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Posted: 15 years ago
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CHAPTER 3

Scene: The salon

It has been two weeks since Pratigya last heard from her friends. Pratigya was really tired and was waiting for the clock to strike 5 o'clock so that she can leave work. She began to pack her bag so that she can leave on time when suddenly Buniya enters the staff room.

Buniya: Pratigya we have one more customer left could you please serve her, all the other staff are tied up.

Pratigya: I have just finished work, I will need to go now, Krishna will be expecting me home soon.

Buniya pleads with Pratigya and finally Pratigya gives in.

Pratigya: Fine, I'll do it as long as I get paid overtime.

Buniya: That's fine, get to work quickly and no slacking!

Scene: Krishnas apartment

Pratigya finishes work and returns home tired. Pratigya takes her key out and slots it into the lock to open the front door. She enters the apartment and see's Krishna sitting on the sofa, Pratigya walks up to Krishna

Pratigya: Hi Krishna, how are you? Sorry I'm late, I had to work overtime and……..

Krishna stands up and slaps Pratigya before she finishes her sentence. Pratigya is shocked.

Krishna: Why didn't you come home early? Did you know how worried I was? Couldn't you ring?

Pratigya is shocked and silent.

Pratigya's phone rings. Pratigya takes her phone out and checks it, it was Kamal but Pratigya cancels the call.

Krishna says 'Why didn't you speak to her?'

Krishna grabs the phone of Pratigya and calls Kamal back and says to Pratigya speak to her properly and he hands the phone back.

(Phone conversation)

Kamal: Hi Pratigya how are you, I finally got through to you, I was wondering if you can come over, everyone is here, It would be nice if you can come over and have a get together.

Pratigya: I'm sorry, I can't come over, (Pratigya pauses and then says) Kamal is it possible if you could stop calling me? If it's important I'll call you. I forgot to tell you I am work at the moment and I can't speak to you. I'm sorry'

Kamal is surprised and confused. After a few moments Kamal says 'ok, I get it take care and Kamal hangs up.

Krishna looks at Pratigya and sits down at the dining table to have dinner, Pratigya joins him a while later.

NEXT DAY

Pratigya is at work, she has been working tirelessly without any break. The door opens and a familiar person appears. It's Chandu…..Kamals flatmate.

Chandu: Hi Pratigya, How are you? Long time no see? What have you been upto?

Pratigya: Hi Chandu, Im fine, I've been busy at work, haven't had a chance to see everyone. So Chandu, now tell me what brings you here?

Chandu: I wanted a trim, short back and sides please.

Pratigya: That's fine, it good that you decided to have a haircut. Your hair is slightly damaged at the tips.

Chandu: I know, I've been meaning to get a haircut for sometime.

Pratigya gives Chandu a haircut and after they sit down and have a cup of coffee, they catch up and Chandu tells her all about the get together and what happened. They both enjoy each others company.

Chandu: Arushi, Kamal and some other friends will be getting together and going to a park tomorrow, there is also a small race track as well and you know whats Kamals like, she would be having a race just to compete with the other lads. They will meet at 2pm. It would be nice if you came along as well.

Pratigya: Sure that's fine, I'll be there.

Chandu: Ok that's it, I should be going now, I have a load of paper work to do for the supermarket.

They both get up from the sofa and Pratigya see's Krishna, who is looking through the window. Krishna waves at them. Pratigya starts to panic.

Chandu asks is that your friend?

Pratigya: He's my boy friend; he's come to pick me up from work.

Chandu: How sweet of him, he looks after you sooo much,

Pratigya gives a half-heartedly smile. Chandu says goodbye and leaves.

Pratigya finishes work and greets Krishna who is waiting outside.

Krishna: Who was that guy?

Pratigya: Oh, he was Chandu, Kamals flatmate, he's a nice person, he just popped in to get a haircut.

Krishna: Oh I didn't know you cut mens hair.

Pratigya: We do, it is a unisex salon, but we hardly get men popping in.

Krishna: That's fine, when we get home, Prat could you cut my hair?

Pratigya is nervous and says Sure, I'll cut your hair.

KRISHNA's APARTMENT

Krishna and Pratigya have their dinner.

Krishna gets ready for the haircut he sits down in front of the mirror, he wrap a towel around himself.

Pratigya picks up the sharp scissors and starts to tremble. Krishna looks in the mirror and notices that she is shaking and asks 'whats wrong Pratigya'

Pratigya gulps and says I get nervous when I have to give a hair cut which has to be perfect. Krishna listens to her and grabs her hands. He slides open the scissors and brings it close to his ears. Pratigya is really shocked. Krishna is not letting go of her hand. Pratigya panics and says 'What are you doing? Please stop this, you are gonna hurt yourself……..(there is no response from Krishna) You will cut your ear at this rate…..Please let go…..

Still there is no response from Krishna. Pratigya shrieks and realizes why Krishna is doing all this.

Pratigya shrieks and says 'Ok, I wont cut mens hair anymore please, let go…….Krishna please let go I wont cut mens hair. Pratigya starts to cry. Krishna lets go of her hands, gets up quietly from his seat, takes his towel and retreats to his bedroom without saying a word.

Pratigya is horrified and she cannot stop crying.

Edited by aleena1 - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
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OH MY GOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i guess it..........krishna is an obsessive KILLER........................???????????????????😲😲😲😲😲😲😲😲😲😲😲😲
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: kaasshh

OH MY GOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i guess it..........krishna is an obsessive KILLER........................???????????????????😲😲😲😲😲😲😲😲😲😲😲😲

Hi,
Thanks for reading my fanfic....
Just wait and see what happens, I like to keep everyone in suspense.......
I would like to hear other peoples views as well....
Thanks again for taking time out and we'll see how the story unfolds..
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Posted: 15 years ago
#14
Wow!!Chp 2 was very good.So Pratigya and Krishna are back together.But abt the album,hmm......I wonder what's going on in his mind.And why did you edit chp3??? I wanted to read it😔so pls update soon😊
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Posted: 15 years ago
#15
i like ur suspense part.
i am happy that both Krishna and pratigya are back together but sometimes krishna's actions seems to be very scary.
can't wait for next one.plz update soon.
aleena1 thumbnail
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Posted: 15 years ago
#16

Originally posted by: shruthiR

Wow!!Chp 2 was very good.So Pratigya and Krishna are back together.But abt the album,hmm......I wonder what's going on in his mind.And why did you edit chp3??? I wanted to read it😔so pls update soon😊

Hi,Im glad your enjoying the fanfic.
Sorry I had to edit chapter 3- Im having trouble pasting my fanfic, for some odd reason not everything is being pasted on to India forums and the punctuation seems to be out of place.
I have uploaded chapter 3- happy reading😊
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Hi!!
I just read chp 3.Why is Krishna being so over posessive and obsessed?Doesn't he trust Pratigya?Poor girl,I feel so bad for her.I hope she goes away from him soon.He's a creep.It was a very good chp.Looking forward to the next one😊
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Posted: 15 years ago
#18

Originally posted by: shruthiR

Hi!!

I just read chp 3.Why is Krishna being so over posessive and obsessed?Doesn't he trust Pratigya?Poor girl,I feel so bad for her.I hope she goes away from him soon.He's a creep.It was a very good chp.Looking forward to the next one😊

Hi Shruti,
Thanks for reading the ff. You asked why Krishna is possessive/obsessive, you have to stay tuned and see what happens😉😊
I will need to work on chapter 4 and I will upload it later on today.......
I would like some feedback on this ff, it there's anything you like/dislike please let me know....
.
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Originally posted by: aleena1

Hi Shruti,
Thanks for reading the ff. You asked why Krishna is possessive/obsessive, you have to stay tuned and see what happens😉😊
I will need to work on chapter 4 and I will upload it later on today.......
I would like some feedback on this ff, it there's anything you like/dislike please let me know....
.

Well,I am definitely looking forward to the next chp and I don't think tht there's anything I could ever dislike since I like this ff the way it is a lot.Just one request.Pls try and make your updates a bit more longer,if you have time that is😊
aleena1 thumbnail
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Posted: 15 years ago
#20

Originally posted by: shruthiR

Well,I am definitely looking forward to the next chp and I don't think tht there's anything I could ever dislike since I like this ff the way it is a lot.Just one request.Pls try and make your updates a bit more longer,if you have time that is😊

Hi,
Thanks, for your feedback, I will take it your suggestion into account and I will try to write a longer chapter.
😃😊😃😊😃

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