ASYA OS: That First Glance

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Abi

@-ABI-

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#11

1st thanQ for accepting my add request&for PM

about this OS
Its amazing.
LVED IT

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Miss-Appy

@Miss-Appy

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#12

OMG !! I'm so in awe !! I'm intrance !! I have no words to describe the beauty of what u wrote !! Hats off to u dear !! 👏

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Prashni Singh

@-SilverSparkle-

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#13

""Asad go to your class!" Miss Ahmed shouted behind him, her voice echoing into the empty corridors. He turned around and smirked at her. She hit her forehead. "Come inside and sit idly. Don't you dare disturb anyone!" She warned him. He nodded his head like an obedient child walking inside with a pout. A victorious pout."

""Are you related to her? Ms Ahmed you naughty naughty woman" Asad smirked. She hit his hand."

"I think you need to teach me how to understand your silence"

Could this guy have gotten an more endearing?...His interactions with Ms.Ahmed and Zoya were simply charming. ☺️

I was sighing along with a silly smile on my face the entire read.

"Romeo and Juliet died because of some stupid difference their families couldn't get over. And I am dying because my love thinks that we belong in different worlds so she cannot accept me as her friend"

Outstanding dialogue! ⭐️ ⭐️ ⭐️

"Asad looked at Zoya, "When will you understand what Shakespeare and Miss Ahmed has been trying to teach us, LOVE DEFIES EVERYTHING! You know it yet don't understand it. I am not going to spend the rest of my college days sulking, you know why?" She stared at him with wide eyes. "Because I love you and I'm announcing it to every group of friends that are standing here. That we CAN be together!" Asad cupped her face, "Please now don't tell me you don't love me because I know you do" Zoya gulped.

"How do you know?" Zoya whispered with a lone tear escaping her eyes. Asad brushed it off.

"Because your every glance says something to me Zoya..." Asad smacked his lips against hers taking everyone witnessing by surprise. Zoya's eyes widened as she felt her senses go wild with his taste. Her breathing shortened as she unwillingly returned the same passion in the kiss as him. He pulled back and stared at her. "Have you understood Zoya?" Zoya shook her head in a no, her cheeks turning into a deep shade of red. Najma and Asad's friends blinked at them both, the gaping girls almost fainted seeing the kiss. He scooped her into his arms and sat on the bike, Zoya's arms wrapped around his neck.

"I'm going to ride us into the sunset... because Romeo and Juliet forgot one thing."

"What?" Zoya asked meekly.

"To live happily ever after...""

Simply enthralling and every bit beautiful. ❤️

Your notes amuse[or lectures as you generally state] me, because you are truly talented, and you write AsYa amazingly. You should certainly do these OS's more often, they are entertaining reads.

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Miss-Appy

@Miss-Appy

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#14

Could it be possible for u to continue this ?

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Nim

@Rarepearl

Inactive

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#15

Hey Sunshine,

This was so Beautiful. Really, what has happened o you? How can you doubt such a beautiful piece? I have Faria t thank for it though, otherwise you are so bad, keep hiding all this from me.

I loved the simple story that revolved around Zoe's first glance at Asad. I really loved asad in this. He was a sweetheart. I loved & respected him all the more when he understood her unsaid fears & stood for her & showed all the bullies what their end would be if they messed up with her.

One part I laughed at was when Robin said he wasn't following this example set by Asad. Seriously..😆

Zoe was as always so innocent but shy too. I felt bad for her as she had bear all sorts of teasing just because she wasn't a spoilt rich brat just like he rest of buggers. Asad did really have a charm that made her open up with him. Aww she is so innocent to think that she wasn't what Asad required as a partner.

Asad always takes my breath away. I loved how he whispered her real name during the last scene of the play. His way of explaining her that they could be together was really nice & his way of expressing it was the Best.

It was a lovely OS. I am still unable to fathom why you didn't like it. Anyways it wasn't for you to like, it was for the readers, who I'm sure going to love it.

Love lots..

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aYASHIKA

@aYASHIKA

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#16

Fabulous os dear...
Amazing. .
Beautiflly wriiten..
Loved it sooo much...
Mindblwowing os...
I really enjoyed reading it...
U r fabulous writer dude..
Plzz do write more for us...
Awesome

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anopama

@anopama

Rocker

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#17

Wow

That was absolutely beautiful

I always love asad in this genre

And zoya all innocent and shy

He falls an he fell hard for the timid girl

Love it

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Alone111

@Alone111

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#18

I dnt hv any words to explain how much I loved it

U seriously killed it yaar...
Superb...

Asad was sch a sweet hear nd zoya was chhhooo cute
Amzng onr