble now, a shining white marble that was not easy to break, only the most powerful diamond could do that, and that diamond was not possessed by the Delhi Sultanate.
Razia couldn't help but stare at his open wound that she gave him just now, he couldn't but she could feel the pain, the burning sensation and the lump in her throat was unbearable, they had a strong relation once and some strings even if broken their loose ends still belong to each other, she recalled the times when they were head over heels for each other, when they talked laughed smiled only for each other, and now they were infront of each other, attacking fighting, wanting revenge, all these thoughts brought tears to her eyes. She was so lost in thoughts that she didn't see an attack on her, but she was shocked to see who stopped it.
His eyes were emitting heat now as he pushed the soldier with extreme force and he hit the groud hard

ALtunia; hamne kya hukum diya tha yaad nhi tumhen?

Soldier; maaf krdijiye subedaar sahab

Razia looked at him confused.

Razia; hum pe kisi bhi qism ka waar krne se aapne sabko mana kr rkha he? kyun? aurton pe haath uthane se aapki mardangi ko daag lag jayega kya?

Altunia; aurton me aur Razia SUltan me kya farq he ye hum jaante hen. HUmne bagawat aapki sultanate aur aapse ki he...pr aapke liye jo humne kabhi mehsoos kiya tha wo hamen aapko dard dene ki ijazat nhi deta Sultan.

Razia; dard sirf jismani nhi hta

Altunia; ye baat humse behtar kon jaan skta he

Razia; aap ko kya lagta he hum bhi aap pe rehem krenge?

Altunia; (laughs) Ikhtiar-ud-din ALtunia ko kisi k rehem ki zarurat na kabhi thi na he aur na hogi, rehem ki bheek to aap maangengi humse Sultan

Razia; Razia Sultan na kisi k aage jhuki he aur na jhukegi

Altunia smirked, the sun was setting and it was almost dark, the sky was all orange or rather blood red

Altunia; apne charon aur dekhiye Sultan, aapki foj ka haal to dekhiye

Razia looked around, she could see alot of her soldiers already dead, some badly wounded, others trying hard to put up a fight, Razia's tired army was no match for Altunia's, though more in number Razia's soldiers gave up easily, as they were tired and thirsty and the heat of the war field took away all their strength. Razia looked at Yaqut and smiled, he was alone fighting with 5 men.

Razia; hamen puri foj ki zarurat nahi he, Yaqut akele hi aap ki puri foj se nipat lenge

Altunia's blood boiled to see praise in her eyes for Yaqut, he eyes glowed when she called his name out loud and it was like scratching open ALtunia's wounds, and sprinkling salt on them, he growled in anger.

Altunia; bas kuch waqt aur Sultan, bas kuch waqt aur

A soldier came and hit Razia's sword, she was busy fighting him and didn't realize that ALtunia was out of sight, and then she heard the azan of maghrib prayer, all soldiers stopped then and there, Razia took out a date from her dress pocket and opened her fast, she then sat down and prostrated before the Almighty.

Razia; mere Maula, madat kr hamari, aaj hamare dil ki jeet ho aur baaqi sb ki haar.

The sun was gone and it was getting darker, Razia stood up and saw Altunia standing before her, the war field was clear now, many soldiers out of it, and as Altunia and Razia faced each other, staring into each other's eyes, the wind blowing slowly, as if the world had stopped.
There was something in his eyes, something very dangerous, he stared as the tiger stared at its prey just before an attack

Altunia; Razia Sultan, ulti ginti shuru krdo, tumhara zawal ye tumhara ashiq aaj khud likhega

Razia's eyes opened wide, she was in a state of confusion, and it all happened quick, one second ALtunia smirked infront of her and the next, he turned jumped, and roaring like a fearless ruthless lion he moved his sword attacking his biggest enemy.

"Yaaaqut" Razia yelled in shock, fear and sorrow, Yaqut fell on the ground with a thud, he was not dead, but he was stabbed mercilessly in his chest, piercing his heart, he looked at Razia and smiled, and then he was still forever. Razia fell on her knees in shock, her friend was gone forever, the only person she counted on, was gone, dead and the person who killed him was the one he had loved or still did. She looked at Altunia who was standing blood-stained with his face glowing and his eyes glistening, he kicked Yaqut's body and it was turned to a side. Altunia started laughing evily , he laughed heavily, like a crazy psycopath serial killer. Razia sat in shock, her sword was not in her hands, she had dropped it and was not in the state to fight anymore.
Altunia walked towards her.

Altunia; hum ehlaan krte hen, Delhi Sultanate ki sultan ab hamare qabze me he

All his soldiers applauded and cheered while Razia mourned alone, staring at the dead body of her best friend, the tears in her eyes had dried up, she felt lifeless herself, Altunia sat infront of her and tied a cuff on her hands. Then he took her face in his hands.

Altunia; mohobbat aur jung main sab kuch jayaz hai, aur humne to aapse dono hi ki hen, chaliye mohtarma ab aap hamari amanat hen.

He picked her up in his arms and carried her away, and she kept staring at Yaqut's dead body as she went, which faded away from her sight, and dust took over everything else.

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Amaa me ?? 😆 I inspired u ? Kaise...
hehe so sweet yaar...I dont knw hw...bt u mentioned me as ur OS ka inspiration its touched my heart really. I read it only half...from laptop...came on the fone as im abt to sleep n then saw my name there...will read now and comment tmrw properly kk 🤗🤗hugsss hugsss
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: arshia200

Amaa me ?? 😆 I inspired u ? Kaise...

hehe so sweet yaar...I dont knw hw...bt u mentioned me as ur OS ka inspiration its touched my heart really. I read it only half...from laptop...came on the fone as im abt to sleep n then saw my name there...will read now and comment tmrw properly kk 🤗🤗hugsss hugsss

ur dead wala ss 😭 and i was planning to write a detailed war sequence but in my some other ss but then thanks to u i decided to write an os 😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Ohh like that...coz of my ss
Arrey this was sooo good that I just had to comment aaj abhi aur isi waqt only

Dilli ki sultan ab hamare qabze mein hai...Ab aap hamari amanat hai ...he picked her up in his arms
awww awww awww awww ...I read tht line 10 times.
Your urdu is so perfecto ! This was a brilliant piece of OS and im sincerely hoping these cvs make it somewhat like this only...at least the carrying her part. It was the most uniquely- cutest thing I have ever come across in ages, carrying the love of ur life after defeating them
Hugsss hugsss hugsss hugsss🤗🤗
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Originally posted by: arshia200

Ohh like that...coz of my ss

Arrey this was sooo good that I just had to comment aaj abhi aur isi waqt only

Dilli ki sultan ab hamare qabze mein hai...Ab aap hamari amanat hai ...he picked her up in his arms
awww awww awww awww ...I read tht line 10 times.
Your urdu is so perfecto ! This was a brilliant piece of OS and im sincerely hoping these cvs make it somewhat like this only...at least the carrying her part. It was the most uniquely- cutest thing I have ever come across in ages, carrying the love of ur life after defeating them
Hugsss hugsss hugsss hugsss🤗🤗

Arre yr atleast comment on the war too, the last part is again inspired from u, i was going to make him carry her on his shoulder but then i said no yr uncle did it so mirza won't 😆
Urdu is my national language so its bound to be good 😆
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Amaaa hum neend mein thay na...bataya toh tha...
but kyunki aapne mann ko itna khush kar diya...so i commented on the part that made me happy. ur story was the perfect lullaby for me to sleep more peacefully last night🤗

okay now i will comment on the WAR !
Pehle toh i salute these two love birds for fighting a war while keeping roza...Amaa mujhe toh roze mein sirf ek cheez karne ka dil karta hai ...SLEEPING. 😆
That too to fight in the afternoon heat without water...ooohhh🤢
Yeah sometimes i almost forget that u are that friend from the other side of the border and thts why ur urdu is perfect...coz tu itna ghul mil gayi hai hum sab ke saath that i feel tu yahin kii hai... i love u yaar🤗tu koi bhi desh ki ho...i love u loads❤️

But more than the Urdu it was the indirect talking abt ghar and maalik that caught my attention...it was perfectly written ...hats off

WALLAH and he instructed them strictly not to touch her...that was expected from him bt still felt freshly cute ...*awwwsss*

Yaar kya likhu aur war ke baare mein i find it more like a 'i want to get my love back' wala lovey-dovey fight 🤣🤣

ur description and ALZIA in the picture make a perfect love-war sequence which is something i love seeing btwn two couples (remember sultan vs sultan fight ?)

i didnt feel teary at razia defeat...i was happy...coz she belongs to him and she must go where she belongs...badi ziddi hai woh ...accha hua mirza ne uski zidd tod dii...

P.S - THANK U VERY MUCH FOR NOT MAKING MIRZA CARRY RAZIA ON HIS SHOULDERS...I TOLD U ITS VERY UNROMANTIC ACCORDING TO ME...AND AT NO COSTS I COULD BEAR MIRZA DOING THAT TO HER...purey romance ki dhajiyaan udd jaati aur yeh jo pyaara sa comment maine likha hai na woh nahi likhti main😆
Edited by arshia200 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: arshia200

Amaaa hum neend mein thay na...bataya toh tha...
but kyunki aapne mann ko itna khush kar diya...so i commented on the part that made me happy. ur story was the perfect lullaby for me to sleep more peacefully last night🤗

okay now i will comment on the WAR !
Pehle toh i salute these two love birds for fighting a war while keeping roza...Amaa mujhe toh roze mein sirf ek cheez karne ka dil karta hai ...SLEEPING. 😆
That too to fight in the afternoon heat without water...ooohhh🤢
Yeah sometimes i almost forget that u are that friend from the other side of the border and thts why ur urdu is perfect...coz tu itna ghul mil gayi hai hum sab ke saath that i feel tu yahin kii hai... i love u yaar🤗tu koi bhi desh ki ho...i love u loads❤️

But more than the Urdu it was the indirect talking abt ghar and maalik that caught my attention...it was perfectly written ...hats off

WALLAH and he instructed them strictly not to touch her...that was expected from him bt still felt freshly cute ...*awwwsss*

Yaar kya likhu aur war ke baare mein i find it more like a 'i want to get my love back' wala lovey-dovey fight 🤣🤣

ur description and ALZIA in the picture make a perfect love-war sequence which is something i love seeing btwn two couples (remember sultan vs sultan fight ?)

i didnt feel teary at razia defeat...i was happy...coz she belongs to him and she must go where she belongs...badi ziddi hai woh ...accha hua mirza ne uski zidd tod dii...

P.S - THANK U VERY MUCH FOR NOT MAKING MIRZA CARRY RAZIA ON HIS SHOULDERS...I TOLD U ITS VERY UNROMANTIC ACCORDING TO ME...AND AT NO COSTS I COULD BEAR MIRZA DOING THAT TO HER...purey romance ki dhajiyaan udd jaati aur yeh jo pyaara sa comment maine likha hai na woh nahi likhti main😆

Shoulder carrying is romantic if the hero does it against the will of the heroine😛 its very cute.
Ofcorx no1 would feel bad at her defeat and uncle's death😆
Love u too🤗 urdu k saath meri hindi bhi bht achi he boss logon ko farq mehsoos hi nhi hta😛
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Posted: 9 years ago
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oh my god! i was breathless reading that line aab aap humari ammanat hai
so wonderful os. i loved it. keep wrriting. thanks 4 the pm.
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Originally posted by: cuteshravani

oh my god! i was breathless reading that line aab aap humari ammanat hai

so wonderful os. i loved it. keep wrriting. thanks 4 the pm.

Thank u🤗
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Sonu,meri jaan,first of all I am extremely sorry ki itni late se reply kar rahi hoon.Forgive me😊
Sceond,one thing about your writing is that you always have a surprise in store for us.Everything that you write always manages to keep the reader engrossed and charms the reader as well.

Do you really need my comments to know how AFSAW your OS is?I don't think so👏
The way you have described the feelings of Alzia,Altunia's passion and his fiery jealousy of Yaqut,no words can be enough.👏

The use of Urdu is beautiful and that is one of the things which makes your writings all the more special.

I love you Sonu for this beautiful piece of work🤗🤗🤗
Once again,AFSAW,AFSAW and AFSAW👏👏

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