My first OS/SS' I love you Aarti' update page 25

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Posted: 12 years ago
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I am writing an SS for the first time. You can call it a two part OS or a very Short Take from me.

This is related to the post kidnapping track of Ansh. I've not included Ishita and Aakash in this, as they were not required for my storyline. This starts after Dubeys leave for pilgrimage

My OS

Yash was pacing in his room, waiting eagerly for Aartiji to come. Each passing second was like a torture to him.

He recalled the whole incident of Ansh's kidnapping. And everything that happened after that. Dubeyji had admitted that he had planned all this and was behind Ansh's kidnapping. He was ashamed of what he did. After Yash and Aarti forgave him, Dubeyji and Shobha Maa left for pilgrimage. Everthing was fine now.Ansh was finally home. Back to the secure, protective and loving care of his parents, back to his loving sisters.

Though she was not showing it, but Yash knew that Aarti was completely shattered with the events that took place and with Dubeyji admitting his crime. Yash wanted to just take her in his arms and take away all her pain. He couldn't bear to see his Aartiji suffering like this, but with each passing moment with her kids, she was feeling better. Slowly she had started to smile also. And Yash was happy to see that beautiful smile back on her beautiful face.

Bauji had not yet forgiven Aartiji. Still Bauji allowed Yash and Aarti to come back and live with them. It was the most happiest moment for that little family of six, to be back to their old room. To be with other family members, whom they missed so much in last few weeks.

Though Bauji had mellowed down a little but he was still angry and upset with Aarti for lying to the whole family. Bauji, Pankaj Bhaiya, Vidhi Bhabhi were still not talking with Aarti. They've accepted Yash and the kids but not Aarti. Yash and Aarti were sure that as long as they are together, they will win everyone's heart and will bring back the lost happiness of the family.

The only people who were genuinely happy with their return were Maa, Prateek and Paridhi. They were their usual self with Aarti, with Maa praising her for everthing and Prateek and Paridhi with theri favorite Bhabhi, who had done so much for their happiness.

Everything was going on well, yet Yash was not happy. Something was bothering him. And the reason was, ever since the whole drama was over, and they moved back in, he didn't got a single moment to spend with his Aartiji. He so wanted to be with her. To look at her, to hold her in his arms for as long as possible. And to show, how much he loved his beautiful Aartiji. He wanted to hold Aarti, kiss her passionately, and to make love to her all night long. He was sure that Aarti was feeling the same. Yash could see the same longing in Aarti's eyes. They could read each others eyes so well. It was quite evident to him that even Aarti wanted to be him. But still they both weren't able to be with each other. It was just that the kids wanted to spend as much time with them as possible. Which was natural, after what their small family just went through.

Yash thought that he might get the opportunity at night, when they were finally alone in their room. He just couldn't wait for tonight. As he had to collect a lot of tax's from his beloved wife. The thought of collecting tax's brought a mischievous smile on Yash's face.


Just then he heard the door of their bedroom open and Aartiji walking in. When Aarti saw Yashji was waiting for her, she just froze on her spot when she saw her Yashji was waiting for her and was looking at her with so much love in his eyes. Time stood still for both of them. Even from this distance she was lost in his big brown eyes. Yash and Aarti were both lost in each others eyes. This was the moment that they both were waiting for. Without their knowledge they started walking towards each other. ...

TO BE CONTINUED.

PRECAP -: AARYA'S AAISA WAISA. 😉

PLEASE EVERYONE( whoever reads this) TRY TO GIVE ME THEIR HONEST OPINION. AS THIS IS MY FIRST ATTEMPT TO WRITE SOMETHING ON AARYA'S LOVE STORY. CRITICISM ARE MOST WELCOME, AS IT WILL HELP ME TO MAKE IMPROVEMENTS IN MY WRITING.

IF YOU LIKE IT, HIT THE LIKE BUTTON SO THAT I CAN CONTINUE. AND PM YOU MY NEXT AND LAST PART. AS THIS IS AN TWO PART STORY ONLY.

Part 2 - page 11.

Part 3 - page 25

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shalini28 thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
#2
wow me 1st
loved it so much.
di u r a great writer😳
so yashji wants to collect his taxes😉😆
and u ended at the right moment
waiting for next part😳

Edited by shalini28 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Congrats for new ss nikki👏
Awesome start...⭐️
Lovely update 👏 👏
The way aarya longing each other😳 was beautifully written..👍🏼
One thing wrongly that you ended the update shortly..😆
Precap sound interesting..😉
Continue soon
Eagerly waiting for next part
Edited by Sri_Radha - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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di loved ur writing congo for first attempt 👍🏼
u r a nice writer👏

but i have a complaint-why did u stopped at such a moment😆

can't wait for the next partpls update ASAP😳
Edited by miti16295 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: shalini28

wow me 1st

loved it so much.
di u r a great writer😳
so yashji wants to collect his taxes😉😆
and u ended at the right moment
waiting for next part😳

Shalu please tell me seriously that you liked it or not. As this was my first attempt. I might have made lots of mistakes while writing it.

And yeah Yashji is waiting eagerly to collect his tax's 😉
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: lovely_nikki

Shalu please tell me seriously that you liked it or not. As this was my first attempt. I might have made lots of mistakes while writing it.

And yeah Yashji is waiting eagerly to collect his tax's 😉

di i really liked it pakka😳
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Posted: 12 years ago
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ah nikki.. it was a nice start..
subtle yet you can feel the longing.
waiting for the next part which i feel is going to be hot..
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: miti16295

di loved ur writing congo for first attempt 👍🏼

u r a nice writer👏

but i have a complaint-why did u stopped at such a moment😆

can't wait for the next partpls update ASAP😳

Thank you so much Miti. I am still shaking with the thought, that wether it's good or not. If I get positive response, I'll update it before Monday only. 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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I simply loved it...
A very beautifully written one...simple yet said what we all wanted to hear!

However - you had ended it at the wrong time when I thought something would happen!😆

Please continue ...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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WOW really awesome👍🏼 ..just love it alot❤️

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