Okay I'm really sorry for not unresing before. It was a beautiful update, with all the emotions brought out perfectly. I love the detailing and the way you've penned their fight with their inner selves.
The realisation was blissful and the dance exquisite and impactful.
The lyrics were a perfect match complimenting the entire os ridiculously well.
That one line about how she had triumphed and he had lost broke my heart, but the line that followed about how in love they won together brought a huge smile to my face.
I absolutely adored it. Keep writing and thanks for the pm.
Kya baat hai... koi d3 fics pe kuch zyada hi meherbaan ho raha hai... 😉
To be precise.. *kriyansh* yahi to charm h inka.. hehehe... i know u love them.. 😆
Wow... i love this angle... he himself admits that he likes her... eeepppsss .. feeling kab tak chupti aakhir... 😛
They talked abt the truth already? ... this is so realistic... ofcourse he'll feel guilty that he could'nt make his girl trust him so much that she could tell him everything & not to fake around n ditch him so mercilessly... 😳 😭
Moreover dancing with her so intensely ignites the same effect... aaahhh... they actually redefine chemistry...
& that naughtyness finally making its way in his actions... he's back in that lover mode... giving love a chance again...
Perfect.. beautifully garnished.. the story... 🤗
Uff .. i'm still in trance of the rain dance promo... i'm imagining the piece u've written in a more sexy way... ☺️
give us 1 reason of not liking it...it was too gud...pehle to song zabardast...us par KR dancing..wah wah...okay on a serious note...i loved UR monologue on love...(dii apko kitna experience hai love me...!!!!!!)...rey's pov was well penned...end was lovable...overall its ur one of the best
The start was good . The way you showed them dancing and he couldn't help but feel the exact emotions rushing towards her ...like once she had felt ... It is necessary naa ...It depicts his overlying feelings wants him to be the old rey ^_^Dekh "Like " word use matt kar ... Like ekdum teency weency crushie types sound karta ...use something similar to affecting her or something ... The flow of the words is perfect and seamless ...you have expressed everything with calmness and composure ...like it should beanxiety mein koi soch nai pata ...and calmness will give him the surity of his feelings !I loved Kria's turmoil more ..it gives a diff edge to the story...she is trying to change , she wants to change for him ... she is distancing herself from him so that she doesn't hurt her ...the way you have portrayed the she wants him to keep faith in her ... and how she is putting her every cent in it is amazing ... it clearly portrays how much she loves himAND I LOVED those bold line s...you know it adds fuel to the story ... It conveys what their souls are saying...Its beautifullland I am glad you showed the willingness pouring in him with the passing movement and I love the symbolism you used to convey the same ...Its khoobsoorat Vaishhuuu Hayyeee the end was so heart wrenchingly beautiful <3 ...It was the best part of the entire OS ..the way you expressed his present state , how he wanted answers from her and morever himself nd that dint allow him to leave was beautiful...and you are damn good at writing mellow tharki ...I am not good at understanding dance moves in write ups but I did understand the way you wrote with subtleness and composure ...and the proximity they shared and how their hearts mingled up ...it left a tingling sensation in my heart .I loved the end...so unique and untouched ...the way he spoke ilu ...and she did hear him and his smile <3It was so khoobsoorat!
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