OS: Poisoned Apple

ACTywm

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Posted: 11 years ago

#31

Originally posted by: cruze
nice os
continue writing

Thank you...have a few new scenes playing in mind...when they become more concrete will definately pen them 😃

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pakpearl

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Posted: 11 years ago

#32

Originally posted by: ACTywm

Lol Arshi will always be Arshi...but Parud are now sneaking into my heart and expanding it to make a room for themselves there too...😛

N see ab kabhi math kehna ke mai tumhari baath nahi manthi...hamesha manthi ho...kyunke shona tumhara humkum sarakhon par...😛

Good girl...

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dumas

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Posted: 11 years ago

#33

LOVED THE OS LOVED HIS REACTION AND LOVED HOW HE REMEMBER HIS WORDS TO HER LOVED HOW SHE REALIZED HE DID CARE AND LOVED HIM SAYING SHE WAS HIS WIFE AWESOME UPDATE THANKS FOR THE PM.

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shree10

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Posted: 11 years ago

#34

beautiful os. I would have liked Major hovering over Paro to take care of her!

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Maya

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Posted: 11 years ago

#35

This was very sweet...

Liked how you wrote about Rudra's emotions as he willed her to wake up...nicely done!

I think all of us were rooting for a paro getting poisoned and rudra tending to her..so thank you for giving us what the CVs did not 😛

Can i suggest that you use a slightly bigger and widely spaced font like Georgia...it makes reading easier...

Edited by What_the - 11 years ago

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gustave154

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Posted: 11 years ago

#36

Love this OS. You captured the characters so perfectly in this Story.

MOAR PLS

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Deepthi

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Posted: 11 years ago

#37

Very sweet story.. But u dint say what happened to kaki-sa? Kidding.. The sweet ending was just perfect without bringing her in..

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ACTywm

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Posted: 11 years ago

#38

Originally posted by: dumas
LOVED THE OS LOVED HIS REACTION AND LOVED HOW HE REMEMBER HIS WORDS TO HER LOVED HOW SHE REALIZED HE DID CARE AND LOVED HIM SAYING SHE WAS HIS WIFE AWESOME UPDATE THANKS FOR THE PM.

Thank you dumas...😳

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ACTywm

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Posted: 11 years ago

#39

Originally posted by: shree10
beautiful os. I would have liked Major hovering over Paro to take care of her!

yeah me too...may be at some point in the show that may happen...we see a shimmer of it when he takes care of her in her temporary blind state 😃

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ACTywm

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Posted: 11 years ago

#40

Originally posted by: What_the
This was very sweet...
Liked how you wrote about Rudra's emotions as he willed her to wake up...nicely done!
I think all of us were rooting for a paro getting poisoned and rudra tending to her..so thank you for giving us what the CVs did not 😛

Can i suggest that you use a slightly bigger and widely spaced font like Georgia...it makes reading easier...

Yeah...i was really hoping for that too...as that would show him she does mean something to him as before the puja he is ready to have her out of his life...well may be this track of the love triangle where Paaro is shutting him out...may make us see him pine for her...

And point noted...thank you for suggesting it...whenever I pen another os...will definately use a bigger font 😃

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