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Mishti

@MayurnASYA

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#91

amazing...👏 loved it

happy halloween

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Lakshmi

@Chipmunks.

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Posted: 12 years ago

#92

I had a vague idea he was getting back at her. Now halloween wouldnt be just for scary stories.
Happy Halloween :)

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Monica

@mochhug

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Posted: 12 years ago

#93

Aah kya baat hai! i'll be back 😎

Okay. I was hoping he would scare her. Or that he would at least spoil any other plan Zoya had to scare him.

But I never thought he'd do that!?!?! That was ingenious!!!! Aww Zoya's reaction was justified. He may have tried to scare her back, but hers was not on purpose hahaha. And certainly not with blood. But still. I love the parallel of them both admitting how much seeing the other scared them half to death.

And OMG the way he put her on the desk and whispered in the her ear "Horrible scare dena isse kehte hain, Ms. Farooqui" I was DYING! I literally turned into a pile of goo 🤪☺️

And the kisss I was hoping this would happen. I must say this. You are the QUEEN on this forum of the "pyaar ka ehsaans" type writing 😃😳 Seriously. Too good. And I love love love love love how you show us what the are each feeling, without too much inner monologue, but more with their actions. It's really a treat to read.

Sooo... now an FF maybe? 😃

🤣

Edited by mochhug - 12 years ago

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Linsie

@Linsie

Trailblazer

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Posted: 12 years ago

#94

beautiful story..

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Natasha

@--Natasha--

Voyager

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Posted: 12 years ago

#95

Wow! Tat was just so amazinggg 👏 👏
im glad tat asad scared her coz tat is wat I had expected...both were so cute!

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Srija C. Burman

@Madame_Noddy

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#96

I read both the parts of this TS just now and it BRRIILLLIAANNT!!!

Woman, to put it simply, you are AMAAZZIINNGGG!!!

This was awesome, I especially loved the parts where,

1. Asad blurted out that he got a horrible scare on seeing Zoya like that.

2. Zoya knowing the real reason why Asad was getting late, when no one else understood that.

3.Zoya's reaction on seeing Asad in a pool of "blood" or should I say... ketchup!!

4. Asad's impulsive reaction... and then the kiss!!!

Flippin' awesome!!!

Lovveeeddd it!!!

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Homeslice

@Homeslice

Inactive

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#97

Green ji,

Thanks for a fabulous update :)

Please, could write a FF on Asad, Zoya married life including the whole family? Starting from the Nikaah, all the lovey-dovey moments and their family (Dilshad, etc) Nomkids int his one please. I want to see how you depict them!

Pleasee

Nisha

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jasminerose

@jasminerose

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Posted: 12 years ago

#98

I knew it u ll give an interesting turn to this one. So Asad took the revenge in this way, so unlike him still so like him.( Horrible scare isse kehte hain Miss Farooqui)

Nice update.

Edited by jasminerose - 12 years ago

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goingreen

@goingreen

Dazzler

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#99

Originally posted by: -HoneyBunch-
Ahaan! Asad Ahmed Khan gets back at Zoya!! I like it!
When he called Zoya, I did think he plans to get back😉😆
Horrible scare isse kehte hai Miss Farooqui😆
and ya Halloween now is not always for horror stories😳

Happy Halloween !! 😈

Hahaha damn, I was trying to make it as subtle as possible, but I suppose it was obvious that Asad would do sthg to get back at her :p Really glad you liked it! (:

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goingreen

@goingreen

Dazzler

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Posted: 12 years ago

#100

Originally posted by: mysticlover
Now that was a nice payback n a very good gift in return!! :)
It was obvious Asad was playing with her but I loved how you turned the situation to make them confess... that was the cherry on top... :)

Confession toh obviously banta hai boss, my stories always end that way hahaha. Glad you liked it!! (: