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shagun-rocks

@shagun-rocks

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Posted: 10 years ago

#151

loved the chapter...i went MIA over the last couple of days..i'm sorry i cou;dn't reply when the previous chapters were posted.. i re-read all the chapters at one go once again..and as i read this FS in office, i have this super happy smile plastered on my face right now...so much so that the girl in the neighbouring cubicle just asked what it is that has suddenly perked up my mood! :D..great job girl..:)

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Navya

@Navyya

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Posted: 10 years ago

#152

Again my dear this was beautifully written...i...i...i'm ( at a loss of words ) i wish i could convey in words the beautiful feeling of your story... it is deep, subtle, intense... letting us into the heart of emotions and feelings and helping us explore it with raw passion...Absolutely flawless!!! Such powerful dialogues...Loved it to bits...and Rudra/Paro face off was a masterpiece... ... Hats off to you!!!

I don't know how in the world you manage to write with such flow and with such perfection. This is developing to be a beautiful story & I can not thank you enough for taking it forward...TBH,I was scared that this might be your last chapter so you can imagine my happiness when I came to know that this is NOT the end & we will get to read more of your awesome writting.

Every time I read your update , I find myself moving with the flow of emotions that underlies every sentence...The thoughts and spoken words are so easy to associate with their respective characters...Emotion...intensity...drama...passion...everything covered in a skilful manner...Fab , fab job on the update and can't wait to see what is in store next. Well done, sis...This sure made my day (well actually night ,to be precise ) so much better...and I love all the little details that you weave into the narrative... Great going !! Well done !!

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Rose1111

@Rose1111

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Posted: 10 years ago

#153

This is fabulous.I have a request . Can you write from where show ended BUT with Myrah being Paro. You write with such deep intensity & passion that this entire scenerio of Rudra getting attracted to Myrah & she to him , not knowing that she is Paro really that's why they are so drawn to each other...you will be able to put such stark & raw passion in it that it will be simply breath taking. Passion & intensity in its highest form it will be. I feel this can be a very intense story but it's a pity not many writter's are exploring it. Also it will give a closure to the horrific ending which we got.

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DiyaS

@DiyaS

Stunner

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Posted: 10 years ago

#154

Wow ... this one had me holding my breath as I read ... what was Rudra going to do?! The intensity, the barely masked passion, the heat, the fire ... Paro's silent mental conflict ... so beautifully written! 👏

Loved it! Waiting for the next part 😃

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tvbuf

@tvbuf

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 10 years ago

#155

Very intense !

Thanks for the PM 😛

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_ResHma_

@_ResHma_

Voyager

Posted: 10 years ago

#156

Hey Sabs, a damn good update.

There are stories which we read and there are stories which we see.

There are words which communicate and there are words which connect.

Do I need to tell you which category you fall in?

The way you write, it never feels like I am reading a story, it feels like a live action is taking place before my eyes.

Again this chapter is from Paro's point of view. The way she is thinking about the situation, about Rudra and about herself too.

Jallad - such an appropriate name for Rudra. But then this is Beast from the Beauty and Beast story.

So a loveable jallad for us.

So we get to see Paro's thoughts about the kiss. She is angry at letting him kiss her and also for reciprocating to it. But at no point I found her disgusting it. She was not at all angry at him for kissing her but called herself, her body a traitor for behaving in such a way.

Yet to see what how Rudra felt about the kiss. Right now he is concerned for her safety afterall he is her self appointed protector.

This is the Rudra we always loved. A Rudra playing mind games. A Rudra who is synonymous with intense. A Rudra whose every action be it love, anger, concern or fear, passion oozes out.

Love the way you have maintained Rudra's character.

So in all, a mind blowing update. Waiting for Rudra's reaction to the kiss.

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Roop_P

@Roop_P

Voyager

Posted: 10 years ago

#157

Lovely Update👏

Really intricacy with fluidity of flowing emotions of these characters.

Fabulous

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aaliah3108

@aaliah3108

Rocker

Posted: 10 years ago

#158

Wow ! what an update dear Sabs !!

I shall come back to pen down more. This much is not enough for the amazing piece you have written.

Your writing is so intense. !!!⭐️

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Tvbug2011

@tvbug2011

Dazzler

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Posted: 10 years ago

#159

Originally posted by: Lily30
loved the chapter👏
wow wow wow, the intensity😳

the way you scene, the emotions, no words to describe, I am speechless😃

Thank you Lily. 😃 Delighted that this chapter appealed to you and that you thought to share your reaction with me.

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Tvbug2011

@tvbug2011

Dazzler

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Posted: 10 years ago

#160

Originally posted by: shagun-rocks
loved the chapter...i went MIA over the last couple of days..i'm sorry i cou;dn't reply when the previous chapters were posted.. i re-read all the chapters at one go once again..and as i read this FS in office, i have this super happy smile plastered on my face right now...so much so that the girl in the neighbouring cubicle just asked what it is that has suddenly perked up my mood! :D..great job girl..:)

Thank you Shagun. Delighted that this chapter was able to enliven your work day - believe me your comment perked up mine, immensely. 😃

Wasn't sure that this chapter would appeal to readers on many counts - just that it was round about mid way to where I wanted to go at that point, but since the word count was already on the higher side (for me) decided to post it. So even if it feels like there is not much action in this piece, it is key to what happens next. I'm sure you know that, but...just to chat...😉😃

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