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Posted: 12 years ago

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lazyleaves

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Posted: 12 years ago

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vandana.sagar

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Am super excited!😉

Banner is brilliant!👏

What can I say that I have not said before!? 😉

You are such an accomplished writer, that sometimes I really don't know what to say...will not say much on the story for now, but you never cease to amaze me.

Absolutely stunning! It was so gripping, description of emotions and surroundings so brilliant! I loved it !

The mystery of the unknown, the suspense that ran through the chapter..., the glimpse of the characters and how they might be connected to each other in the future...very promising ! I look forward to this journey!

This is really one of those stories that you feel like reading in one sitting!...👏

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Kalyaani B Rao

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Posted: 12 years ago

The girl sees not the man but hope,

The man sees not a girl to be saved but a chance to be good

The story you want to share, wants to be read

I know you are going to take me a roller coaster

I am ready, being disappointed in never a question

How much you will surprise me, I wish to know

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IronButterfly

@IronButterfly

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Posted: 12 years ago

What a nice surprise.

New story!

So glad.

Quite different from your usual work.

The background you built was very well written.

Very descriptive. The body language of the people there.

Everything made it quite interesting.

Will not go much in the detail as there are many confusions which i'm sure will be cleared in the future updates.

Could understand Khushi so much.

The fear of future. The unknown man with whom she has made a connection of some sort.

Knowing that her fate is not in her hands.

Watching others deciding her future.

Not a pleasant feeling at all.

But through all this i could feel that she still held on to some hope.

Hope that the unknown man may end her miseries.

Hope that she will go away from this place and her uncle.

Hope that it might be a new beginning.

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vgedin

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Posted: 12 years ago

TWIGGY

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That was a stellar start Zee. The ambience at the building, the dark and dingy atmosphere, reeking of every vice known to mankind.. and in such few words! Bas, tu genius hai !

So Arnav kept losing but this day he chose to won. Is he rescuing her or is he taking her an all new hell ? But then theres Aman too, that makes it even more exciting.

Ab jaldi update kar 😳

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hmm.. guess karo :P

@jas0308

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Posted: 12 years ago

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wow.. wow superb!!!👏

awesome chapter and starting

it's really interesting concept and no Anjali.. super awesome😉

khushi was kept in a disheveled torn room and she was also beaten.. oh my felt bad for her😭

but why was arnav so interested in her? and now finally he got her after losing so many times

cant wait for more😃

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arshifan91

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Posted: 12 years ago

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A new one !!😲😃
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Zehra, this was indeed a surprise to your readers for 2 reasons , one being that u are trying a different genre and the other that u have given us one more story to enjoy on this adorable pair 😊

Now , coming to the story , this part has made me guess and think so much about the characters and their nature. But all your stories which i have read , u havent created a specific hero - villain bond or negative characters but only the circumstances and situations have forced them to behave and act upon such a way. So right now i am not able to develop a dislike towards Shyam even though i feel really pathetic with respect to his behaviour towards Khushi and manhandling her.

Arnav The way u have described his features made me drool once again over him 😉😛 If he was such a master in the game , why does he loose for the past 2 days ?? And here too their telepathy works where she is sure that he will take her from this hell on this particular day without even witnessing the game 😳 So what does this Arnav do in this story ?? A hot shot business man or a different field ??😕 I know seriously that i ask u so many questions to make u reveal a spoiler 😆 but i too know u are an expert in answering it without any revelations 😉😛

One request -Will u give us a picture of Aman who was invisible in the show and remove the cloak through which he hides himself 😆 ??

I am very curious for the story to unfold and give an insight to the characters.

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incarnadine

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Posted: 12 years ago

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I'm so happy you started another story Zehra! 😊

Loving the concept. Very different from the usual. And I loved the way you've developed the characters, though it's still the first chapter.

Khushi's uncle being Shyam who is greedy for money, and hence has pawned Khushi in his gambling escapades (well, this is what I understood 😛).

I pity Khushi. Her fate being decided by others. A very sad situation. But I find her to be quite hopeful of her future, with ASR, with whom she has formed a connection over the 2 days he had been visiting the place. And one whom she feels may end her miseries of staying with her uncle.

I'm looking forward to see how this story unfolds, as the parting words of Shyam have left me with some confusion. If ASR had won in the right way, I don't see why Shyam would scream, and decide to attack him.
So there's more than meets the eye, which will obviously be cleared in the upcoming chapters.

I'm really excited to read more!! 😃

Loving it! :)

Edited by .sobtian. - 12 years ago