The Mumbai Aftermath -An Aarya FF (Completd pg 22)

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tleshni

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Posted: 12 years ago

#31

Originally posted by: mostar
please continue soon

yes shall post update soon 😛

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caller123

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Posted: 12 years ago

#32

Brilliant piece of work..👏Very interesting. Do please continue soon.

Waiting eagerly to read the next update.😳

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Shashi1984

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Posted: 12 years ago

#33

Hey! It's fabulous. Continue soon, don't keep waiting...

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Chitra_11

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Posted: 12 years ago

#34

Tleshni - what I liked about ur OS is one...she reacted to Yash's comment after taking shit from him on number of occassion...which was necessary for you to point out...which u did it beautifully...for the flavour of 'Arti's' goodness will be lost as we seen in original...but showing that there is a limit...is what we have been craving for and you have done just that...love to see/read this side...👏
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Another thing which I liked is about the decision of showing her anger/indifference to Yash and not family...again very important...her character of goodness is kept intact...loved as you kept that in mind...👏

The most important of all is not to share the good news to Yash simply because...the moment was a 'Sin' for him and she wished not to share as she looked at it differently and again not even to the family...waiting for the right time to unfold...loved this part...without damaging the character but allowing the situation to be reacted differently...is what we wanted ...if happened..and am eagerly waiting for your update.

Pm...after u update dear...thanks😊😊

Edited by chitsri65 - 12 years ago