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premap

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Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#31

Gosh ! You have got a real gem of a story ! It pours real 'cold water ' on all Yash's plans, knowing Aarti's illness! You have built up the story to a point of 'increased temperature ' before we landed on 'ice cold water' ! Enjoyed reading and hoping for the next update. Thanks

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B-onesie

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Sparkler

Posted: 8 years ago

#32

Congrats Nix Stix👏

Thank you for being one of the very few that is so loyal to this forum.

And thank you so much for sharing your amazing talent. I'll say again, a talent that should be explored beyond this forum.

This promises to be another heart wrenching one. Will reserve to comment for the moment.

Love you muchly🤗

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Shashi1984

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Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#33

Hey Nikki! First of all, Congratulations for completing five years and that too successful five years.👍🏼.

Glad to see a new SS from you. After long time I checked forum. The first chapter is awesome. There are many shades of emotions in this chapter. First of all, Yash is behaving like an arrogant businessman who can go to any level for what he want. But there is some past of him maybe responsible for the way he is behaving. Who is the girl whom he promised to be not involved with anyone and where is she now. I know it will get clear as the story progresses, but curious to know.

Now Aarti, she is the type of girl any father would proud of. She loves her father. Loved the characters of Satyendra and Kailash. Not yet say about Aman as Yash had not given him any chance to speak.

Yash asked Aarti to sleep with him to have money to save her father. It's very shocking to hear Yash made that demand, but maybe he had reasons to behave like that. And it's very shocking to know that Aarti suffering from cancer.

Waiting for Yash's reaction...

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sass8

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Rocker

Posted: 8 years ago

#34

👏Five years , a milestone indeed , congrats on the anniversary, times flies . 🥳🥳

Here is another winner in the making.

With Bargain or trading come consequences and boy did Yash got a doozy...His action led him to a path he could not have anticipated or forseen.

What a dilemma, for all the characters, the proud father who has to put aside his principles for his daughter, the sick daughter who lost a little innocence with Yash demands, Aaman the friend who will definetely not approved Yash behaior and of course Yash the hero, not so hero after all since he acted under false pretense. The scene is set and lets see what's next .

Its interesting cause I feel like Yash is so misguided here, which does not excuse his blackmail but I felt pity more than anger at the attemps to sleep with Aarti in his house. It was of two mind, lust and disgust (becausee deep down he knew he was wrong).

It is so heartwarming to see the relationship between Aarti and her father. He adores her and she's his most treasure possession. He also has a healthy look at life, knowing what is important. And because of that he may be able to see beyond the facade of Yash despicable actions.

This is about Yash, through and through and how he'll grow from this experience ...or not. In any case next chapter asap 😉

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Mbakwe

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Beginner

Posted: 8 years ago

#35

This is awesome. You do have a way with words. Congratulations on your fifth year on this forum. Tnx for keeping it active.

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Tessaloni

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Sparkler

Posted: 8 years ago

#36

Celebrating five years of whining 🤪 but also five years of amazing talent 👏, five years of warmth , five years of love ❤️, and an eternity of friendship!

Blessed to have met an alien like you! 🤗

CONGRATULATIONS!

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bongalisoo

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Explorer

Posted: 8 years ago

#37

Congrats on ur 5th year

Wow what an explosive start

Wonder whats Yash past and back story that made him into the man he is today

Aarti has cancer ,I thought Mr Dubey was sick not Aarti

Can't wait for more update soon

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lovely_nikki

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Inactive

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Posted: 8 years ago

#38

Originally posted by: SoniyaLovesGc
Awesome start Di...love it...and in first meeting itself Yash is crazy behind Aarti. When he told Aarti what he want she get angry like any other girl should done but in the end yash get shock of his life that Aarti suffering from cancer..feel so bad for her, poor girl..waiting for Yash reaction.
Lol my slow mind finally got what is cancer actually😆
Continue soon😊

Thanks so much Soni 🤗

Yes Yash is attracted to her and didn't hesitate to tell her exactly what was on his mind. And Aarti is not some damsel in distress, she gave him the reply that he so deserved, that one slap 👏

I don't know when I'll post the next chapter as right now I have to post the next chapter of my another story 😳

And thanks Soni for the wishes 🤗

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lovely_nikki

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Inactive

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Posted: 8 years ago

#39

Originally posted by: Divya333
Congrats for completing five years.
Nice update... Loved Arti's family how they valued their principles over money...this Yash is shocking...have to see how his feelings change after learning about Arti's health issue...waiting for next update

Thanks so much Divya 🤗

Yes Aarti's family is poor but they still value their principles and won't compromise with them.

Yash is many a times a shocking character in my stories 😆. If you continue reading my stories you'll get used to it 😆

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lovely_nikki

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Inactive

+ 4

Posted: 8 years ago

#40

Originally posted by: Themmy
The tittle reminds me of shah Rukh khan's movie baazigar(gambler)
The first chapter was awesome now, I really want to know why aarti's father needs a job badly or will aarti survive?
will yash feelings from obsession change to love? Or will he stll want to have her at any cost
update soon
happy 5 years anniversary ❤️

Thanks so much for the wishes Themmy 🤗 ❤️

Baazigar, huh? Gladly this Yash is nothing like the character of SRK 😆. I mean Yash won't kill Aarti for some sort of vengeance from her father

Aarti's father needed the job as he needed the money. Same reason why Aarti went to Yash for a job.

The rest of your questions will be answered as the story progresses 😳