Hello shello people some of you may know that I always dedicate a thread once in every two-three months for all the amazing writers in the forum but this time my mood has been seriously spoiled after reading three crappy eroticas back to back. eroticas that completely grossed me out. I dont wanna pick up fights so I am not going to reveal which were those stories I am talking about. Apart from those three there are also many writers who have the potential to write a cold shower worthy erotica but need to put up a little more effort. and i have to admit, there are some exceptionally darn good writers (again not gonna take names) they are just brilliant
Hence I as a reader will point out a few things that a writer should keep in mind while writing a mature story. Now before everyone starts throwing jootas or chappals at me let me clarify I am not demeaning anyone and I am definitely not trying to show off, I myself am not an exceptional writer there are far better people hence these guidelines are from me but as a READER and not as a WRITER! I request only people who can take up criticisms to scroll down. I believe it should be in a writers DNA to take up both likes and dislikes, flowers and tomatoes, kisses and stones! A writer should not sulk about criticisms, he/she should hold his head high and read the comments with a smile - That is according to me the first step to being a WRITER in true sense. (although I have to be honest its easier said than done)
So here goes -
Number one - A s**tty Zoya and desperate Asad is a huge turn off. Make them s**tty and desperate and Im well on my way to hit the back button. You can try to make Zoya a little naughty by making her seductive but innocently seductive. Dont make it too obvious. Give her a little subtle moves like accidently slipping off the saree pallu or brushing past Asad, against his hard chest or back trying to feel him up a bit. Remember everything should be as innocent as possible (ofcourse exceptions can be taken in stories where Zoya is bold and experienced but if u are following the QH track or the QH wali Zoya then keep these things in mind)
You can show desperation in Asad in a way that he pulls Zoya flush against him and moves his hip, grinds into her, rubbing his erection on her thus subtly letting her know how desperately he wants her. Or maybe you can put in dialogues like I want you Zoya blah, blah u get the gist. A desperate Asad who practically forces himself on her makes him a rapist not a lover.
Number two and very important - If you are trying to show Zoya as a virgin then please its a request dont use words like blood and all. Its gross man, who talks about blood and stuff in this way?🤢 Everyone has studied biology here everyone knows a woman bleeds when its her first time just dont put in the story. If you really wanna tell your readers she was a virgin then you can use phrases like - He thrust himself deeper into her, breaking her barrier. Zoya felt a sharp sting and screamed both in pain and pleasure. Asad stilled for a moment to let her body adjust him. As soon as pain gave way to pleasure she bucked her hips asking him to move.
See, this way the readers will know it was their first time and they wont be grossed at reading words like blood.
Number three - Sex should be mutual. Please dont make one of them forcing the other into this act either by force or by emotional blackmail. That shows desperation. Of course if they are role-playing then it doesnt imply on this situation. Role-playing totally changes everything.
Number four - do not make either one of them too pliant and submissive. Being innocent is a different thing while being submissive is different. Again an exception is when you are writing something very BDSM (bondage dominance sadism masochism) then submission becomes the crux part of the whole theory.
Number five - DIRTY TALK Im all for dirty talk just it shouldnt be too dirty. It actually kinda increases the passion and acts as a good foreplay. Just dont overdo it, make it simple yet sexy so how about innocently sexy? 😆
Thats all I can remember at the moment but I may add things up whenever I come across them! I hope it helps although I am expecting zero likes and comments and hundreds of reports! People who cant take up some constructive criticism can feel free to ignore it or hit the report button and if its against the IF rules then the mods can feel free to close the topic!
I repeat I am not trying to be offensive here but if anyone felt so then I am really sorry!
Cheers and peace!
Love,
Sadie! 😊
PS - NO FIGHTS AND NO BASHING OF THE POST OR ME!
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