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destinylove

@destinylove

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Posted: 14 years ago

#31

WOW rooj loved khanak-shaans relationship ( wich is realy peculiar)

and The end is like an art film( i mean viewers /readers kept guesing)too good yaar..

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Daebak

@Daebak

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Posted: 14 years ago

#32

Nice one...

I hope you work on that Epilogue !!

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sweetsute

@sweetsute

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Posted: 14 years ago

#33

great job rooji............. u know wat dere is a element of reality in ur narration-just suberb, dis is wat happens to half of d teenagers, i have seen wid my own eyes, not to me , but my friends

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deepali

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Posted: 14 years ago

#34

Awesome update rooj...🤗 all 2 part was rocked and brilliant👍🏼 I wish you write a concluding part too. but overall its superb👏

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smitha

@SPN_JD_Addicted

Sparkler

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Posted: 14 years ago

#35

Oops sorry I am late sweetheart,but what a conclusion!!!Loved it to bits and more.And the dialogues are just so beautiful!Are you sure you don't want to continue?!Awesome hon!

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May

@The_May_Rose

Stunner

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Posted: 14 years ago

#36

Nice update Rooj, I liked the bitter-sweet aspect of this lovestory....Not like the show, but a very good read and once again very well written👏.....

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Shamima

@-shamima-

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Posted: 14 years ago

#37

I really loved how you wrote it all like the whole attention to detail and the story has got a really nice concept where it shows a young womens emotions and how she facedthe problem but also a shade of a troubled girls life who had insecurities but also her way of dealing with the situation was to keep herself hidden and immersed in work and ge depressed because of the bottled up emotions and by looking at the situation that occurred in the past between shaanak shows how misunderstandings can break the strongest of strongest friendship and awe loved how they bumped into each othe after 5 years but shaan apparently kept tabs on her so the bumping into each other was more sure to happen anyways great OS and I would love to read en epilogue to see what happens next 😊

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rafia rashid

@rafia 24

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Posted: 14 years ago

#38

wow rooj yaar another amazing ff. really feel like some screenplay is being read out i guess thats contributed to the real life element of the ff. loved the fact theres soooo much detail really helps to connect with the characters esp khanak and visualise the whole thing. Loved how accomplished khanak is- you go girl lol. but the 2nd part was on a whole another level i dont even know where to begin the whole suraj affair- hate the way he treated her afterwards- jerk

and the way she came to feel for shaan it felt so natural, u here all the time someone falling for the friend especially one they see all the time no matter how much you try to resist it there must be something extra/attraction towards that person for you to spend that much time with them.

yaar shaan is such a burthal- i was cursing at him when he didnt support khanak, forget supporting khanak even just awknowledging what she must be feeling with her mum just having a mild stroke (BURTHAL).

the restaurant scene was spot on loved khanaks reaction- very real

But im glad she had it out with pooja- with that she released a lot of surpressed emotions and its allowed her to be able to talk to shaan and he truly seems ashamed of how he behaved and looks like he ants to make ammends for that. and i love the way you ended it on a note of hope.

sooo looking forward to the concluding part and hope to see shanak work through it all and then have some shanak romance thrown in somewhere

👏👏⭐️⭐️👏👏

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Urooj

@rooj-i

Sparkler

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Posted: 14 years ago

#39

Originally posted by: cadbery
love ur style of writting......but I thought i was reading the last part, but no, I have to wait for the nxt part now, I hate waiting...:(
pls make the nxt part as long as the last one or more..😊

Thanks hun...Im not sure if im a big fan of my writing😆 im a harsh critique to myself. lol

it was suppose to be last but the way i ended i figured people will ask for more so ill be writing the epilogue at least😆

ill try to make the next part longer but can't promise...

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Urooj

@rooj-i

Sparkler

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Posted: 14 years ago

#40

Originally posted by: sshriyaa84
WOW rooj loved khanak-shaans relationship ( wich is realy peculiar)

and The end is like an art film( i mean viewers /readers kept guesing)too good yaar..

Awww thnx Shriya...well it is mainly Khanak's POV...and its based on friendship than a relationship so maybe in the epilogue we will get something good...

awww thanks hun...my idea was to keep it like an art film type to keep the readers guessing...so yea

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