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Posted: 12 years ago
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Finally guys i'm writing an OS
because after tuesdays episode this thought spontaneously came to me,almost like a dream,
WARNING
this OS is not funny ,neither creative
sirf innocence se pakane ki koshis ki hai,tasty lage toh 😃


PAPA KI PARI (I)
amita & amit at doctor saroj's chamber.
amit is as usual confused & amita for obvious reasons is sad rather depressed.
Our sensitive doctor notices amit's 'not concerned " atitude & the pain amita is going through, something strikes her
after amita's checkup,she says something very logical but...
something which is...well u see what's it😲😲😲

DR.Saroj: dekhiye mr.& mrs shah i think (with a very trifle hesitation),well i think u guys are quite young & (looking at amit) not really too ready for taking responsibility of a baby & theres nothing to be ashamed of it,dekhiye maine pehle bhi kahi hai ki pregnancy ke 9 mahine dono parents ke liye ek beautiful journey hoti hai
aur agar ye journey hi beautiful nehi ho toh aap log legal abortion ke liye kabhie bhi opt kar sakte hai! there's nothing wrong about it. haan ek doctor hone ke naate mujhe ye sab kehna nehi chahiye but think ! baby is a serious responsibility!!!


amita is shattered.Amits recent behaviour clearly states he's not happy with the baby.
so... will ...he..ammu could'nt think anymore...but what about her ...she had already started to feel the new life within her...the heart that'll beat with hers...will be nourished by her veins...the life which will breathe wihin her...sleep within her...feed within her...her life was incomplete without it...but what if amit...how will she stop him??what will she explain?? how can she??...she loves amit a lot...lot...& her thoughts becomes hazy & so does her vision.


That Night

amita is asleep in her bed room but amit is not by her side...where is he????? 😲😲😲

mudisland is looking beautiful in the dark ,wind is blowing hard as if its perturbed by something,something which is not allowing it to be in peace & calm down,

just like amit's heart,something is not letting it be in peace ,he was sittimg on a rock by the shore..

why did she talk of abortion??? why?? & why the hell is it hurting me ,i did't want a baby,she sensed it,spoke out...no..i did'nt like it

but when amita told me "amit aap papa banne wale ho! (which is supposed to be a good news for me) i was'nt happy either ...i didn't lift her up in my arms or shouted how happy i was...i wasn't HAPPY AFTERALL...when it's the best moment of every fathers life...i'm not concerned about MY OWN BABY ..JUST dreaming of the worst..thinking about my comfort ...i must be the most insensitive person of this world.everyone thinks so...& most importantly amita does....selfish too...thimking just abut myself...a BEAST...who can aparently think of mudering his own blood...HE FELT BAD...LONELY...his thoughts were becoming worst when suddenly he was interupted

it was a shadow, was it an animal ??but he had nver heard about animals sprowling over mudisland in dark nights
was is an human -being, was it a better human being that him...god what was was he thinking...he said to himself...

it was a girl, she was a girl,a small girl ,she might not be of more that 3 years,but she had intense dark eyes,amit could not look away from the magical pair...the girl's expression was blank as she walked towards him but when she came nearer he saw pain in her eyes,

simultaneously he saw her pale cheeks, her rosy pink lips shaped perfectly like rose petals,her pitch black curly hair...she mesmerised him...

by then the girl had come very close to him...beta aap ki mummy-papa kahan hai?? he felt like asking but was stopped by something like a lump in his throat

the girl came closer ,gently she climbed on his lap...as if they knew each other for ages...& she had been doing the same all this while...both of them ...yes both of them

heaven...she felt like a feather...her touch was magic...she must be an ANGEL ,
slowly her hands reached his cheeks,she rubbed her hands across them,
to amits astonishment ,just he he realised ,they were moist...was he crying ...but ...i mean why???

he looked into her eyes,he loved them,he looked at her lips,her hair,her pale cheeks,he loved them all...he wanted her to touch him more...more ...& more & more

he was clueless but ...somehow he felt ,this girl understood him...more than anyone else in the world did,for this girl he was not the MURDERER.

this girl was hurt by his pain,she had rubbed his tears with her little magical hands
at once he knew that even when the entire world would stant up against him this girl would be by his side...to understand him...to rub his cheeks with her agical hands...

suddenly she did something & amit followed
she sat down beside him ,legs folded & amit ,laid down his head on her lap (just like a troubled & tired child does to his mother) ,

he felt good,as if a load had been lifted up from upon his shoulders...
the wind was blowing softly,it no longer seemed perturbed,

and it was just then that the angel spoke ...in her magical voice ...she said into his ears

the magical word "PAPPA"!!!! ( almost in a whisper)

AMIT SMILED PEACEFULLY ,HIS WEARY HEAD PLACED UPON HER LAP ,HIS EYES CLOSED AS A DROP OF TEAR ROLLD DOWN FROM THE CORNER OF HIS EYES...!!!!

P.S-He knew what he wanted ...he knew what he could do for his angel...& that was it



IF U GUYS LIKE IT THEN ONLY I'LL GO FOR PART 2,SO YOUR COMMENTS ARE IMPORTANT which i promise will be more creative than this!!






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Posted: 12 years ago
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RINI... I LOVE U YAAR... mwuuah mwuaaah mwuuaahhh.. Thats all i can say for now... baaki tab jab i l get some proper words to praise your OS...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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first of all Rini ...u were fab dera...taliya hee taliyašŸ‘šŸ¼
...literaly,hands up for ur creative thinking...love u janu...kaha se aati hai itni creativity...man na padega hamare forum me ek se badhakar ek creater hai...muhaaa...a big hug šŸ¤—
...i like many things specialy some words like she said in his ear,"papaa"
...then DROP OF TEAR ROLLD DOWN FROM THE CORNER OF HIS EYES..
...her touch was magic
...she felt like a feather
...and this line...isne to meri jaan hee leee..somehow he felt ,this girl understood him...more than anyone else in the world did,for this girl he was not the MURDERER
...the girl's expression was blank as she walked towards him but when she came nearer he saw pain in her eyes
...very well described transition of pareshan amit into PAPA...
very VERY GOOD ...RINI LOVE U JAANUšŸ‘
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Posted: 12 years ago
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yaar anya.. tujhe b I LOVE U.. tune mere dil ka haal keh diya.. yaar rini i dont have words ... it was LOVELY... lovely OS.. lovely lines.. i could imagine the whole scene... i myself felt lump in my throat when amit used MURDERER word.. waaooo beautiful just beautiful... yaar next OS jaldi likhna pleasse... kal ke precap ko dekh kar mai toh badi worried ho gayi thee and amit par gussa aa raha thaa.. tera OS padh ke shaant hui hoon mai..
Thank u so so much.. šŸ¤—
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Rini dear very awesome os.ā­ļø
Very good title.
U r each and every word so beautiful yaar.šŸ‘
I love u r os rini dear.
Thanks for the awesome os dear
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Posted: 12 years ago
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tera man mera man ek hee to hai AMAN...love u too dear
aanaya16 thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
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"papaa Ke pari "title bhe ekdam mast hai...wah
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Posted: 12 years ago
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yaar rini. next OS se mera matlab thaa next Part of this OS... m already getting anxious... :-))
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Posted: 12 years ago
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me too agree with aman...muhaaa rini..badi talented hai yaar tu...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Not getting enough words to praise you Rini. am speechless
Beautiful writing. Its Heart Touching. loved it totally 😃

Hats off to your writing. šŸ‘ A Big Hug to you dear😊



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