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Posted: 10 years ago

#161

Originally posted by: tiniaa
What an intense chapter. It was worth the wait & thank you for not letting this be the last. Look forward to more.

Thank you!😃 delighted that the wait was worthwhile - it's been a mad couple of weeks, with no time to think or to compose my thoughts. Hence the delay in posting. And yes there should be 1 more part to this story.

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Tvbug2011

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Posted: 10 years ago

#162

Originally posted by: Mihikkaa007
You are a genius. Thank you.

Thank you Mihikkaa for your fulsome praise. 😃 The pleasure is all mine.

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Tvbug2011

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Posted: 10 years ago

#163

Originally posted by: NavyaKavya30

Again my dear this was beautifully written...i...i...i'm ( at a loss of words ) i wish i could convey in words the beautiful feeling of your story... it is deep, subtle, intense... letting us into the heart of emotions and feelings and helping us explore it with raw passion...Absolutely flawless!!! Such powerful dialogues...Loved it to bits...and Rudra/Paro face off was a masterpiece... ... Hats off to you!!!

I don't know how in the world you manage to write with such flow and with such perfection. This is developing to be a beautiful story & I can not thank you enough for taking it forward...TBH,I was scared that this might be your last chapter so you can imagine my happiness when I came to know that this is NOT the end & we will get to read more of your awesome writting.

Every time I read your update , I find myself moving with the flow of emotions that underlies every sentence...The thoughts and spoken words are so easy to associate with their respective characters...Emotion...intensity...drama...passion...everything covered in a skilful manner...Fab , fab job on the update and can't wait to see what is in store next. Well done, sis...This sure made my day (well actually night ,to be precise ) so much better...and I love all the little details that you weave into the narrative... Great going !! Well done !!

Thank you, Navya, for your detailed feedback. It's great that you took the trouble to respond at length, because as an author it's just so important to know which bits worked and which ones didn't.

Am so thrilled that you liked the dialogue - I was a little concerned there because my Hindi is not that great, and then because the bilingual translation could be quite irritating for readers of 1 language. So glad that you were able to overlook both weaknesses to enjoy the dialogue.

I started writing this as the final chapter, but at the end of this realized that I was only halfway there - and decided it was at a manageable length to take a break and post - was unsure of its reception, you and all the others who have liked and commented have reassured me, and encouraged me that much more to write the next part.

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Tvbug2011

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Posted: 10 years ago

#164

Originally posted by: Rose1111
This is fabulous.I have a request . Can you write from where show ended BUT with Myrah being Paro. You write with such deep intensity & passion that this entire scenerio of Rudra getting attracted to Myrah & she to him , not knowing that she is Paro really that's why they are so drawn to each other...you will be able to put such stark & raw passion in it that it will be simply breath taking. Passion & intensity in its highest form it will be. I feel this can be a very intense story but it's a pity not many writter's are exploring it. Also it will give a closure to the horrific ending which we got.

Thank you Rose. 😃 Delighted that it appealed to you.

Thank you for your story idea. I will definitely give it some thought, although I have to say that at this point I can't think beyond what lies next - you see I too have only an outline at this point, and sometimes the story changes as I write it. So quite frankly, am not thinking beyond this one just yet.

But agreed, the ending could have been so much better.

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Tvbug2011

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Posted: 10 years ago

#165

Originally posted by: Sameeksha55
GREAT.👏👏

Thank you. 😃

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Tvbug2011

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Posted: 10 years ago

#166

Originally posted by: DiyaS
Wow ... this one had me holding my breath as I read ... what was Rudra going to do?! The intensity, the barely masked passion, the heat, the fire ... Paro's silent mental conflict ... so beautifully written! 👏

Loved it! Waiting for the next part 😃

Thank you Diya for your kind words. 😃 And for responding to my pm.

I thought Paro's inner turmoil would appeal to you. It's something that I have wanted to dwell on every now and again in my RReviews, as I knew you did in your daily takes, but the serial rarely gave the opportunity. Soo, obviously, now that this story demanded it, I was more than happy to indulge myself and everyone else so minded. 😃

And delighted to know Rudra's reaction held your interest.

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varshu27

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Posted: 10 years ago

#167

Yet another breath taking chapter. I was transported to the sandy dunes and could feel all the tumultuous emotions of both Rudra and Paro. The intensity and passion of the initial days of RR was so palpable in ur chapter. As usual you have left us craving for more.

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pal81

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Posted: 10 years ago

#168

Loved the chapter. I like how youve kept Paro and Rudra's character the same as we saw in RR initially - the jallad and his captive. The words he whispered in her ear had the hair at the back of my neck standing up.. Cant wait to read more.

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Lavender mist

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Posted: 10 years ago

#169

loved this story.

so intense like our old rr.

awesome job.

will wait for the update.

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Cutemithra

@Cutemithra

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Posted: 10 years ago

#170

Another intense chapter. You beautifully depict Paro's inner turmoil and Rudra's determination to make her see the truth.
Passion at it's peak.

Thank you for the PM.

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