gustakh dil ff - its all about love updt part 2

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Hey , there guys I don't know how many people watch gustakh dil . But something made me want to write something on the situation faced by Nikhil, Ishana and Lajjo.---- Where though legally wedded to Nikhil , Lajjo is the usurper ,the other woman . As I thought of what could and should happen in such a happenstance in real life I got an idea to write something , anything. Please bear with me . I'm not a talented writer nor a frequent writer but just want to try my hand at something. Hope u guys will b friendly and tolerate me enough... even though it is just a second attempt at writing a story after one failed attempt. I'm more of a poem writer not a story writer... so I'm going to write just a short story as I don't know if I'll be able to carry full justice to an ff .Please read review and healthy criticism is invited .. lets learn together. Kill me😛


Part one
She sat by the window overlooking the beautiful city. Her expression, one of solemn contemplation. She seemed to be wrapped up in her own mind as she gazed at the winter landscape with unseeing eyes. "What could she be thinking? " , wondered an observer at the nearby coffee shop as he indulged in people watching ,his favourite passtime. He casually observed her young figure and thought ,"she is too young to wear such a grave expression. What could be her story?". He looked up at her again only to be taken aback . She was now a picture of genuine joy. He shook his head " life ", he gave a wry smile ,watched her for a while,laughed and moved on to focus on another person. People watching was fun. One could never be bored .

As she had sat there in all her seriousness her phone rang. She attended the call without looking at the display in her distracted manner. The moment she heard the voice at the other end her face lit up with a youthful enthusiasm and radiant joy. "Sacchi ?? kab??? Ok ok . Dekhte jao . Surprise denge. Bye .", she laughed and cut the call .

She rose and ran downstairs in joy. She hugged a middle aged woman . "Madhu aunty they'll be here very soon. Lets go and surprise them", and she ran out. Madhu followed her laughing at her bubbly effervescence wondering about what would happen next.

They raced towards the waiting area of the airport just as the flight landed. She watched the passengers as she eagerly awaited the sight of their familiar faces. There she saw them looking here and there . She saw their frustration growing as they saw no one had come to receive them. She supressed her giggles and enjoyed their frustrated familiar faces until she could wait no longer to meet those that had been her friends,no, true friends. She walked towards them carefully and screamed in joy, "Gunja , Rishi bhaiya!!!"


They froze ,not beleiving their ears. They looked at each other in confusion and together turned around and saw her. The expression on their faces was of shock then mingled joy and confusion. She watched their changing expressions and called out again to shake them out of their stupor."Gunja , Rishi Bhaiya? ", she called only to be sandwiched between the two. "Lajjo" " Lajjo bhabhi" they cried together in joy and hugged her tight as if two confirm she was still there. Tears of joy flowed from all three pairs of eyes as they hugged each other after five long years..

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Wow! 👏 Loved it! 👍🏼 And this your 1st post on IF...😃

Please if you get a chance, I'd love to read more...😊
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Awesome start👏
Pls do continue would love to read more 😳😃
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Wow this is such a beautiful piece from a person who says that she's nt a gud writer. To be v true just yesterday I was wondering why don't v hv any FFs on GD forum-N look today when I visit the forum I see an FF!!! Pl do continue writing.Would love to read further .
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wow this is just a superb start
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Originally posted by: Parm.

Wow! 👏 Loved it! 👍🏼 And this your 1st post on IF...😃

Please if you get a chance, I'd love to read more...😊

thnk you n pls read n review like i said lets do it together. i hope i live up to what u expect😊
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Originally posted by: Desigirl_21

Awesome start👏

Pls do continue would love to read more 😳😃


thank you for liking it. hope it continues in the same way.
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Originally posted by: Neha07

Wow this is such a beautiful piece from a person who says that she's nt a gud writer. To be v true just yesterday I was wondering why don't v hv any FFs on GD forum-N look today when I visit the forum I see an FF!!! Pl do continue writing.Would love to read further .


thank you. it feels great when u say that. but i was being honest i am more of a poem person than a story person, so not confident abt these skills but will try n get better ..
suggestions if any r welcum.😊
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Originally posted by: rima4ever

wow this is just a superb start

thnk u😊
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Thankyou guys for liking my attempt 😛. Here's the next part. Hope I dont disappoint. Plz read n review and suggestions r welcum .Also guys write some ffs on gustakh dil .. are there no writers in the forum? plz pretty plz. i love to read. 😉😃

Part 2


Madhu watched the tearful reunion of the three with tears in her eyes . She walked towards the trio knowing that many questions needed to be answered . But not now and certainly not here in the middle of the airport with people gawking at the dramatics that were sure to unfold. She smiled and approached them calling out to them. Gunja and Rishii were surprised, "mom!!!!" and they hugged her. "When? ", "where?", "how?", "you and lajjo?", "together?" the questions came inarticulately as they could not yet believe what they had seen. "Later. Lets go now", Madhu said and started to lead them out of the airport.

Meanwhile the siblings , now out of their initial shock , carefully looked over at Lajjo. Their eyes widened as they took in her appearance. Lajjo wore a magenta turtleneck over a pair of black jeans and boots. A white long overcoat completed her ensemble and her hair were longer, straighter and pulled in a ponytail. They followed them in a surprised silence only to be surprised yet again as Lajjo gracefully slid in the drivers seat of a Mazda SUV. They looked at each other and shrugged. "Later ", they murmured with a wry smile and sat in the car to enjoy the ride both literally and figuratively. "What next?, they wondered ," What will Lajjo now shock us with? ".

Once the car got on the highway Lajjo slightly shifted to talk to Gunja and Rishi. "Kaisa laga humrah surprise ?. Hum keh rahe the na, madhu aunty ,dekho kaise shakal pe barah baje hai. Rishi bhaiya kono girlfriend banayi ka?Aur padhai aur ganit ka ka haal hain? Abhi bhi dabba gol ka?. Aur Gunja kono boyfriend banaye ho? Aur shaadi abhii bhi bhaagti ho ka? ", she laughed as she chatted continuously while Gunja and Rishi just stared at her silently. "Arey ka hua?. Aisey ankhein phad phad ke kahe dekh rahe ho? Hum hi to hai lajjo. Kono bhoot thodai hai? ". Now all joined in the laughter. Thank god thought rishi and gunja atleast some things remained the same.

With the same ease of yesteryears they got into inane conversations leaving out the serious issues for now. They spent the ride fooling around, laughing and teasing each others just like they used to. The car suddenly stopped and Lajjo exclaimed "Aiyyo dada! Jamuniya ko aaj hum kuch khilaye nahin toh tabiyat kharab ho gayi shayad" and began her mumbling and speaking continuously. Gunja and Rishi laughed at her familiar rambling even as they wondered about jamuniya'.

"What was Lajjo's cow doing here and what had happened to it?", they wondered in confusion. Seeing Lajjo lost in her eccentric rambles they looked at Madhu for an explanation "Jamunia ??", they asked. Madhu knew what they thought and laughed. What she told them next had them stumped . Rishi almost had an aneurysm while Gunja dissolved in bouts of hysterical laughter. Apparently Lajjo missed her cows or friends so much that she had named her Mazda SUV jamuniya'. To Rishi the idea was preposterous to gunja hilarious. Only Lajjo , they thought , only their Lajjo could be so crazily sweet and funny to equate a luxury car to a cow. They looked on in affectionate amusement as Lajjo started fiddling with her phone unaware of how they had reacted.

Soon a patrolling car approached them and an officer got down to enquire about their hold up. Gunja and Rishi were dumbstruck as they watched a completely different Lajjo. Lajjo had turned into a beautiful siren. She pouted, harmlessly firted and batted her eyelashes as she explained their problem to the officer. The officer was spellbound and offered some spare fuel. Lajjo graciously thanked the officer. The officer said, "sure Cherie anything . But be careful the next time". Lajjo laughed prettily and said,"I wont. And I wouldn't have done it today if I hadn't been insanely busy and in a hurry. Here Bob let me thank you properly. " Lajjo handed two tickets to Bob and said, "these are tickets for tomorrow's show. Bring your wife along and im sure you'll have fun." Bob blushed , thanked her and left.

"Phew!" exclaimed Lajjo "close call Madhu aunty . Kim will be proud. She sure has taught me well ", she and madhu laughed. Lajjo turned towards the back and saw Gunja and Rishi staring at her with open mouths. "errrmm ", Lajjo blushed. "later" gunja said and once again they started joking around.

Meanwhile Gunja and Rishi were still trying to reconcile what they had seen to what they knew of Lajjo. Lajjo had transformed from excited and childlike to a sensual woman and back to the childlike Lajjo, so effortlessly ,right infront of their eyes. They wondered what all had changed in these past 5 years. Her appearance and style had changed dramatically yet Lajjo had retained her youthful exuberance , innocence and warmth. Observing her they were confident that it was only the packaging that had changed but the essence of Lajjo was the same. Perhaps the once raw diamond had only been polished.She was different yet they could connect to her easily in the same way they had connected 5 years ago. Yes later' she would be answering many of their questions. But for now they continued to talk and laugh away.

"Later" thought Madhu as she watched them, later' there would be tears and pain, hurting and healing, questions and answers but for now madhu was happy to see the laughter, the teasing ,the ease and love flowing between the three.

"Later ", thought Lajjo, "later she would have to explain away everything. Later she would have to think once again of the life she had left back. But for now she was happy to talk to her beloved friends and only supporters in her cold yet classy family in law. They had seen beyond her appearance and village upbringing to the heart that lay in her. They had accepted and loved her for who she was. She would love them forever. She could laugh and be herself with them . Just be sonbarsa ki lajjo with them".

Edited by vivre - 11 years ago

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