AZMA FF-Ishq da Ruthba Chap 9New note pg76 - Page 24

Originally posted by: milinda.shreyz

Did I write Rafiq azad mirza !! itz an error then !
Rafiq is Amad's 1st name. Rafiq amaad mirza
and the chieftain is Raheem Azad Mirza !

Originally posted by: PurpleCrayon

I'm here!

While you described at the desolate fort, i could totally imagine the scenery. No shor except for the birds chirping and insects buzzing. Once she entered the secluded garden though, it felt like a hushed silence descended and it was world unto it's own.


haha, ur lines reminded me of a piece I wrote long back during my Honours days, about the Pre-Raphaelite poets( and painters), their experiments of fusing poetry into paintings and vice-versa.An enchanted garden used to be their favorite theme.

The aura you created carried on to the description of the Neela Kachnaar. The inner garden seemed like a place one could get totally lost, especially Mahira, who has found all the herbs she could possible imagine. I could see a smile on her face as she explored and I wasn't surprised that was startled when Azaad spoke.
yes, it was like a paradise to her. she is her father's daughter, a total geek !

Side note: 1)Him being a poet and penning those line makes me want to give a hug. Poor baby!😆
give him hugs and kisses liberally baisa, he is all yours 😉

2) There is more to the little girl? I thought she'd be one of his adviser's children.
lolz, it will be revealed later whose assumption is correct 😆

I was really looking forward to reading Azaad and Mahiras first meeting and boy did you deliver! I had this goofy grin while Mahira dhulofied the mighty chieftain of the Mirza clan. Waise Rafiq Azaad Mirza has such a nice ring to it. Are you making him a vamwolf? or a vamp or a werewolf? You know which one i'd like the most😳😛

not really a total werewolf but yah a man with mystical powers which is a boon and a curse at the same time.

Looking forward to the next one baisa! Keep 'em coming!😃
u r to receive the nxt chappie soon !

Originally posted by: PurpleCrayon

Oh crap. sorry! My mistake. Raheem Azaad Mirza still has a nice ring to it😆

Originally posted by: -enchanted-

I really like the way you describe the scenary, its very vivid and the reader can visualize the whole setting. I always appreciate this in a writer. IMO this is one of those traits which set a good writer apart from others and make the story credible and real, esp when setting/backdrop are from another era. So very good job on that front. And what do I say about the first disaster cum encounter of Azad Mahira. ..You have proved today that Mahira is indeed a Gul Khan heroine. From Geet to IPK a Gul Khan heroine should totally blast the hero in the first encounter, only to realize later that she is subordinate to him. And you have upheld the grand Gul Khan tradition😆. But Mahira went two steps ahead...Uncouth,narrow minded, brute,dimwit... Mahira has been gracious indeed with the praises. Poor Azad! He has earned the free pass from my side to throw attitude and be unreasonable for next few updates thanks to Mahiras uncalled for outburst.

Originally posted by: milinda.shreyz

yay!!
Enchanted Mam commented at last !
haha ideal gul heroine indeed ! but u know, this happens in real life also.In my college days, I once screamed at a total wrong guy for at least 10 mins only to realise later the culprit was someone else,and he had no inkling of what I was accusing him with ! what an embarrassment ! I offered a cadbury fruit and nut as a sorry note and we soon became close buddies 😆

Originally posted by: -enchanted-

That's sweet. I am glad your encounter ended on a positive note and you ended up making a friend... Cadbury comes in very handy in such scenarios.
I am really eager to see how you would sketch Azad and what would be his reaction wrt Mahiras little speech.

Originally posted by: beekay1

Waiting for the continuation, Shreya.

Originally posted by: milinda.shreyz

Mahira toh chun chun ke gaali di ... I am sure banda fell instantly in love with the feisty woman to has the spirit to hurl all those outrageous gaalis to him 😆...issiliye toh ankh phad phad ke dekh rahe the without saying a word and listened the entire tirade with spectacular patience 😆