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Posted: 14 years ago
#51
Ok am back now! I love spamming this thread! 😃
Nice, short & sweet update! That too full on Shaan & Khanak even if its a phone conversation. I like how u make them go back & forth from personal to professional & then back to personal & then again talk about work & in between another remark about themselves. It was funny in a way. They r not typical lovebirds who will only talk about their upcoming marriage & honeymoon & how they miss each other but its expected that they will throw in a line or 2 about their personal stuff in between discussing about work & not the other way round.
And yet the tension showed, the anger showed, the possessiveness showed, the disapproval showed, her unease showed, Shaan's concern showed...everything was crystal clear in that little conversation! Hats off to u!
And I don't think Shaan is of the type to directly say NO to Khanak in anything she is adamant about but he works his way in a different way. Here more than his being there for her to take her to this place it will be like he will go or send someone to get the forms & come with them & hand them over to Khanak, still miffed with her. And Khanak will quietly say thanks though she will be satisfied with the gesture. I may be wrong but that is what comes to mind. These 2 r really so unique!
And I love the sarcastic comments of Khanak & Shaan! Her total disinterest in going to Boston which Shaan very well gets the drift of & his rebuking her to be careful about her enthusiasm spilling over!! I really laughed out loud there.
And after May 29th what is he planning to do? Tie her up with chains to himself? 😆 I am sure Khanak is not that meek type, here she really has a backbone & a mind of her own in the true sense but she is still understanding, complying & giving in her own way even when they r fighting. They r so lovable!
Seriously these 2 have managed to keep me ponder & mull about them now 24/7. Purvi & I was literally fighting the other day over Shaan! 😆 And another fact I have to be thankful to u Aditee, is because of this story I am completely over the show. I don't feel the urge to watch it anymore, infact all I do is simply think & crave for ur Shanak.
I have to invent new words to praise ur style Aditee! I even wrote to Purvi how u write so crisply, to the point, so very realistic & yet full of appeal, charm & that zing that we all crave for! 😃 All I can do is bow down in respect & plead to u to write more. Keep going. 👍🏼
Edited by lghosh - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
#52
Lana you are not alone, Ive quit watching also.
The mental image of the fictional Shaan and Khanak is way more appealing.
Dont worry, there will be no PSPs or Nintendos or upstart Amreekan women.
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Posted: 14 years ago
#53

Originally posted by: aditee

Lana you are not alone, Ive quit watching also.

The mental image of the fictional Shaan and Khanak is way more appealing.
Dont worry, there will be no PSPs or Nintendos or upstart Amreekan women.

Aditee maloom hai re!! Touche to what u wrote! I have full faith in ur abilities. That is the reason I am so hooked to Casa than the show! Its not even comparable in any way about the quality, as I wrote to u earlier it will be an insult to u if I compare this masterpiece with the show now.
Yep this Shaan belongs to golden RBO with whom I fell in love with & this Khanak never belonged in the show ever, she is a true bold, strong, determined, passionate woman of today's world & yet has a softness in her that is unusual. I can't even see her as show's K, thank god, sry thank u for that!
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Posted: 14 years ago
#54


Ujjwala,
First off, I am absolutely in love with your name!
I have to, I must, and I will use it some where somehow in this FF
Ive said it!
Gosh!
Such a lovely name!👏👏
Thank you ssooo much for loving it and writing about it.
The painstaking copying to notepad? Kya boloon?
Except Thanks
I am thrilled you enjoyed it so much to do that.
Thanks for reading and writing to me. It means a lot to me!
I am totally in love with this couple.
The way they looked and acted between April-October 2010.
This FF is a product of my imagination that continues to be in deep freeze and supplies me with enough fuel to write everyday.


Hey Aditi,

First of all, I am so glad that you replied my msg...
I am so happy that u loved my name ... even I love my name very much 😊 I am my favorite 😉

Although initially i felt copying it to notepad was kinda painstaking, but as I started reading ... it was more than worth... 😊 I was completely in a diff world ...

I myself is a very private person and I hardly let people know about my emotions... But I can't believe I am writing all these to u ... Loved the character sketch and the picturization of Shanak...
ManiRatnam is my fav too ...

You have absolutely no idea of what u have made me... I have totally lost it...I keep thinking abt the story and what next ... all the time... I login at odd times to look for ur next update .. i know it sounds crazy, but it's all ur fault sweetheart...

You are such an amazing writer...
I am a voracious reader myself and I read all kinda books... But your writing has really amused me ... Hats off to u ...
Keep up the good work and please update soon ...😃


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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: Souma.N

Aaj ki taza khabar?!!!!!!!

no update 😕

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Posted: 14 years ago
#56


Who said no update ... Aditee ka tho koi aisa comment nahi hain.

~Dish
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: dishbhan



Who said no update ... Aditee ka tho koi aisa comment nahi hain.

~Dish


she went offline re 😕
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Posted: 14 years ago
#58
Maybe she is cooking up the delicious treat before dishing it out to us!! 😃 So we have to be nice & patient! Aditee ab itna kuch bolne ke baad pls update kar dena!! 😃
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Originally posted by: lghosh

Maybe she is cooking up the delicious treat before dishing it out to us!! 😃 So we have to be nice & patient! Aditee ab itna kuch bolne ke baad pls update kar dena!! 😃


Lana
u have raised my hope again while I was trying to convince myself otherwise ...ab update nahi aaya na to..😛
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Posted: 14 years ago
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PART 53

Shivneri Nagar, Chembur

9: 15 pm, May 2nd Monday

The rain has soaked her clothes, her umbrella had torn from one steel wire. She loved soaking in the rain, so it was rather fun.

Her phone rings

Khanak: Haan Ritu I am downstairs. Abhi lift mein chadoongi.

Shaan: Were you also planning to call me at some point? (sarcastic)

Khanak: You never asked me to call you! (teeth chattering) (something about that tone, ticked her off big time)

Shaan: I never asked you to go to Anushakti Nagar either, but you did!

Shaan: Kya hua? Chup kyon ho?

Khanak: I am cold, I got soaked in the rain.

Shaan: That's good to know!

Khanak: Thanks! Abhi mein lift mein chad rahi hoon, shaayad kat jaaye.

Shaan: Or are you hoping it would?

A guilty flush covers her face.

Khanak: I am not in a mood to fight right now''.

Shaan: That's a first!

Khanak: I am home now. So you know.

Shaan: Its past 9:30 Khanak!

Khanak (looking at her phone) Its actually 9: 27!

Shaan: Tumhe khushi milti hai?

Khanak: Kis baat se?

Shaan: (ignoring the bait) How did you commute?

Khanak: train se!

Shaan: Tumhaare "local" ka driver naraaz ho jaata agar tum cab le leti?(sarcastic, condescending).

Khanak: Nahi, I was worried the South Bombay brats would bother me if I was walking the streets at night waiting for a cab!

Shaan: Watch what you say Khanak! you are going to be married to one soon!(silky)

Khanak: Oh! How can I forget? I still haven't recovered from the shock of the engagement.

Pause

Enters the apartment, Ritu is sprawled on the divan watching TV with a smug smile, smells like food, churns up her stomach. Maybe Kritik called?

Khanak: I have to go now!

Shaan: Thanks for not bothering to call?

Khanak: You are over reacting! Ive always travelled by buses or trains. Not all of us can afford S class Mercs. Some of us have to be walking the streets to get splashed by the water your tyres kick up.

Shaan: Make sure your fist doesn't hurt after hurling that blow.

Khanak: You abandon me to go off to work and then expect me to call you after a routine day? (spontaneous, as they say "Its good to let it all out!")

Shaan: Khanak''''

Khanak: I don't want to talk.

Shaan: You are in your own world. I saw how you cross the road outside Ajmera a few times. You need an adult guiding you.

Khanak: Not sure who you saw. It was not me!

Shaan: Did Parul send you the invite?

Khanak: Yes she did!

Shaan: You should get the detail behind the scoring in an hour or two.

Khanak: I am not working tonite (miffed)

Shaan: I did not expect you to! (he realized she was back being tactless)

Khanak: I will see you if I make it to the review.

Shaan: Much of it revolves around the work you had oversight on.

Khanak: Thanks for the back handed compliment!

Shaan: Sure Khanak, I assume you will not let personal battles with fiance impact your work?

Click!

May 3rd Tuesday

1 PM

Ajmera Corporate office

The day began beautifully for Khanak. Kritik had showed up and had given her and Ritu a ride to work after taking them out for breakfast. Her tailor had finally returned a dark pink churidar kurta after alteration. She had bought it at Meena Bazaar a month ago, and it was lost somewhere. It had the most gorgeous dark pink dupatta, with yellow paint like artwork. The trim on her kurta matched the dupatta's design. She braided her hair on top of her head, and wore fake gold hoops. Her nose was red with all the sneezing, "Now! If only I could make that dark pink, then I would match all over" she thought, looking at her reflection.

Despite feeling like she was coming down with a cold, she felt great. She didn't think too much about her fight with Shaan. It had almost become a routine.

Wondered if he thought about life after the wedding like she did. He had looked up at the window just before he had hopped into his car on Saturday, she was too upset to meet his eyes, she had stepped back. She had brought out her favorite blanket and gone on to take a three hour nap on the divan, where he lay down at one point. She had asked him what he was wearing, "Clive Christian's C" he said. She wondered how many colognes he had. Wondered if he thought about their kiss. He never gushed, just one or two sentences here and there, that completely took her breath away.

Scorecard Review in progress. 2 :10 PM

There are 11 people around the table, Shaan, Nachiket, Khanak, Ram, four auditor reps, and three people from Ajmera's vendor liaisoning team. They ideally had to have a couple more Site reps but they went missing as Rahat did not want work to be disrupted for these reviews. Already mulstiple crisis was brewing at the site and Shaan was reluctant to be spending hours in formal reviews like these, when he could be working hands on.

The review covers a range of metrics,tracking, timeliness, accuracy, follow up, availability, responsiveness, collaboration, simplicity and a half dozen other key process indicators.

They are scored a solid green for 100%, lime green, yellow orange and red for below 60%. The data was obtained from email exchanges, data sheets, design plans, reports and project updates between Ajmera and Modi & Dastur.

A couple tracking and timeliness score a solid green, but most are either a lime green or a orange.

Ram is clearly not as upset as Khanak!

Khanak has a series of questions on how they were scored and how they compared to other firms on the projects etc. Some results were not disclosed publicly, further agitated her. Shaan was completely involved despite being pressed for time.

Some comments included "Errors in schematic designs" "system shut down when firm's design changes were uploaded" "review/submittal schedule overlooked in three instances" "Design changes not submitted to CAD standards compliance archive".

Ram touches her hand reassuringly. He has over 12 years of experience in the industry and had warned her that such reviews were more a formality than radical efforts to change process. Khanak's devastated anyway.

This was her first project of this size, with a client as big as Ajmera. Some scores she was quite embarrassed, because she knew she could have done better!!

There were too many charts, graphs, benchamarks, comparisions to industry standards... Her eyes were becoming watery now, with the sneezing, she had downed her third cup of chai. Wanted to go to bed...

Her dupatta had caught on her ring a couple of times, he had noticed it just when she was freeing I, both times. In a room full of people, they exchanged looks unmindful of people around them. The results were terrible on one hand and she was feuding with him on the other, and her cold was threatening to take over her body.

After multiple arguments and discussions and some corrections, the meeting finally ends after 5 PM. Ram is pleased and not too perturbed. Khanak is a mess, physically and emotionally.

She walks over to Paula's desk to check if she has comething for colds. She doesn't want to ask Shaan's admin.

He is out sprinting behind her, wearing navy trousers and a white shirt with broad vertical navy stripes. "He looks and acts like a million bucks only when I feel like a bum" she concludes.

Shaan: Khanak'..

Khanak (turns around, wiping her eyes) Ya?

Shaan: Are you upset?

Khanak: No I just have an awful cold... or something...

Shaan: Hang on... talks on the phone)

She walks to Paula's desk, Paula's missing.

Ram has asked her to take off already.

Shaan: Hey, where are you off to?

Khanak: Umm let me think''' first to some skiing, then snow boarding (miserable yet not quitting)

Shaan: You should save those punches for when you get better. They don't seem to be landing well (taunting)

Khanak: the review is over. So I am going back to work (lies)

Shaan: Khanak, you need to rest!

Khanak: I thought we shud celebrate my "all green" score card? (sneezing mid way, losing the knock-back)

Shaan(walking up to her, out of earshot of the guests waiting) Khanak, That was splendid...but Act II is just for our private viewing! 😡

(angry, hissing between his teeth) (not touching her yet verbally forceful)
Edited by aditee - 14 years ago

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