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Posted: 12 years ago

I am glad that you all liked the previous part even though zoya was not in it I mean it was a risk because this is an asya fanfic. But I also had to show asad and zoya's struggle too so I had to do. Also again the next part doesn't have any asya scene. But there is big good news for all qubool hai fans in it well its more like a blessing in disguise.. So I think that makes up for the whole absence of romanticism. Enjoy reading it and thanks for all the comments and likes. You people inspire me to write something for you that you all can enjoy. and all those who commented on it I have replied to you in the post above. Since I have a restriction on the no. of my post I can't reply much individually so I figured to use one post for all.



"AYAAN!!!!"

Both the brothers at the door looked at mamu jaan who was fuming with anger. Razia was scared that her husband might lose his hold on his temper.

Mamu: ayaan aaj tumne haad kar di. Aaj tumhari wajah se humhare khandan ki itni beizzati hui aur tum jaa kar iss insaan ke gale lag rahe ho.

Ayaan: ye insaan mere bade bhai hai.

Mamu: ayaan!

Mamu turned to face Rashid who was visibly distraught.

Mamu: humne kaha tha tumse Rashid ki iss pe thoda kabu rakho. Isski harkato pe nazar rakho par tum ye chota sa kaam nahi kar sakhe. Aaj humhe sar jukha kar us haseena bi ki batein sunni padi. Isse badi sharm ki baat humhare liye kya ho sakti hai?

Asad: agar aisi hi baat hai to unse rishta kyun banaya? Aaisi aurat ke ghar aap nikhat ko dena chahte the?

Mamu turned around to glare at asad.

Mamu: ye humhare ghar ka mamla hai. Hum nahi chahte ki koi bhi bahar ka aadmi iss mein apni rai de.

That stung asad.

Asad: nikhat meri bhi behen hai.

Mamu: aur issilye aaj use ye din dekhna pad raha hai. Issilye hum nahi chahte the ki tumhara ya tumhari ammi ka manhus saya bhi humhare khandan par pade.

Asad: bas! Ek aur lavz meri ammi ke bare mein aur shayad mein apke bade hone ka lihaz bhul jaunga.

Mamu: aur umed bhi kya kiyi ja sakti hai tumse.

Ayaan: mamu bas kijiye. Aap mere bhai jaan se aise baat nahi kar sakte.

Mamu: tum to chup raho ayaan. Aaj tumhari wajah se humhe isse baat karni pad rahi nahi to hum isski shakal tak na dekhe. Na tum isse milte ya tohfe isse lete aur na haseena bi ko isske hone ki bhanak padti.

"bas karo ye sab" said rashid's ammi as she came from behind. Every pair of eyes turned to look at her.

Rashid's ammi: yahan nikhat ki khushiya daaw par lagi hai aur aap sab ek dosre ki galtiya nikaal ne par tule hai. Kya nikhat ki kisi ko parvah hi nahi hai.

But asad was not listening to this. Any other time he would have retaliated to that mamu with sharp words but right now His eyes were fixed on the man behind mamu who was unfortunately his father. He had not said a word. Asad hadn't expected him to say anything from his experience but everytime the pain felt fresh from rejection. He saw rashid's helpless face and asad felt ashamed to have been his son. Even standing there where his eyes could see that face was making him angry. He turned around and walked away.

Ayaan ran behind asad to stop him.

Mamu decided that he would go and talk to haseena bi. He rashind and razia left to talk to haseena once more and make her understand the situation.

Asad had reached the gate when he stopped to ayaan's frantic shouts to him. He turned to face ayaan.

Ayaan; bhai meri baat to suniye.

Asad: ayaan mein iss waqt yahan se jana chahta hoon,

Ayaan tried to stop him but then decided against it. He just grabbed his brother's arm and dragged him towards the back yard. Asad did not understand why ayaan was pulling him there. He tried to stop ayaan but ayaan wouldn't listen. Atlast ayaan came to a halt in front of a window.

Asad looked at his brother and then followed his gaze towards the window. The sight he saw atlast pushed the tears he was holding back fall out. His sister was holding nuzat and crying her heart out. Her body was shaking from her sobs.

As nikhat was crying she looked towards the window and saw ayaan and then to her shich asad. Both her brother's were looking at her with tears in their eyes. when she saw asad she did not know what took over her but she got up and ran out of the room. She had this horrible feeling that if she did not reach asad in time he would too walk away from her. She ran out in to the garden and saw asad stand there infront of her. He was there standing there for her. She let go of everything that was holding her back and ran into her brother's arms crying. She broke down letting asad support all her weight. Nuzat and humeira came out and walked to nikhat but ayaan signalled them not to disturb her.

Nikhat after long sobs atlast managed a shaky "bhai jaan"

Asad stroked her head letting his tears fall in to her hair.

Zoya was tossing in her bed. She was feeling sleepy because of the medicines but the pain in her swollen cheek was making her wwant to scream. The doctor had said that the pain would increase with the swelling but this was even more painful then expected. She had wanted to take the pain killers but her phupi had not let her as she had taken one in the morning itself. Her head had also started hurting. She had wanted to go in search of her father as soon as possible but today the pain was not even allowing her to think of anything else but her swollen cheek. She didn't know why the pain was suddenly so excrutiating though. She covered her mouth to stifle a scream as a shock of pain shot through her face. She was felling very uneasy.

Asad was sitting on the bench in the garden holding nikhat in his arms. Her sobs had subsided a great deal. Ayaan had balled his fist. Humeira looked at ayaan and put her hand on his. Nuzat was sitting on the handle of the bench rubbing nikhat's shoulder.

Nikhat: bhai jaan. Ab kya hoga?

Asad: nikhat meri taraf dekho.

Nikhat lifted her head from his shoulder to see his face. The tears on his face had dried leaving a trail.

Asad: nikhat kya tum abhi bhi chahti ho ki ye nikah ho?

Nikhat nodded her head in a yes.

Asad: tumhe lagta hai ki imraan tumhe khush rakh payega? Kya tum use abhi bhi pasand karti ho?

Nikhat: ha bhai jaan. Par unhe lagta hai ki maine unhe dhoka diya. Unse jhoot bola. Mein aisa kabhi nahi karna chahti thi. Bhai jaan mujhe to apki behen hone mein garv hai.

Asad gave her a sad smile.

Asad: toh phir thik hai. Apne bhai par bharosa rakho. Mein tumhe tumhari haq ki khushiya zaroor dilaunga aur tumhari shaadi Imran se hi hogi. Yeh mera wada hai tumse.

Nikhat smiled full of joy. She had no doubt that her brother will fulfil his promise. She just knew that he would give her her happiness.

Asad: mujh par bharosa hai?

Nikhat just nodded.

Asad haad just walked inside haseena's house as the door was open. He could hear her voice. And then he stopped. He heard ayaan's mau's voice. He was at the door. He would have turned away had haseena not seen him. So he stopped at the door contemplating what to do next when he heard mamu say to Rashid "bolo. Bataoh inhe?"

Asad looked at his father's back. He heard him say, "humhara talaq ho gaya tha aur'aur satra sal pehle hi maine dilshad aur us..uske bachon se rishta tod diya tha."

Asad couldn't believe that this man had sliced his heart 2nd time in a matter of hours. He did not notice the hesitation in rashid's voice and even if he did he did not care. A lone tear slipped from his eyes onto the door mat he was standing on.

Haseena had not expected such luck. She knew now that anytime now Rashid would decklare that he did not have a relation with asad ahmed khan anymore and she could hardly bring up his and ayaan's relation again. she did not want to give in yet. She wanted to somehow put this people more down. All of them and till now she had not got an upper hand on asad ahmed khan yet who was another rich man. Rich enough to be looted for his sister or to be correct step sister's sake. And then lady luck smiled at her when she saw asad ahmed khan standing there at the door behind Rashid. She had to control her smile. And even luckier for her was his timing. She saw the tear roll down his cheek as Rashid declared him and his mother to be nothing more then strangers. She quickly snatched at the chance.

Haseena: acha. Agar jo aap keh rahe hai Rashid miyan agar vo sach hai toh phir yeh bataiye ki is waqt asad ahmed khan mere darwaze par kya kar raha hai?

All turned around and were shocked and mamu was visibly angry. Asad was angry too but he was angry hurt. He came forward ignoring his father and his family and replied to haseena's question.

Asad: mein yahan apni behen ke liye aya hoon.

Haseena smirked.

Haseena: wah Rashid miyan! Wah! Data deni chahiye aapko. Aap kehte hai ki inse aapka koi lena sena nahi aur yeh kehte hai ki yeh aapke bte hai.

Asad: aap ne shayad thik se suna nahi. Maine kaha ki mein yahan apni behen ki khatir aya hoon. Janab Rashid se mera koi lena dena nahi hai.

Rashid looked at asad hurt but asad didn't care.

Haseena: zara samjhane ki taqlif karenge?

Asad: inse(waving at rashid) bad kismati se humhara rishta tha par vo khud vo rishta satra sal pehle tod aaye the. Lekin inke faisle ki saza mere bhai beheno ko kyun mile? Vo tab bhi mere the aur aaj bhi mere apne hai.

Haseena raised her eyebrow.

Asad: mein sirf yahan apni behen ki khushiya apse mangne aaya hoon. Use imraan miyan pasand hai. Yeh sagai maat todiye. Iske badle aap jo chahiye vo mang lijiye. Agar aap chahe to mein aaj ke baad kabhi bhi nikhat se koi bhi baat nahi karunga.

Haseena smirked inwardly and thought, "ab aaya na unth pahad ke niche." This what she wanted all along. She wanted them to be begging her and never question her any demand. Just obey her commands with their head held down.

Haseena: thik hai. Yeh nikah nahi rukega.

All smiled lightly but then haseena continued.

Haseena: par'.

Everyone froze expecting a big demand.

She looked at Rashid

Haseena: mein chahti hoon ki nikah ki tayari aap sabse badiya kare aur phir se sagai ki tayariyan kare.

Rashid nodded.

Haseena: aur'

Again everyone looked at her but she turned towards asad.

Haseena: meri aap se do sharte hai.

Asad straightened.

Asad: ji kahiye.

Haseena: uss din aap ne jis inspector ki police station mein beizzati kit hi vo mere bhai hai.

Asad clenched his fists.

Haseena: mein chahti hoon ki aap unhse puri izzat ke saath mafi mange. Kya apko yeh qubool hai?

Asad just stared at her. He couldn't believe he had heard her right. she wanted him to apologize to that idiot and that too when he was not at fault. He looked down about to refuse. But then he saw nikhat smile at him and his promise to her. He would swallow his pride and apologise to that stupid inspector if he had to just to see nikhat smile like that.

Asad: mujhe aapki shart qubool hai.

Rashid was torn. But mamu and razia couldn't have cared less. Haseena smiled as now she knew that these people would do anything she asked. But she wanted to test it if both asad and Rashid were comepletely in her control and so she kept her last demand.

Haseena: aur jaisa ki aap dono ne kaha ki aap ka ek dosre se koi rishta nahi hai aur sirf nikhat se rishta hai ttoh phir aap ko yeh sabit karna hoga.

Razia: kaise haseena?

Razia had a very bad feeling about this. Haseena turned to Rashid again.

Haseena: main chahti hoon ki jab tak nikhat ki bidai nahi hoti tab tak asad ahmed khan aur unki ammi dilshad apke saat apke ghar mein rahe.

Haseena smirked as she saw shock cross on every face infront of her.

PS: if anyone has any suggestions or questions regarding any of my post please feel free to leave a comment below. Any question regarding why a certain character acted the way he/she did or anything else will be answered. And if I make a blunder somewhere or contradict my story in any part then please feel free to point it out.😊

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Edited by Ayuzawa - 12 years ago
Ayuzawa thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago

i would gladly but then my asad will not stay at rashid's house na. so i have to keep her alive even in my fiction. i hate her character though. even though i understand it i cannot believe that anyone so evil can be in this world.
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Posted: 12 years ago
well i liked her last demand of keeping both families together until marriage
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: Asyalover

well i liked her last demand of keeping both families together until marriage


thanks. that was exactly my reason to even include her in my imagination in the first place. 😃
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Posted: 12 years ago
OMG!!
This was such a shocking update.
The last sentence of Haseena left me completely surprised.
I can't believe how this woman can be soo shameless.
My heart cried for Asad.He had to bear so much insult from mamu.
I hate Rashid sooo much.He seems tongueless infront of mamu.
I loved Ayaan so much for speaking up for his bhaijaan.
The bitter talks between Asad and Mamu were very nicely written.
I'm glad that dadi stopped the two at the right time.
The garden scene of Nikhat and Asad was mindlblowing.The whole conversation was so emotional.Asad promised Nikhta to give her back her share of happiness that lied with Armaan.This is what we call brother's love for his sister.
I love Asad soo much.
Zoya is in pain.I feel so bad fr the poor girl.
I hope when Asad may return he may find Zoya in such a state and we may get some good ASYA moments.

The whole part was written beautifully Siddhi.
I loved every single word of this part.
I'm so sorry for being unable to comment on the previous part.
I was a bit busy yesterday updating my ff and sending pms and all.
Kindly update the next part soon.
Take care!

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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: crazy4KASH_AR

OMG!!
This was such a shocking update.
The last sentence of Haseena left me completely surprised.
I can't believe how this woman can be soo shameless.
My heart cried for Asad.He had to bear so much insult from mamu.
I hate Rashid sooo much.He seems tongueless infront of mamu.
I loved Ayaan so much for speaking up for his bhaijaan.
The bitter talks between Asad and Mamu were very nicely written.
I'm glad that dadi stopped the two at the right time.
The garden scene of Nikhat and Asad was mindlblowing.The whole conversation was so emotional.Asad promised Nikhta to give her back her share of happiness that lied with Armaan.This is what we call brother's love for his sister.
I love Asad soo much.
Zoya is in pain.I feel so bad fr the poor girl.
I hope when Asad may return he may find Zoya in such a state and we may get some good ASYA moments.

The whole part was written beautifully Siddhi.
I loved every single word of this part.
I'm so sorry for being unable to comment on the previous part.
I was a bit busy yesterday updating my ff and sending pms and all.
Kindly update the next part soon.
Take care!


thank you so much. i love reading your comments asma as i mentioned earlier because they motivate me quite a lot. especially how you write about every scene in the story. it shows me where i have done good and where i could have been better.
its totally fine though about you not being able to comment on the previous part. i know how hectic it gets with updating and responding. trust me.
i will try to update soon.😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
This part deserves a long reply
Lol, I LOVED the sibling relation, I feel bad for Asad he can't even talk properly to his siblings even if they'r half related to him, he loves them so much
I feel like punching Mamujaan in his face. He annoys me a lot
Haseena bi...what was the point of sending a proposal for Nikhat it she were to break it...
Nikhat...poor girl she doesn't deserve this she was getting a chance to be happy
Ayaan had his brothers back the whole time
Rashid... Why you no step up?
I love how you make the story goahead with the same pace as the show, to be honest, at this moment I love your story much better than the QH track going on. Even though this part didn't have AsYa together, it deserves a hats off
The part in all was heart touching...Continue soon
<3👏

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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: risingsea101

This part deserves a long reply

Lol, I LOVED the sibling relation, I feel bad for Asad he can't even talk properly to his siblings even if they'r half related to him, he loves them so much
I feel like punching Mamujaan in his face. He annoys me a lot
Haseena bi...what was the point of sending a proposal for Nikhat it she were to break it...
Nikhat...poor girl she doesn't deserve this she was getting a chance to be happy
Ayaan had his brothers back the whole time
Rashid... Why you no step up?
I love how you make the story goahead with the same pace as the show, to be honest, at this moment I love your story much better than the QH track going on. Even though this part didn't have AsYa together, it deserves a hats off
The part in all was heart touching...Continue soon
<3👏


thank you so much. thats like the best compliment ever.😳 though i am personally liking the way the show is going now more than my imagination one.
as for haseena bi's intention she is only creating drama. she humiliated nikhat in front of many people so that the news goes far and wide. that way nikhat won't get anymore good proposals and she can demand whatever she wants from her parents to go ahead with the wedding. she is very selfish and cruel. i hate her the most in the serial so atleast here i have tried to make her a bit more humane. i mean her last condition is a boon for asad and his siblings. but i don't believe that such a person as haseena can be real. she is too greedy.
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Posted: 12 years ago
Omg loved the part
asad and his family have to live them...and zoya will also go
that will be fun
but hope that asad will be fine
and continue soo.
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Posted: 12 years ago
Loveddd it Siddhi ! Before Dilshad and Asad move into Rashid's house, just make Haseena die in some accident so that they'd nevaaar have to do this :P

Besides, I'm really missing Zoya now. Usko beech mein daalo yaar!

Rest everything else was good. Nothing over the top :)

And yeah. Go to your first page, click on the edit option which would be there in your first ever post to the thread. There would be a bar for you to edit your title of the post as well (That is only if you edit the first post). Make the required changes and post the links to all the parts on the first page of your FF using the same EDIT option :)

I hope this helps :)

Love

Rachyy

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