well...please first give me some times to compose my words.cause i am still in trance...cause from the begining to end i read it without taking a breath!!!...
before want to start i just want to say that you have the rare gifts of words di. how i don't know may be it is god gifted. we all can feel emotions but putting those emotions into right words is not everyone's cup of tea. you always do it with perfection. not ashamed to tell that this thing i try to inheriate from you always. but i can never be eable to reach the standard.(ha ha i'm a crap writer though😆)
ok now come to the update. in a single update you showed a full circle of love.each and every consequence a lover feel. pain,agony,longing,hesitation and last but not the least pure love... which we always find in abhiya. true love.in a very unique,deep and most beautiful way.
the first part,the emotions,the pain,the agony,both abhiya felt made me just dumb. generally every emotional update made me cry. but it just made me numb. i couldn't even let out the tears. from the time pia entered in his room,quotes from the poems, this was truly a briliant scene that i can imagine that happening in front of my eyes.and then abhiya confrontation,abhay's words to pia, painfull desperate,heart melting. he longed for pia with all his existence but he can't accept her.on the other hand pia's undying faith for abhay,her desperate will that still hopes for his love...all were just outstanding.what a beautiful yet tragic love story. two peoples can die for each other,wanted to do anything that could make other happy even if it affecting their ownself.but still they can't be together.cause they were forbidden,by their instinct,by nature.
now the 2nd part,confession.my most fav part of this update. probably one of the most beautiful abhaiya confession i read. the words were garnished perfectly. spacially,abhay's words.like he poured out his everything in front of her. how much depth his feeling had. how much uneable he was to stay away from her. i just loved those words when abhay said "then i take you!i give you the authority to invade my territory!yes my heart!..." wow!!! what a beautifully and perfectly build sentence.(**sigh** if we could get such dialouges in serial rather than all time i love you record 😕). the sentences and words just took my breath away...you rocks in this part di..🥳
the last and the third part was so beautiful.love their walk together and the beautiful moment they spend together. ha ha i am happy that you gave abhay to wear a brown coat rather than his eternally branded black jacket...🤣..loved when he pull her closer,when he healed her wound, lift her in his hand and their talk,just a moment of bliss and the snow and rain added the cherry on the cake.😳
thats all i can say about this master piece.😊...and thx for the pm.😃.and don't forget to pm me about your next story pls..😳
with lots of loves---- ria 🤗
Edited by ifians - 12 years ago
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