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Posted: 10 years ago
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Brilliant!!! Absolutely fabulous, this is a fantastic chapter writing, narrative and plotting wise. 👏
I am not a tea drinker, lekin after reading that sequence I wanted to taste that cuppa tea. Lucky Ayan!!

This chapter, the current, the present and Ayan of course. His family, I am glad as of now, he has one that is close knit and caring. Really enjoyed reading how this was portrayed, with Nikhat and him having the teasing sibling banter, and Shireen enjoying every bit of it fondly. Nikhat pregnant with her situation contrasting with Zoe's pregnancy. How much a loving family can make a difference. So well done.

I like how the whole ACP situation is dealt with, not only Ayan is a gutsy good samaritan, but also a good detective. So after Zoe is safe in the hospital and he knows ACP Khan is not going to let him off easily, he digs up the story behind the whole Ahsaan/ACP Khan thing. I like how he follows up, and rationalizes and reasons with the stunning fact of 2 identical people who are not twins, 70's ki bollywood wali movies ko bhi list main check maar diya. 😆

This is crux of the story is right here, or so I think, the dilemma, are there two separate men, is it the same guy, how, when, where, why...all the questions are spinning away. Seems like the story is doing what it intended to 😉, I cannot wait to find out.

Little details how it was handled, Ayan subtly mentioning that Zoe is pregnant, ACP's momentary flashback to her stomach, very intimate, he noticed but did not realize, this realization came from Ayan. I bet Ayan was looking for his reactions too,

So the file says the man is exactly the same except for that birthmark. Ayan is going to keep this case, he knows, he cannot let this one go.

Really liked how ACP Khan handed out night shifts to Ayan. How Sinha whistles and tries to annoy Ayan, these little details, they make this update so readable.

Thoroughly enjoyed it!!

Off to the next chapter comments 😳
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: MayurChan

Heyy Noe... 😊
Thanx for the P.M...😛
Well so Dilshaad & Rashid are Zoya's parents here with a new surname...it is surely a new and a interesting look at the change relationship between the characters... 😆
You know in the morning only i was reading HEARTBEAT WARFARE...and i have observed and loved this fact about your writing skills and potrayal of characters it is that you are very real , i mean to say you always write from the ground level that we can visualize these things in a nearby neighbourhood...like in this update also...the little convo between Zarina & Dilshaad about Tennant being a married man...it is actually a normal thing...and i love these little things about your stories...
Zoya i guess has turned into your favourite MUSE for all you want to explore her everytime you write about her..and clearly we can see a Different Zoya here in this update...and wonder how she become the Real ZOYA...which was their in the first chapt...
I guess till we are in the flashback we will not see Asad..in them and i guess the man who Zoya saw was Ahsan...and would he be the expectant Tennat for Dilshaad's vacant room upstairs...
Fabulous update...
Continue soon..



Chapter 2

Hi there! Interesting to see same characters in new avatar, nahi? I am experimenting a lot here, though it may not seem so. 😳

I like to keep things as realistic as possible. I have habit of visualizing scenes happening before my eyes as I write, so things have to be somewhat realistic...unless it is Harry Potter...ha ha...It makes me happy that how much that aspect of Heartbeat Warfare was appreciated. Plus, regular folks around us, they have stories, if only someone listened. As a movies says, there is a love story in every ordinary jodi 😉 Glad that you are liking the story. Keep letting your views known.

Now, coming to Zoya being my muse - that is new, I must admit, because I am an Asad person through and through.

When I started writing, Asad and Zoya's love, the unit Asad-Zoya was my muse, and as I continued, somewhere it became just Asad without me even realizing, just the way I didn't realize how easily I get him. Asad is my favorite character and I love to write him - Asad-Ayaan scene in next part - pure delight - love to write his non-dialogue filled scenes - as many readers here know. Zoya is someone whom I find hard to understand. I write her character but it never comes close to Asad. I would even say in my stories she pales a lot compared to Asad. But, in a way that provides opportunity. To do justice to Zoya's character, I have started doing subtle alterations in her character still trying to keep her original character the same but giving her depth at the same time. If you know something very well you can't experiment much as in Asad, but when you are unsure about something, then you may try different things to get it right - like Zoya's character, so last two stories, I have concentrated on working Zoya's character. Asad to dil se likha jaata hain and my first and foremost favorite character to write.😳

Thank you very much for reading and commenting. And, your prediction is right. 😃
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: Amin21

Amazing update yaar👏

Beautifully written⭐️
the concept looks awesome.
And the characters definitely rocks
so👍🏼 for this wonderful ff
and are we going to get regularly update or what?😊
Waiting to read more n more...
update ASAP


Chapter 2

Thank you. I am glad that the concept and characters are well-accepted.

Updates will be regular but interval will be longer.
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: gowtu

I agree with u dis is a mystery.. And u cnt reveal much...
So here dillu is zoya's mother not asad's hmmm

Want to know how zoya become zoya ;-)
And I m sure that guy is asad.. R m I say zoya's ahsaan...

Amzng updt.. Loved it...
And plz be little regular here...

Continue soon...


Chapter 2

Thank you.

So, if the guy is Asad and Zoya's Ahsaan at the same time? Hmm...

Updates will be regular but interval will be longer.
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: -.-Mariam-.-

Superbly Amazing update..Loved it very much..

You write Zoya & Her Family's Introduction very well..
I think that Guy was Asad or may be Zoya's Ahsaan..
Love the way you write stories..
Continue soon..Thnx for PM..


Chapter 2

Glad that you liked introduction of Zoya and her family.

Thank you for liking for stories. Hope to keep all of you interested. 😊
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: FaultInMyStars

I agree about the show-version of Zoya and the Zoya of your stories. I like your one better.

About the update...I am still in the dark. Can't wait for further updates! :)


Chapter 2

Thank you.

Well... the sun has set to darkness to hogi hi 😛
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: ChocoBerry

Noe, another brilliant story shaping up here. Am in love with your writing style and live this story too.

Seems like this stranger that zoya encountered will be her husband later someone who will look like inspector Khan.

Waiting to read more 😊


Oh! Thanks for the pm n please keep sending them 😳


Chapter 2

Thank you very much. 😳

Yes, that guy is to be Dilshaad's new tenant and later Zoya's husband.
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: anopama

Yay an update

So zoya is a 22 yr old college goer
Abt to graduate
Daughter of rashid and dilshad
So the man on the streets
Is it zoya mysterious hubby ashan
So guess tht will be the way they meet and so forth
Oh so u r keeping a mystery
We have to unfold
Ok so we will unfold togehter
Wonder is ashan and Asad is related though
Continue soon


Chapter 2

Yes, it is a mystery that you all have to unfold or at least read 😉

Thanks for reading and commenting.
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Posted: 10 years ago

Originally posted by: kajenilious

hey sory fr late cmnt was busy wit xams
cmng to chapter...lvd d bnd btw dilu nd zoe...nd asya cnvo was cuteee evn it s nt so lng bt frm tat smal cnvo found tat asad is nt so talkng persn..nd zoe tho zoya h hai :)so asad is gng to inquire abt d rum fr rent rite... asya in nearby homes tat wil b intrstng...cntnue soon


Chapter 2

Yes, the stranger needs a place to stay and Dilshad needs a tenant. Maa-Bete ka milan 😛

Well, that guy can be Ahsaan, right? And, not Asad?
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Originally posted by: treasure11

Since this is mysterious it gets even more exiting 😛😳

And again Asad is not related to Dilshad 😲
After first Chapter I had guessed Zoya was not like she is ...
And Can I guess the man whom Zoya was observing is Asad 🤔😆


Chapter 2

Yes, second story where Asad is not related to Dilshaad 😭 I need to think story ideas where these two are mom and son.

The man that Zoya observed - Why he has to be Ahsaan, naa? Zoya is married to him.

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