Os:five years later PART-7,8,9 PG-6 14 dec

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Hello guys.its my new os fast forwarded to 5 years later afteq d last episode of rbo..hope u guys would like it...
Khanak:varni,kya k ar rahi ho?chalo,apne toys wapis apni jagah pe rakho.chalo...
(shanak's 4 year daughter VARNIKA kept playing pretending she hasnt listened)
khanak:varni,suna nai tumne.chalo khadi ho.kitni der se khel rahi.dikhao aj teacher ji ne school me kya karwaya.
(varnika again didnt move.at d same tme madhavi enters d room wid little boy hiding behind her saree's pallu)
khanak:arey mummyji!yeh PARTH apke pas tha?tabhi mein sochu achanak se kaha gayab ho gaya.jab dekho idhar udhar bhag jata hai...
madhavi (brings him in front who was luking scared at her mother's angry face and sits on bed wid parth on her lap):arey,apni dadi ke pas hi to gaya tha.khanak tum bhi na.bachd apne ghar mein nai ghumenge toh kaha ghumenge?...
khanak:mummyji apko pata nai,apki aur ada ki isi lad pyar ne in dono ko bigad diya hai.jab b padai ke liye kaho to apke pas ya ada ke pas bhag jate hai.pata hai na inhe dada dadi hai na bachane ke lie...
madhavi:o-ho khanak.tum bhi na bacho ke piche pad jati ho.yeh umar to khelne kudne ki hai,aur tum in par padai ka itna bojh dal rah ho..
khanak:par mummyji...
madhavi:khanak beta sach kahu,shaitanio ke mamle mein parth to bilkul apne papa pe gaya hai.pata hai,bachpan mein shaan to isse b zyada shararti tha.ye bechara to uske samne kuch bhi nai hai...
khanak:mummyji ye to apne bilkul thik kaha.par yeh shararti the nai ,hai..sachi inse zyada(she said pointin towards kids)to woh mujhe pareshan karte hai.bacho se zyada to shantanu ko sambhalna zyada mushkil hai..
(khanak suddenly realised what she just said .she saw madhavi smiling at her.she immediately luked down embarrasingly).
mads:oh to mere bete ki burai ki ja rahi hai.hun??..
khanak:nai mummyji mein to bas aise hi. woh..
mads:woh kya?ha?(she immediately burst into laughter at her innocence.khanak got more embarrased)par woh shaitan hai kaha?ab tak ghar nai aya?..
khanak:nai mummyji.mein bhi kabse unhi ka intezar kar rahi thi.par lagta hai koi zaruri kam a gaya hoga.
mads:par itni late to use kabhi nai hoti..
khanak:yeh thode dino se pareshan the.ek gane ki dhun banane mein dikat a rahi thi. To shayad usi mein lage honge..
mads:acha.waise khanak,sach mein shan ekdum badal gaya hai.i had never thought ki shan itni mehnat bi kar sakta hai..par aj dekho,usne apni mehnat,lagan se apni ek alag pehchan bana li.i feel so proud of him..
(khanak smiled feeling proud for shan herself)
mads:chalo mein chalti hu.tumahare ada bi ane wale hai
(she kissed both of her grand children on cheeks who were now engaged in playing and left for her room.khanak luked at her children.they were snatching toys from each other.she thought to herself that mummyji was right .they were exact copies of their father.she smilf and walk towards them)
khanak:kyun lad rahe ho dono?..
varnika:mummy dekho na,parth ne mera castle tod dia.
.parth:nai mummy,meine nai toda.yeh jhooth bol rah hai..
(they both start arguing complaining abt other to their mother)
khanak(a little frustrated):bas..band karo.parth,varni.ab koi ladai nai.bahut der ho gai hai,apne sare toys wapis rakho .papa ane wale hai aur unhone tumhe ladte dekha to papa ko kitna bura lagega,hai na??..
varni:par ladai isne shuru ki..
parth:nai meine nai tumne..
khanak:varni,parth.kya ap mummy ki bat nai manoge.(both of them nod their head innocently).
khanak(smiling):to jaldi sd ye sab saf karo..
(both d kids got up and start cleaning their stuff.when both of them were done,they ran and sit on ther mother's lap)
khanak:are wah.ap dono ne to bahv acha saf kiya(she gave each of them a kiss on cheek as their prize)chalo ab so jate hai.kal subah school bhi to jana hai..
.varni:nai mein papa ke ane ke bad soungi..
khanak:varni.papa ko ane mein der ho jaegi..
parth:nai ,mein bhi papa ke sath sounga..
khanak(little angrily)meine kaha na papa late aenge.aur agar ap late sohge to subah school ke liye late ho jaegi aur phir teacher se dant padegi,isliye so jao.(but both kids shook their heads in no)
khanak:varni ,parth suna nai tumne..(both were reluctant to sleep until their father comes.khanak was finding it very difficult .just then a voice came from behind)
""yeh mere bachon ko kaun dant raha hai '""...
( al 3 of them turnf around and saw shan standing at entrance wid hands folded and fake anger on face...shan had just entered d room and was standing at d entrance,listening to d whole argument wid a smile on his face.he felt happy to see his kids waiting for him.a grin spread across his face seeing their mother's irritated face ..he walks inside seeing lighted face of his kids and surprised khanak)
TO BE CONTD...

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Hey! Nice OS and I'll be looking forward to your next update.
Just a request...if you make separate paragraphs and start every dialogue from a new line tou that would make it easier to follow the text. Hope you dont mind me saying this.
Update soon. 😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: ABlank90

<font face="'Comic Sans MS', Times, serif" size="2" color="#cc3399">Hey! Nice OS and I'll be looking forward to your next update.</font>

<font face="'Comic Sans MS', Times, serif" size="2" color="#cc3399">Just a request...if you make separate paragraphs and start every dialogue from a new line tou that would make it easier to follow the text. Hope you dont mind me saying this.</font>
<font face="'Comic Sans MS', Times, serif" size="2" color="#cc3399">Update soon.😊</font>

thanx for d suggestion.wil definitely keep this in mind next tme
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Nice one ... different, with kids in school and all ...

Shantanu still likes to irritate Khanak ... thats sweet and the kids are also like him ... uff!

I am sure she is able to handle all the 3 of them pretty well, after all she is from dhuwadi!

Waiting to see what happens next.

~Cheers,
Dish
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Posted: 13 years ago
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hey very nice yaar...5 years after...😊

too gud continue plzzz...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Nice OS...forwarded to 5 years.
Do continue
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Hey nice OS i liked your other one too... .sorry but i didnt get ur name?????? plz continue soon I really miss RBO and its so nice of you to write a leap...i loved it Khanak and Madhvi's interaction with the kids were described really nicey now waiting to see their dad's reaction...plz update soon😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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wow!!!!!...very nice
luvd Khanak & Madhavi convo
waiting 4 the next 1...continue soon
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Posted: 13 years ago
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luvved it yaar...sorry 4 being late..pls continue...ASAP
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Wow..superb..plz update d next part

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