New ASYA story: The Eyewitness, Chapter 11, pg 71, 19/01/2016

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ChocoBerry

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Posted: 9 years ago

#51

Originally posted by: ZoyaAsadKhan
awesome :) please update soon :)

Thanks dear. Will do 😊

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ChocoBerry

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Posted: 9 years ago

#52

Originally posted by: aseelashah
Choco darling its an amazing story
You are right this story is a thriller one

Pls update soon

Thanks for pm

Hey Asela, glad you enjoyed it. Will do 😃

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ChocoBerry

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Posted: 9 years ago

#53

Originally posted by: sweet_tehs
Hey Choco
Wonderful story n concept...
All thrill n suspense...
Thanks for sharing it here..
N don't be nervous it has come out very well..

Too much suspense..high profile murder...
Even some one leaking her security too...

Zoya already married n divorced...
Good warna AAK ka Kya hota?😉

But WHERE IS AAK?

Continue super soon...

Hey Tehs, glad you like it. Yes am very nervous but with the support of all you lovely people, I think I will sail through 😃

Humara AAK coming in the next update 😉. Yes AAK ka kya hota 😉😆. But problem already solved naa 😛

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ChocoBerry

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Posted: 9 years ago

#54

Originally posted by: Chahanya
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Thanks, will look forward to your feedback n comments 😳

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ChocoBerry

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Posted: 9 years ago

#55

Originally posted by: AkaiBara

okay saans lo phir araam se updates dena 😆

yeah i'll surely enjoy 😃

🤗

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sweet_tehs

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Posted: 9 years ago

#56

Originally posted by: ChocoBerry

Hey Tehs, glad you like it. Yes am very nervous but with the support of all you lovely people, I think I will sail through 😃

Humara AAK coming in the next update 😉. Yes AAK ka kya hota 😉😆. But problem already solved naa 😛

Yeah problem to solved...

But wo jab tak dashing entry nahi marega tab tak thrill double thrill kaise hogi

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ASYAaishu

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Posted: 9 years ago

#57

i like the plot..

really different for those of others..

plz cont soon..

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Sathya

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Posted: 9 years ago

#58

wow what a mind blowing first chapter 1 😎

it was really amazing concept 👏

our musibat magnet is an eyewitness here 😆

but where is Mr.Khan 😳

waiting for next one

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jas91

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Posted: 9 years ago

#59

hugs Choco

OMG this time it is killer concept😲⭐️

1st part was mind blowing👏

It was so gripping & tightly scripted👏...Credit 2 u & d original writer as now u both share this piece of art😊

so Zoe is d eyewitness who's being hidden but culprits get wind of it & attempt 2 kill her but thank god she survived credit 2 d secret chest I must say I loved d scene how she discovered d chest & d toys & locket she found there😛

I have a doubt can it b possible that they r her own things? as u mentioned Zoe is orphan & her parents died when she was young quite possible how delicately u described d locket & how she discovered d place it felt like she had been there many times in her childhood😛 Khair its my imagination so avoid that😆

so yeah she got saved due 2 d hiding place & now is alone at a big house wid 3 dead bodies

🤢 A very frightening situation 😵

It seems like a really interesting & exciting story 2 read & I m looking forward 2 it😊

& yeah most imp. waiting 4 Asad's entry😆 what he'll b playin a secret cop/agent type?

Choco can I rqst u something😳 if possible do add pictures of places & dresses they wear cuz that makes it interesting 4 d readers like jaise bachpan main we used 2 like reading books wid pictures instead of plane books. Not that its less interesting now but its just gives wings 2 our imaginations waise koi logic nahi hai baat main bas smajh lo meri naadaan si rqst hai😳😆😆