Aninversary poem- do u remeber?

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Posted: 11 years ago
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its for my cute sisters and frnds ayushi, aliza, ruba, sona, shilesh
pls cment
do u remeber?

YOU REMEMBER THE DAY WHEN FIRST TIME I SAW U?
IT WAS RAIN EVERYWHERE I THINK
YOU WAS DANCING IN RAIN LIKE A KID.
U WAS HAPPY LIKE A KID FOUND HIS SPECIAL CHOCOLATE
U WAS IN JEANS AND T-SHIRT, VERY SIMPLE BUT BEAUTIFUL
LOOKING TOWARD U, I DNT KNOW HOW I SAID
"BEAUTIFUL"
THEN U TURN UR FACE TOWARD ME
MAY BE HEARD BUT I SAID
U LOOKED TOWARD ME AND THEN ALL AROUND OF YOUR
BUT U FAILED
U FAILED TO SEE A DARK FIGURE STANDING BEHIND U IN DARKNESS
IN DARKNES, FROM WHERE IT BELONGES.
THEN UR EXPRESSION CHANGED INTO FEAR AND U RUN FROM THEIR
I TRIED TO STOP U BUT I DID NOT
I LET U GO BECUSE I KNOW U BELONGES TO LIGHT AND M FROM DARKNESS
I LET U GO AND U WAS FIRST ONE WHOME I LET GO
DID U REMEMBER?
NO, U DID NOT BECUSE U WAS NOT AWARE ABOUT ME ON THAT TIME
AND IT WAS NOT UR FAULT
BECUSE I DID NOT BELONG FROM UR WORLD.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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o my o my i cant believe u explain the pain of abhay so deeply... poem perfectly depict abhay's longing for pia, his pain of not accepting pia's love, pain of living liff eternally in darkness without his love pia... it seems as if abhay himself narrating these lines from his dead heart...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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That was so sweet one...😉
I loved the phrase "did u remember " ..,. That's quite attractive 😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Bhai aapne toh pia and abhay ki first meet mein drastic changes hi kr diye , it was not a rainfall , instead it was a snowfall 😆 .

Jokes apart either way rainfall or snowfall doesnt matter , u wrote it down sweetly bhai , abhay's pain , his inner emotions , abhay's dark persona , and his helplessness . but i found it too short u should edit it sometime later bhai , after ur exams maybe 😉

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Posted: 11 years ago
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very nice i love abhay because of his pain and expressions
you wrote all in your poems
thanks
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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thanu ruba thanks a lot.
Edited by visu12 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: trishnawaliya

o my o my i cant believe u explain the pain of abhay so deeply... poem perfectly depict abhay's longing for pia, his pain of not accepting pia's love, pain of living liff eternally in darkness without his love pia... it seems as if abhay himself narrating these lines from his dead heart...

thanks dear. Thanks for cmnt. Yupy abhay's stay away method yaad aa jate hain
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: ---Lizo---

That was so sweet one...😉

I loved the phrase "did u remember " ..,. That's quite attractive😳

thanku aliza. Mere ko bhi title jahi thik laga so.

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