SS: The Nawab of Bhopal. Part 11 preview, pg 43!!! - Page 13

awesome update

Great writing! Love the gifs too! I'm looking forward to the next part!

Finally!!! I waited so long for this! No! Don't tell me ur losing interest! But for sure ur def not losing readership. Trust me, aside from the silent readers, everyone else has been constantly appreciating and loving ur work, including myself! Urs is one of the best SS on the forum! Ur writing style has a way of making the reader picturize the scene ur describing and makes me wish that something like this was done on the actual show! With that said, as an honest reader (this is constructive criticism only!) when I read this part, I also felt it was a little rushed. The first conversation was perfect! Them fighting, Aahil wanting to know the truth, Sanam regretting the fact that she hurt him, and how he almost confesses!!! The little details, ur dialogues and how u keep them in character helps so much in visualizing the scene! But from Anwar n on to the last bit was a little rushed. I just want to be honest n plz dont take it the wrong way! I personally love real feedback as oppose to just praise but that may not be the case with everyone so apologies ahead of time. I don't want to make u feel bad! Sorry if u do feel hurt! I loved the first 4 parts but felt the intensity and angst level was slightly lower here. But still it was awesome and that says something! When we write, I feel we can also tell when something is rushed or too detailed. I know when I write n I reread it, sometimes I don't feel satisfied. But during others, I enjoy reading what I finished writing. But as a fellow writer, I totally get u! There are times when I also lose interest n feel that there r not enough readers or comments so why bother continuing. But thats not the case here! I absolutely love ur work! I hope you do continue and I am looking forward to the next part! The only reason I complain about intensity, angst and passion is because thats the usp of SaHil ;) ! Its what makes them heat up the screen and makes us love them so much! But plz do continue if u can! I would love the read what happens next! Looking fwd to more work by u!! :) :)

Did Badi Ammi tell Aahil about Tanveer? Not sure. But at least Aahil knows why he married her now. So that is one plus. One MU resolved!

Originally posted by: Raingoddess

Finally!!! I waited so long for this! No! Don't tell me ur losing interest! But for sure ur def not losing readership. Trust me, aside from the silent readers, everyone else has been constantly appreciating and loving ur work, including myself! Urs is one of the best SS on the forum! Ur writing style has a way of making the reader picturize the scene ur describing and makes me wish that something like this was done on the actual show! With that said, as an honest reader (this is constructive criticism only!) when I read this part, I also felt it was a little rushed. The first conversation was perfect! Them fighting, Aahil wanting to know the truth, Sanam regretting the fact that she hurt him, and how he almost confesses!!! The little details, ur dialogues and how u keep them in character helps so much in visualizing the scene! But from Anwar n on to the last bit was a little rushed. I just want to be honest n plz dont take it the wrong way! I personally love real feedback as oppose to just praise but that may not be the case with everyone so apologies ahead of time. I don't want to make u feel bad! Sorry if u do feel hurt! I loved the first 4 parts but felt the intensity and angst level was slightly lower here. But still it was awesome and that says something! When we write, I feel we can also tell when something is rushed or too detailed. I know when I write n I reread it, sometimes I don't feel satisfied. But during others, I enjoy reading what I finished writing. But as a fellow writer, I totally get u! There are times when I also lose interest n feel that there r not enough readers or comments so why bother continuing. But thats not the case here! I absolutely love ur work! I hope you do continue and I am looking forward to the next part! The only reason I complain about intensity, angst and passion is because thats the usp of SaHil ;) ! Its what makes them heat up the screen and makes us love them so much! But plz do continue if u can! I would love the read what happens next! Looking fwd to more work by u!! :) :)

I like criticism too. You have been an enthusiastic reader and I can't thank you enough. I agree that the last part was rushed. I am revisiting both Anwar and Badi Ammi events in the next part also. So, hopefully that problem will be solved.

Originally posted by: MrDarcyfan

Did Badi Ammi tell Aahil about Tanveer? Not sure. But at least Aahil knows why he married her now. So that is one plus. One MU resolved!

No, Badi Ammi didn't tell him all the truth.

OH

Oh poor ahil

Please continue I look forward to seeing what happens

Hmm surprised badi ammi didn't tell ahil the truth
Then again not that surprised
She's always chosen her kids over herself

Thanks for update
Love the pics you include

Sweet story, looking forward to next part..