Samarpan (An FF) Part 11 (Thread 1/Page 139) - Page 93

Originally posted by: jasraj123

awesome update
love the way yash felt connected to writer through journal
omggg whattt arpita pregnant😕
and she tricked yash😡😡😡
now I am just complete shut what to say


waiting for next update

Jasraj...thank you.

I hope to write the net one soon...

well ******

ohhh yash get married ...arghh arprita whats her plan ??

what is all this arpita all about...she pregnant with someone else and now cheerfuly wishing yash..Sick...

Indu!

Indu - my apologies. Some stories need leisure to be read. And leisure has been missing from my life for the last couple of weeks. I still have to read from part 7 i think - soon, soon (telling myself more than you i think 😊).

Indu! 🤗 I've been away for most of the weekend. Read Part 8 and saw you added Part 9 so I decided to respond to them together. You've added some really great emotionally challenging background for Yash. My comments were made as I was reading and I left them as is (I must caution you, it's a long running ramble, lol).

When Yash asks, "Do people eat alone in your house?" and asks Aarti to share lunch with him, I can't help smiling and I thought to myself, Oh, what just happened here? Talk about seizing the moment, Yash! I like it!

"Please ma'am. I promise I'll behave. I just don't want to eat alone. Not today…on my birthday." That melted whatever reservation Aarti had.

"OK. I'll sit for awhile. Please have a seat. Err….Happy Birthday, Sir!!"

"Yash!"

"Excuse me?"

"Yash Scindia….that's my name."

And here it begins! I could be way off on this, but I sense there's a combination of reasons Yash is drawn to Aarti here -- physical, emotional, and recall. Add those things to the fact that he seems to be in an emotionally unstable place and sparks are flying everywhere for him. Would it be wrong of me to assume that the moment she hears his name there's some recognition for her as well?

On the continuing of his backstory with Tanya. Poor guy. It's hard to face the reality of someone's duplicity, someone you set your heart on. He asks an interesting question about his difference in being able to read "that girl" [Aarti] as opposed to being unable to read Tanya. I think it speaks to how transparent and guileless Aarti is as a person, something he'll probably come to love about her most when they finally get to know each other down the road.

I love how Aman seems to be the hopeless romantic while Yash is slightly jaded by the whole love business after Tanya. Within the paragraphs after Aman leaves, I see reasons for Yash to become even more jaded after finding out about Deepa's ambition. His luck with women, even though he was much more guarded on this second round, is taking a beating. 😔

Coming to Dadima, her bluntness is so endearing; she gets straight to the point. 😆 I understand why she wants this for Yash, though I sense it's more for herself -- contentment knowing that he's settled down. Why do I have a feeling this isn't going to turn out the way Dadima expects and that Yash's jadedness with increase? I really like the karela connect you made between your Yash and PV's Yash.

Now Yash's meeting with Arpita. I almost did a double-take because she's quite toned down since we last met her, though I suspect that may be deceptive.

Arpita got up and smiled invitingly at Yash, who was already finding the entire set-up very awkward. He looked at Arpita, searching for the connect Aman was so sure about but felt nothing. Arpita showed him the house and in the end took him to a small library cum study. . . .

Yash nodded and looked around as Arpita went out. His roaming eyes fell on a maroon-colored journal kept on the center table. He picked it up and turned to the first page in a bid to flick through it. As he read the first lines, a jolt of strange yet familiar realization passed through him. He read…and he read again . . . .

Ah, Aarti arrives without either of them knowing it! So this is how Yash got access to Aarti's journal that Arpita held hostage and never returned. Once again, Yash and Aarti meet without sharing the same space. Despite Arpita's physical presence and wonderful facade, she cannot eclipse two souls that are simpatico. Yash's emotional connection with Aarti surges to the surface without needing physical proximity.

Indu, you have such a graceful way of ensuring continuity in your story. 👏 Now to Part 9.

Yash spun around to find Arpita standing near the door. A half smile played on her lips, but her eyes were sharp as she observed the changed demeanor in the man who was so obviously going through the motions of a cursory visit just moments ago. Now he looked involved…and interested.

"Is this yours?"

"Hmm!! Yeah…It's no big deal actually…just stuff I scribble when the mood gets me. You didn't answer me? Did you like what you saw?"

Yash looked at her speculatively. Was that query about the journal or did she hint at something else? He couldn't make out. So he played safe.

"You write well. I have never met a writer before. However, whatever I read fleetingly here, this is brilliant work. I am impressed."

"Thanks! You can take it."

"What? Are you sure? You will give away something like this just like that!!" Yash was stunned.

On the first bold, Arpita, seriously? You scribble when the mood gets you? 🤣 Sorry, she made me laugh out loud. On the second bold, that was the most important clue that she isn't the author of the journal. I don't think any writers or artists worth their salt give away their journals. They keep it until they die and others access it posthumously, or they shred it, or they burn it. But give it away? Even to someone they love? Doubtful. I know she'll waylay him, but he's very perceptive here and I like that.

Yash spent half the night going through the writings, sometimes reading a piece twice, even thrice, and each time finding something new. He marveled at the depth in Arpita's words. For some reason he was finding it difficult to associate the expressions with her. It was as if the amiable, very social, perky girl he met earlier in the evening and the girl who wrote these masterpieces were two different persons. He brushed off the thought as soon as it occurred, "Gosh Yash, everyone is not a Tanya or a Deepa."

Oh, how I wish he would listen to his instincts. He's on the right track. However, he's trying to give Arpita the benefit of the doubt, which I believe is just as instinctive for him as his questioning. He is fighting againt being cynical when his cyncism is spot-on. Still, this is part of the journey for him, his journey towards finding Aarti. Mistakes need to be made and detours need to be traveled so that he can find his way to her.

Yash sensed edginess at the other end followed by a pregnant pause before he heard a soft voice wish him haltingly, "Go..od morn..ing, Sir!" He immediately caught on the nervous tone and went about assuring her, when suddenly he felt she wanted to say something. After that what happened was something he could never explain, even though he replayed that conversation many a times in his head later. There was something in the tone of the girl's voice that had prompted him to go out of his way to guide her. He felt this strange sense of responsibility toward her. What was odd was that he had been able to listen to her silent responses. After the conversation ended, he looked out of the window. His first thought was, "How is it that each visit of Hoshangabad had memories of his helping hapless girls?" After awhile he had taken out the journal and continued his reading from the previous night. For some reason, he felt closer to the person who wrote the journal now.

This interweaving of situations is fantastic: his possession of the journal coinciding with his phone conversation with Aarti about the job. Great continuity! It's so interesting how he and Aarti keep "meeting" and don't realize they're meeting each other repeatedly. They believe they're running into different people who affect them not realizing it's really just one person they keep meeting. Ironically, the only solid thing they have at this point -- their emotional connect -- is such an abstract, inexplicable entity. ❤️ Fascinating!

I love his relationship with Dadima, especially her sharpness in tone and mind. She's a firecracker. 😆 Commenting on Arpita's parents instead of talking about Arpita's impression on him is his clue and Dadima picks up on that immediately, but then confuses his admiration for the writing with admiration for Arpita. I can't blame her for drawing that conclusion. There is no tangible or sound evidence for the way he feels; he doesn't even know why he responds so differently to the writing from the way he responds to Arpita. It's such an interesting yet organic line that is being marked. He is yet to realize that there's a reason why he's drawn to the journal's depth while being fundamentally disengaged with the assumed author of the work -- they are two different women. But without that realization, without that knowledge and evidence, he understandably doesn't have a choice but to "fly blind", so to speak, on Dadima's hopes for him

Everything happened very fast after that. The doctors found a couple of blocks in dadima's arteries and advised angioplasty to be done within a month. Dadima insisted the marriage should take place before she went under the knife. And so, Yash and Arpita got married three weeks from the day they met. They met only once before the marriage when the Mehras came to Bhopal for a formal engagement ceremony, which was kept a private affair. When they were left alone for awhile, they strolled out in the lawn. Yash had asked Arpita if she was fine with the marriage. She had nodded smilingly. He had then quipped, "This is all happening so quickly, almost like Ajay and Ashima's marriage, isn't it? I hope I am able to keep you happy as Ajay finally found the way to keep his wife happy." He had looked up to find her staring at him with a blank look, "Who are Ajay and Ashima?" He looked perplexed, "The couple in four of your short stories." It was time for Arpita to look puzzled before she straightened up and passed him a winning smile, "Oh…them!! You took me by surprise there. For a moment I wondered who you were talking about. Err…shall we go inside? I have to give ma her predinner medicine." . . . .

A soon as Yash was sure that everyone was satisfied with the situation, he glanced at his father and nodded once before going up to his room. As he was about to enter, he heard Arpita speaking on phone, "No Rahul…this doesn't change or complicate anything. This only means a delay of few months. After that we carry on as planned…Of course, darling…trust me!" She looked up to see Yash staring at her and said to the person on the other end, "I'll talk to you later. Yash is here."

Arpita got down from the bed and smiled brightly at Yash, "Congratulations, Yash!! It seems you are going to be a father."

Oy, Arpita! She can't tell the truth when it really doesn't matter (journal), so I'm not surprised she can't tell the truth when it does (pregnancy). At this point, Yash's luck with women really is running dry. Poor guy. If he goes full blown cynical about women after this I wouldn't blame him, lol. But, it's no wonder the love he's grown to have for Aarti is so rooted and rich. Other women have put him through hell. So his first wife inadvertently reveals her pregnancy just as she's entering the house. I think any man would flip if they were in Yash's position. But, SP was upset enough for both of them. At least, Yash partially knows what he's dealing with at this point. But where does he go from here?

Fantastic reads on both counts, Indu. One of the things that struck me throughout is your attention to detail to ensure a rather seamless continuity. Really nicely done. I'm very interested to see how Yash navigates this marriage to Arpita, and I'm even more interested to see what brought him to the burger place and face-to-face with Aarti in such a condition. I already have a feeling where it's going, but I'll let you unveil it clearly for us. 😃

Originally posted by: InduG64

Barbie!!...Hi pal! Where art thou?🤗

Hello dear, just came from the land of nowhere.. 😆
Got chance to relax, and had fun for few days..

Sorry, haven't read the 2 updates yet, still catching up.
But will definitely do, when I got more time...

Take Care 😳

Ria..dear sweet Ria...Why do you have to be so apologetic about delays. I am perfectly fine if you stay quiet for a few chapters and then come back to comment.I understand...I really do.

Having said that, what a super feedback to the story. Thank you so much.

I know that parts of the Yash/Aarti pasts disturbed you and the others, especially after the initial chapters of fun and laughter. Hell, writing them disturbed me. There were times I just wanted to rush through and finish the entire troubled pasts in one paragraph and move on to happier times. I had to forcefully rein myself in not to do that. I thought it was important to depict their pasts in little detail so that we understand what affected their thoughts and influenced their opinion about each other when they met. The surrender was never easy. In fact even after 12 years of marriage Aarti suffered the pangs of the past and tried to hide her pain from Yash.