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Posted: 14 years ago
Beautiful update👏

The fone conv was cute
Meray un meray voh.... super cute
😊
I luved the rule set by him😉☺️

Shweet hubby says i'll do wen u'll sleep😲

Its luvly she'll be the lyricist and duet singer wid him... quality time and quantity time.😍

Finally i relaxed dat suhani is married and not goin to cum b/w our shanak👍🏼
Her past i guess is related to shekhar... i hope that doesn't cause any harm to shaan's carrier

Luved it.
Continue soon.
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Posted: 14 years ago
Part Twenty Three: Chori Se Chori

Delhi
Gurgaon Central Apartment Complex
6:10 PM

It's been an hour since Shaantanu returned home to his wife from his first day at work. Loads of details are discussed, she is happy to have her official affiliation with his first Album in the form of an Appointment Letter that Sharma and the Team drafted and he bought it home for her on their request. Suhaani's encounter turns out to be the most interesting part of his day and so it is currently being discussed over his favorite blend of Coffee and her evening bhajiyas.

"Khanak I think koi toh baat hain Suhaani aur Sir kay beech…."

"Shaantanu app itnay yakeen se kaise keh saktay hain…aik baar he milay hain…"

"Haan per tum aggar vahaan hoti toh shayad tum bhi mehsoos kar paati…she seemed sad…pata nahi kyun lakin unki ankhein aur awaaz dono he bahut dukhi thi jub voh Sir ki baat kar rahi thi…"

"Hmm…ho sakta hain koi baat ho jo ajj bhi unhay preshaan karti hoon…lakin Sir Shekhar aise insaan nahi hain jo intentionally kissi koi hurt karay…"

"I know…Sir ki nature he itni impressive aur ideal hain kay voh bagair kissi vajah kay kabhi bhi koi aisi galti nahi kar saktay…"

"Aap ke rahay thay unn ki aik beti bhi hain…?"

"Hmm…I think kafi choti hain…maine age toh naho pohchi per unki baatoon se yahi andaaza ho raha tha kay she is probably around1 or 2…"

"Aur husband…?"

"Khanak…she is nice and all but yeh sub kafi personal nahi hain pehli mulaqaat kay liye…?"

"Aap ke liye..main hoti toh pooch layti…"

"Kal hogi na…khud kar lena apna detective work…!" he smiles watching her as she carelessly dips her bhajiya in her favorite green chutney and devours a bite from it and then feeds him the rest.

"Khanak mujhay mota kar do gi khila khila kar!"

"Theek hain na…main nahi chahti app apni female fans ko had se zayaada handsome lagay…"she declares possessively while getting up from the table and piling up the empty plates to take them back to the kitchen sink.

"Oh really now…! koi abhi se jealous feel kar raha hain kya?" He tugs at her golden-yellow chiffon dupatta as he stands up right behind her, if she were to turn their faces would experience an inevitable collision.

"Chodiye na…Shaantanu."

"Chodnay kay liye toh maine nahi pakra… Khanak…" he states his intentions in a husky tone as he removes the hair tie from her neatly tied pony tail, letting his warm breath make an impression on her neck; she loses herself to a combination of hazelnut Nescafe blend and his half used Polo cologne.

The dishes and mugs remain on the table and the newly weds retire to their bedroom much earlier than usual.
😳

Mumbai
Khandelwal House
9:45 PM
"Madhavi… kal Mrs.Arora kay yahaan jo lunch event hain ussay mujhay excuse kar dena…main jaanti ho Charity function hain per mera sir bahut dukh raha hain aur mujhay nahi lagta main jaa paaogi…" Dadi informed Madhavi as she came in her room with some warm milk and medicines that were prescribed to her recently.

"Theek hain Maa…app please apnay rest ka khyaal rakhay…baaqi saaray kaam baad mein hotay rahay gay…" Madhavi smiles at her mother-in-law as she tires to keep her worried face hidden from her. She has been feeling down since the past two weeks, stressing and wearing out her physical and mental health.

"Hmmm…Aur Sunil…voh agaya office se?"

"Jee…dinner kar kay aaye hain…kissi conference mein thay…"

"Tumnay toh kaahna kah liya na?"

"Jee…iss ghar se abb intezaar karnay ka rivaaj nahi raha Maa…app sahi kehti thi, sub loog apni duniya mein lag jaatay hain…kaun kahaan hain…kis haal mein hain… hum sub kuch bhool jaatay hain…"

"Arey… ajj tum aisi baatein kyun kar rahi hoon…?"

"Nahi bus yunhi…app apni tabiyaat jaldi se theek kar le Maa…app saath hoti hain din bhar meay toh iss ghar ka sunapan bardaasht kar leti hoon…app se argue karna abb meri adaat ban chuki hain lakin jub tak app theek nahi hogi main yeh sub nahi kar sakti… iss liye jaldi se theek hojaaye…!" Madhavi rubs her hand gently and they both smile lovingly at one another, realizing that at this point in their life their relation as mother and daughter-in-law has become a necessity that they have learned to cherish over time.

"Shaantanu ne apni zidd tumhi se li hain…jaise ajj tum mujhse larnay ki zidd kar rahi ho, voh bhi yunhi mujhse apni har baat manwanay ki zidd karta tha…"

"Jaanti hoon…voh zidd karta aur hum uss ki har zidd kea gay kamzoor par jatay…meray lakh manah karnay per bhi nahi maanta tha…"

"Uss ki bahut yaad aati hain na tumhay?"

"Jee Maa…beta hain, yaad toh aaye ga na…"

"Haan…samajh sakti hoon main… aik kaam kartay hain hum ussay milnay chalte hain…"

"Milnay?...lakin Sunil toh…"

"Arrey kya yeh zaroori hain kay Sunil ko har baat baatai jaaye…vaise bhi maine Shekhar se phone per pooch liya hain kay voh kahaan hain…"

"Kya..?! app ne yeh sub…"

"Main jaanti thi Shaantanu ne Shekhar ko bata kar Manali chora hoga…uss ka ustaad jo tehra voh…Shekhar ne Shaantanu kay Studio ka address diya hain…ghar ka ussay bhi kuch nahi pata…"

"Lakin hum jaaye gay kaise…"

"Bahane se…Sunil se keh day kay kissi rishtay daar ya tumhari kissi dost se milnay ja rahay hain…bus phir hum aik din mein laut aaye gay…"

"Yeh sahi plan hain Maa…! App ne such mein mera dil khush kar diya…Shaan aur Khanak dono khush ho jaye gay."

"Haan aur meri Choti Bahu ki Sargi aur pehla shagun dono saath leaky jaana hoga…"
"Arrey hain Karva Cahut bhi toh aaraha hain... lakin humay yahaan per bhi toh saari taiyaariaan…"

"Uss sub ki fikkar nahi karo..Sargi ka sara kuch main Shaan ko samjha doongi, hum toh vaise bhi Karva Chauth se teen din pehlay he laut aayegay per aggar Shaan kay pass Sargi ka samaan aur cheezein hongi toh koi preshaani nahi hogi…Voh humari Choti Bahu ko humari kami nahi mehsoos honay de ga…mujhay yakeen hain…" Daadi smiled at Madhavi who hugged her considerate and generous mother-in-law warmly, she was already looking forward to seeing her youngest and dearest son and daughter-in-law; the anticipation was already beginning to settle in for her.

Next Morning in Delhi
Gurgaon Central Apartment Complex
7:40 AM
She had already showered and was almost dressed for her new day, but he is still sprawled all over their bed where they made memories the night before, the wrinkles on the sheets and the gleaming moonlight that filtered in through the window were the only audience allowed.
"Shaantanu uthay… dair hojaye gi…mera pehla din hain ajj…!"
"Hmmm…" he mutters softly and then continues to sleep through her wake up calls as she searches for something tossing, turning, and pulling up and over several things in their room. The commotion from her search manages to get his attention and he puts up his head as his sleepy chocolate colored orbs follow her around the bedroom.
"Kh-anaa-akk…!
"Jee…kya hua…?" she answered in an irritated tone.
"Mujhay dhoondh rahi ho kya? Main yahaan para hoon…jahaan tum chor kar gayi thi…!" he is now sitting up in the bed, dressed in a muscle exposing black vest and white trousers, an attire which revealed just what would make knees and hearts grow weaker in just one glance, but his wife had already witnessed lot more than that night before and she had survived.
"Shaantanu iss waqt app ki sharaarat ka time bilqual nahi hain humaray pass…mera mangal sutr nahi mil raha…" She doesn't look up to see his naughty eyes or twitching lips and continues her search.
"Vahi jo kal raat maine…"
"Sssh! Shaantanu..app bhi na…" she hurriedly bends down to his level and places her finger on his lips, preventing him from divulging any private details of their night. For a moment he drowns in her shocked widened eyes which looked cuter in this particular expression and then he takes the opportunity and kisses her index finger that was resting against his lips. She withdraws her hand soon after his lips make an impression on her finger, crimson can easily be spotted on her face and he loves the effect of it on her.
"Yeh lo…" he draws the black beaded string centered with a sliver pendant from his left hand and dangles it in front of her. She simply leans forward, wanting him to practice his right and tie it around her neck. He complies and hooks it for her; she takes a moment to rest her head on his shoulder.
"Second day aur main sooch raha hoon call-in-sick kardo…" he says jokingly while taking in her fresh scent as she is still leaning on him.
"Bilqual nahi..! mera phela din hain…vaise bhi kaam saath mein he toh karna hain phir chutti kyun…" she pulls her head back and questions him innocently.
"Lakin jo mujhay karna hain voh kaam per nahi ho sakta…sub kya soochay gay Wifey…!" he replies in the most serious tone with a blank expression and it takes her a while to get the meaning.
"Haww!" she gasps loudly at the realization and pulls him off the bed by his hand while he laughs out loud and enjoys getting dragged and pushed in to the bathroom. "Jaldi tayaar hojaye…main naashta ready karti hoon…thirty minutes Shaantanu!" She warns him firmly before making her way out the bedroom and in to the kitchen.

Her shy smile and the crimson remain intact throughout their breakfast and even as they make their way to work in the crowded local.
😳


P.S: Need review and feedback as i am apprehensive about this update...not good at romance/mushy writing so excuse any errors...LOL...I hope you like how the story is progressing...
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Posted: 14 years ago
lovely update Imane! Have no qualms, this was great!
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Posted: 14 years ago
hei imane,
it was lovely..
dont worry abt the mushy moments..the way u bring it out is so cute..
so now khanak will know the relation abt suhaani n sir.sekhar which tells me that sir r suhaani is not that old to have a father-daughter relation..it must be something else..let me wait n watch for that to be revealed..
i'm happy that daadi n madz planned to meet shanak..
they'll be happy to meet each other..
continue soon imane..
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Posted: 14 years ago
mein sadke jawa:))
haaye haaye haaye haaye☺️☺️


they r just tooo cute a couple man...love them

kitna pyaar n their choti choti sharart...love it


l;ovely update imane just brings a big wide smile:)
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Posted: 14 years ago
Nice update dear ... but rahasya khula nahi ... Shekhar sir ka!

Haaye ... what romantic parts ... thoda aur details de sakti thi like their first kiss ☺️

Shaan is really mischievous, starting he parts mein aisa laga tho nahi tha ... ki after wedding aisa romance wala mischief naturally aata hain ladkon mein?

waiting for Khanak to meet that Shekhar sir's secret lady ... jaldi update dena...

~Cheers,
Dish



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Posted: 14 years ago
sonali really u present shanak romance so cutely love it sonali keep it up
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varsha..ur siggies with tere liye song.caption .rocks
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Posted: 14 years ago
Hey,


i am a sclient admirer of ur ff...i love ur story... & ur shanak ... plz update soon ... sorry cannot give long comment as logged in from phone.😭

waiting for the next update ...😃

love

Pranjal.😊
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Posted: 14 years ago
Lovely update👏

it refelecs the innocence and their luv ... 😍

shaan alwayz romntic... and khanak always shy
imagining them is magical... and u've penned it beautifully.

continue soon.
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Posted: 14 years ago
Reply Time!

Hey gals!

So i know i am so not like most awesome writers and participants on the forum who keep their story alive and give great feedback to the readers and don't just disappear after updating a part...to be super honest i feel guilty as my absence prevents live and one-on-one interaction with my supporting and kind readers. The reason for this is my M.D degree and i am sure you guys can understand the hectic schedules that we get trained in for this profession...This is my last year so if everything goes as planned i will be finishing towards the end of April next year...It's decided that Specialization will have to wait...! My 6 year B.S/M.D program at Brown has kept me on my toes all this time and it's hard to believe that it will be my last year. I have got to get back to the little things in life that i miss the most. I will admit that for these past 5ish years i have made life long friendships with text books and used logic and rationale in the some of the most emotional decisions in life...blame it on the feminist career and stubborn minded me but yes i have missed out a lot in life at such a young age. My momentary fix is RBO and the lead characters that are responsible for rekindling the essence of life in a robotic soul like me, inspire me enough to take up writing again, and to play out crazy ideas through my vids. My apartment always had it's quiet and lone moments and being the only occupant here makes seconds stretch to minutes and minutes to hours, but then everything seems to fall in place when i get time to write or to vid...i don't spend continuous hours at either task but do them whenever i miss being a alive and childlike...it's truly my escape in every way from a functional and a strategic life of a healer that i have signed myself up for...don't get me wrong, I do enjoy it and I am proud of it...but every once in a while you reach out to quench your thirst for life and so that is what this show is all about for me as i sit down every weekend to catch up on weekly episodes...

Anyhow...that was like a personal bio or something...i am sorry for being so wordy but I feel like my readers deserved to know why it is what it is...So yes this is the only show that holds sentimental value in my life which I believe lacks life-like qualities in general...

COMMENTING BACK TIME!

@
adventure_gurl:
thank You GRILIE! i always get great feedback from you on YT for my vids and now for my story...Truley a wonderful supporter...Thanks for being the first one to assure me that my latest update worked out fine...i was apprehensive about it.

@RB81:
You are SUPER AWESOME! I am glad to have you as my reader and critic as you always are clear with what you feel about the story and how it is shaping up! My "mushy moments" need improvement and i do promise to work on them to get them from "cute" to a little bit "hot"..maybe...LOL...Suhaani and Shekhar do have a history so you are right about that, their story will unfold soon and i hope you like it...Daadi and Mads shall rejoice while visiting Delhi and seeing their beloved couple soon...

@shanakyasharan
Loved your "sadke jawaan"...i am so happy to make you smile and i have always imagined KT/YM as well as ShaNak in my story as the lead so the cuteness most definitely seeps through my characterization...Their sharaarat is the best! Keep smiling...will continue soon!

@
dishbhan
Patience is the key my dear! Raaz khulay ga soon for Shekhar and Suhaani..wait till Khanak puts on her detective glasses and cap! she'll get Suhaani to reveal all about her past..OOPS! i just gave out a major SPOILER! lol...Shaantanu is a lot of things and yes currently his naughtiness had magnified some folds due to his new status as a "husband"...he shall be back to his gentlemanly avatar soon...he'll always be caring, loving, possessive, sensible...and much more...Jaldi ki kohshish karoogi app ke liye madame! hope you liked it so far! Love you loads for commenting and making my day through your comments!

@ The_May_Rose
Awww so sweeet! Thank you for applauding! i hope you are liking the story so far!

@Yasharanrocks
"Kill Me" LOL...Need Shasha a.k.a Manani to do that as that was her signature in RBO..LOL...I will try and improve my style of romantic writing, I felt this one fell short...LOL...Thanks for reading and keeping up! Love you for that!

@
sshriyaa84
Hey Dear, it's Imane...My name is Imane...i think you got me confused with someone but that is so not a problem! LOL...it happens...Thank you for liking my work so far...i will try my best to keep you entertained,

@
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Awww! That is so sweet! YOU ARE MY FIRST SILENT FOLLOWER who has commented for the first time! I love you so much for doing that...My ShaNak do come across as cute to several readers and i am glad that they are being conveyed like that as my characterization is meant to do exactly that...Not a problem if you can't give a long comment as i am happy with the fact that you have commented for the first time! Truly appreciate you time and effort in doing so...will try and update soon! Thank You!

@IF_rida
Hey Ya! I have always looked forward to your comments and they always make me smile! I am super glad that their innocence and love is intact in my writing because that's how this lead is suppose to be and the story requires that as they are young and now newly married so it is really good to see that all emotions are getting through to my readers and nothing is remained hanging incomplete. Thank you so much for your feedback, i hope i continue to maintain your expectations through my writing style! THANKS a bunch sweetheart.

Thanks to EVERYONE who pressed the LIKE button as well! I really appreciate your time and effort in giving me feedback...this story is nothing without your support so THANK YOU so very much for all that you give to it and me. I do plan on getting this story squared away soon with maybe 6-8ish parts more at most...don't want to stretch it super long...Adi will make a comeback...things will get sorted...Khandelwal shall see their successful youngest son achieve his goals and dreams...Khanak will be the back bone through all of it with Shaantanu. Ideas and suggestions are always welcome.
Love you loads and loads more!

-Imane 😊
Edited by imane568 - 14 years ago

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