OS: Yesterday and Tomorrow--Repentance-Completed.

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dumas

@dumas

Stunner

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Posted: 11 years ago

#171

amazing update the nightmares is killing him he is repenting in his own way not showing his feeling everyone think that the man was just made of rock and ice loved aman pov on what was going on and around him from the major nightmares to him not showing an emotions except when he slept and that jk he has no honor or pride he is a born physo who loves the pleasure of the kill the feeling of hot blood on his hands and knowing he has shown some their death one scary character amazing update thanks for the pm in advance .

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Aruni.

@Aruni.

Dazzler

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Posted: 11 years ago

#172

No I am not upset, but yes a little impatient. Ok, very impatient.

After part 2 what do we have? Rudra is hurt, Aman is mad, and oh, JK is still evil.

First thing i wanna know is - like all the BSD common-people - HOW IS PARO DAMMIT? 😡

Ok honestly speaking, JK's cold blooded calculations did boil my blood a bit. He is just sitting there, getting his limb treated, all the while thinking which one should he finish off next. You win Napster sa. JK officially is the most evil, scary, and hated villain i have ever come across in a story. 👏

Now that he has decided to kill Paro somehow, someday, can we allow him to live? HELL NO! He is going down, right? Right?

So, that is all for me. My earlier statement still stands, Rudra dev. I NEED A PROPER REPENTANCE. Erotic dreams, self-inflicted cut wounds and unkemptness? 😳 Big deal. I am still waiting.

Edited by aruni50218 - 11 years ago

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jdronamraju

@jdronamraju

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#173

Have been reading your FF recently and I love this concept of yesterday and tomorrow. Such contrasting times in their lives. Yours is not the run of the mill FF's, and makes a wonderful read..:)

In this, Even though there are no rundra paro scenes, I still liked this part very much. The slow build up around it, exploring the minds of other characters also, adds to the depth of the story, for me. Aman's reactions are very natural when he doesnt see the expected reaction from Rudra, but if he gives it a diff thought, he would understand why Rudra is not letting himself think about Parvati. Khan's thoughts that he would come back for paro even years later, that line itself makes it spooky.. That was a very nice touch..good job :)

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vaughn

@vaughn

Explorer

Posted: 11 years ago

#174

You are a brilliant writer!! a lazy person writing a comment😊 I want to rudra suffer more to bring Jk but in a loving way😆😆😆. man i am totally confused!! I want them together but not now. I really liked this part, your characterization of Jk is scary. Any way thank you very much for writing this story. This is so different than the other if stories we have read!!

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shirinfarhaad

@shirinfarhaad

Explorer

Posted: 11 years ago

#175

You know, I loved the fact that you have analyses jansheen khan's whole history. It's like you have researched this guys past, connected it with his future and tried to tell us how and what kind of a person he is, keeping in mind his psychotic abilities. You are very thorough in the characterization and very clear about where your story is going. As always, you kept us hooked for the entire part, wanting for more. I know I have said it a lot of time but Ek baar aur kehna banta hai, you are an amazing writer.

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jojo21

@jojo21

Explorer

Posted: 11 years ago

#176

I struggled with this particular set - Paro deserved the protection of the BSD from the likes of Jaseem Khan. I will admit that I can't see how we go from THIS particular moment to the tomorrow where they are together. I'm very curious and you've given us pieces but there has to be more...:)

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shree10

@shree10

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#177

yday part1-
Sorry N but for first time I say that I just skimmed through and didn't like this.

In the end it was a dream but what does it mean? That Rudra has been offered helpless girls like this before and he had taken every advantage of it??

May be I dont even have right to put these questions when I could not read this one properly. So sorry for that.

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shagun-rocks

@shagun-rocks

Inactive

Posted: 11 years ago

#178

gave a quick read...i am burdened with piles of work at the moment...i'll just say one thing, aman's words to rudra was the highlight of the chapter..and i don't even want to talk about jasheem khan...

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shree10

@shree10

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#179

yday part-2 and tomo part 1

For Cliched and juvenile readers like me, it's obvious to think that repentence would be about Rudra repenting about the atrocities he unleashed on Paro however justified his actions might be in his role as BSD major.. So this is slightly disappointing that you postponed Paro Rudra part for later.
Just to tease us..??
But I must appreciate the way you gave this altogether different and unexpected twist by bringing in Dilsher-Mala, Jasheem Khan, Aman-BSD etc.

Eagerly wiating for next installment!