Devilz Lair: First Touch of Love prt 2 pg 61

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prateek

@prateek.007

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#451

Moving On..
Now lost in Love again..Such a adorable and lovely one shot..The whole scene was just adorable..SwaRon as a married couple..Swayam reached late and sharon trying to seduce him..taking her revenge..I can easily imagined diva Sharon and poor guy swayam there in that scene..All the small lovely nauk jokes of SwaRon was amazing..Then loved the camping part..All the nature description was wonderfull..I always think ki u have such a amazing ability to describe nature and beauty...The description of whole place was awesome..It was perfect place for SwaRon date..Both enjoying their time and loved the video part..where sharon confess in drunken mode and it makes swayam ROFL..Really that was adorable part..Now loved the ending..Swayam got the hint about sharon wish and as always loved the epic dialouge of Swayam majnu boy.."Ur wish is my Command"..

So it was really great work..Its very difficult to write on the basis of conditions..I dont know Uzma..But must say..Her given conditions are really awesome..And u done a great job..As i always says..u have such a diffrent n unique style of writing..So dear belated Congrates for ur 37 works completion on SwaRon..Insaallah hope to read more works from u..Till then keep writing..

Thanx for PM and sorry for late

Prateek

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prateek

@prateek.007

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#452

Reserved

Ohk So now i have to read part 2 of first touch of love..So now i am reserving here..But i will surly edit my comment on next sunday..

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VAISHNAVI MURALI

@-vaishnavimural

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#453

awesome os... loved it n enjoyed reading it a lot..

from d start of sharon admiring swayam n d way she was lost in him...
sharon n swayam lost in woods...
swayam controlling him to gain d trust from her..
name calling each other n d last beautiful dancer n ridiculously handsome was superb..
d way u showed sharon thinking abt how al called her n how swayam mentioned her as beautiful dancer which no1 ve said before n swayam's honest compliment , d way he made things normal before he loses his mind was well penned...
d tree scene was well penned.. d desire n innocence both kept intact n d way u showed d feelings n emotions were superb..
best part was with tiger.. d convo of swaron with tiger was cute n funny..
d way sharon said sorry in advance for touching unwanted place to climb up n his laughter to her statement was wel said...
mango scene d want but controlling d emotions n kiss by swayam to lick d mango juice of her was well penned.. great work..
lake scene was well explained..
rey kria RDX n karan sir came to rescue them n d clever rey for sending sharon with swayam , d blush that adorned sharon's face while she was thinking abt wat happened in d woods n smile that came to her lips... swayam's smile knowing wat sharon ll b thinking n 1st touch of love was al together awesome...

on whole a super awesome os by u which i enjoyed reading after a long gap last was ur apes n alines...

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doc42

@doc42

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#454

My God. This was worth the wait. It was beautiful, Siren's definition I liked very much and also the fact that Swayam wanted to start slow, as she had trust issues. Please write another one soon. Please.