Threeshot : A Matter Of Life And Death Part 3 Page 10/3 May - Page 3

wow interesting story

awesome one babu...

Thanks for writing something new dis much quickly. New concept quite interesting . Abhay's curiosity landed him in love😉 poor piya due to situations commited suicide . Abhay is selflessly taking piya's punishment .hope der painfull times end soon .

Interesting! This reminds me so much of my last supernatural os, except Ofcourse with Indian gods .

So I assume it was 'love at first sight ' for Abhay , but our Pia is a tough one here 😆 Though did Pia commit suicide because of her husbands death ? Because I am assuming she is a strong character here .

Err ' Atmahatya' is suicide right ? Sorry my Hindi kind of sucks a little :P and Yama is like Hades ? And is Chitragupt like Thanatos from my story ? And Abhay is like an angel of death ? I am so sorry my Hindu religion stuff isn't too clear ;(

And oh yeah , I am back for like a day 😆

An unusual concept Shreya and very well written 👍🏼 Abhay loved Pia enough to take on her punishment and I wonder how things will turn out for him. Since he cannot become a ghost he is going straight to hell and I am presuming Pia will be reborn and in her next birth Abhiya might unite. Waiting to read the next part!

Originally posted by: --geny--

Res
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This one is really different from all.
Beautiful .It must be really difficult to come up with this extraordinary OS.
Yamadut Abhay..his checking watch thing,
Asuras-Yamadut fight ,Chitragupta.I have read some of stories but not like this...I mean kinda dark love story from this world!
This one is really amazing and epic one, going dark.I'm just loving it.Abhay is really madly fall in love with Pia..their all conversations were direct to point.esp.where he says not platonic feelings but romantic.Abhay is taking all risks,pain for Pia.At last Chitragupt was confirming from Abhay how much important Pia is.Want Pia too fall for him..
That was really DARK-
"She will not be harmed. Not even a thousandth fraction of what pain awaits you"

Can't wait to read next part.Update soon.

Some of really nice lines:

In the end, when Lata's soul
passed to him, her tears had almost
made him delay in delivering the soul
to Yama.
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"How have you
been?"
She shrugged. "Good enough. What
about you? What do you do?"
I'm the messenger of death.
-------
Not true. He'd kept up with her,
checking up on her everyday, using his
powers to create a portal that showed
him what she was up to. He'd checked
her name in Chitragupt's list - she was
high on the "good karma" aspect, would
die peacefully in her sleep at 73.

Bravo!!!
---
Haha
She stared at him, her gaze penetrating.
"You don't have to reply to me. I'll be
like your family. Like a sister."
He almost choked, but kept his
composure. "But -"
---
Ohh!
He kept writing back, hoping
selfishly...but things did not change.
--
"Yes, I know your feelings are
platonic," he said, with a touch of
brusqueness. "Mine, however, are not."
--
That was heart wrenching!

He regretted it when he saw her two
years later.
Or rather, her soul.
---
Oh my god..poor Abhay!

"Piyashree will pay, too." Yama looked
marginally more cheerful. "Now, don't
look like that, boy. She will not be
harmed. Not even a thousandth fraction
of what pain awaits you, should you
choose to take this path. But she must
pay - I confess, it is a vindictive
pleasure. She has hurt you, this
woman...it is only justice. But she will
not be harmed. I give you my word."

Abhay felt a searing pain rip through
him as he fell.
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Wondering for their next meet..

Lol it's not difficult coming up with the idea, it's translating it into words that's difficult :P I am not much of a believer in all of this so I had to take the help of other sources to confirm things about all of it.

I'm glad you liked it :)

Originally posted by: barki

Awesome story. Very different concept. Excited to read how will Abhiya unite. As Abhay is a yamdoot and going to take Piya ke hisse ki punishment. Piya did not love him also.

haha..let's see :)

Originally posted by: SANJANA9167

Shreyaaa
By any chance was yamraj chand!!!????

I didn't have his face in mind when I wrote Yama, but yeah, sure, why not 😆

Originally posted by: .Rhythm.

That's a brilliant concept Shreya di! I loved it.

So Abhay's gonna take Piya's punishment. Piya is also going to be punished but the yama kept saying that she won't be hurt. I wonder what punishment is it going to be and how would that unite Abhay and Piya.

Plz continue. Excited to read the next part.

- Manisha

Hi Manisha, glad you liked it. Let's see if it would unite them :)