New OS: A Crazy Little Thing Called Love

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hello peeps. I am back after a short sabbatical leave.I am still very lazy so here is a short one shot for you for the wkend.😳
Hope you will like. You know the drill. Like n comment if you like.😛 N if you didn't like, a feedback would be appreciated.😳


My previous work: https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/saraswatichandra/3588253/ii-the-creative-index-attn-ff-os-ss-writers-ii?pn=3

If somebody had told me that one fine day I would be ready to leave everything and everyone behind to go with the love of my life, I would have found it ridiculous and would be obfuscated.

Me? Leaving my family for a stranger? No way!! I am my father's pride and his most treasured pearl and my mother's self respect and image. And my family was, is and will be beyond everything and everyone, not the other way round.

I am not Kumari, my crazy filmy little sister. I am the first graduate of my village; I have my head securely placed on my shoulders.But… the day has finally come where all reasoning has gone out the window for me.

Me, Kumud Sundari, I am ready to leave behind everyone and everybody to be with the love of my life. To be with my Saraswatichandra! Yes I love him and can go to any extent to show him my love. Well have I not already gone to every extent?

The day we declared our love to each other, there had been no point of return for me. I melted completely in his love, garlanded him, gave myself body and soul in our love and... fasted for him on karvachauth.

What else was left for me to do? May be dying for him? I would die anytime in his arms. What would be life without him anyway?

I would be lost, just like I was when he left for Dubai. The haveli in which I grew up and had the fondest memories felt like a desert without him and I was like a lost soul wandering around in search of my oasis. When I fasted for him, my heart kept telling me that he would come and… he did. Seeing him was like seeing a mirage in the middle of the desert but he was not an illusion. He was real. He was my Saraswatichandra.He has left everything and everyone to be with me on this special day. My first Karvachauth!!

He broke my fast, hugged me tight and my heart was drumming all the time till it ached with a sweet pain which words would not be able to explain. When he broke the hug, he had caressed my face and kissed me on my forehead, on my eyelids, on my cheeks and had brushed his lips against mine without deepening the kiss. And... he had inches away to stare at me. His eyes never left my face and it seemed like he was making love to me with his eyes and was conveying through them his endless love.

I just kept looking at his angelic face, mesmerized and wondering how can a man look so loving and gentle. My heart was threatening to burst with so much love for him and that love poured out from my eyes in the form of tears when he whispered to me that it was time for him to go. I panicked.

"Don't!! Please take me along with you". I begged. I took his hands in mine, my eyes pleading to him not to leave me alone again. I knew I was making it more difficult that it was already for him, i knew that he was going through the same pain that i was experiencing at the thought of going away from him but I just couldn't help it. The dam of tears broke and i looked at him helplessly. He tightened his grip on my hands and looked in my eyes.

"Not like this Kumud, I want you to be proud of me when I come back to take you as my bride".

And…he was gone!!

I didn't get the chance to tell him that I was already proud of him and that he had nothing to prove to me.

I didn't get the chance to tell him that I, Kumud Sundari,is nothing without him, my Saraswatichandra.

But I am sure... he knows it!!

Love!! What a crazy little thing!!


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Posted: 12 years ago
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Woot woot. New OS for the wkend😛 I am reserving till tomorrow. I am very sleepy. Will read first thing in the morning and get back to you.😛
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Posted: 12 years ago
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awww this ws soo lovely...amazingly well written...i cud ACTUALLY visualize it...kudos to u dear...👏👏👏...

u SHOULD write more on SaMud..n plz do pm me too whenvr u do tht..😊..

thnx for the pm regardin this os..🤗
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Loved it. Will comment tomorrow need to sleep now.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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IS NOT IT TRUE THT such crazy things called LOVE..
God u made me beleive.. 😭 yes so passionate os nd ofcourse very well written 👏
LOved the way u describe the love. ..specially tht true nd beautiful lines ..m my fathers proud my mums reflection.. 👏
I swear i Enjoyed every bit of it..nd read it again nd again..
Loved it slot plz keep writing nd made me lost in SAMUD world 😳
LOVE U JAANU 🤗
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hello!
Very nicely written!..as always!..kumud sundari's feelings!..
U added certain stuff it appears!..those extra kisses!
There is a song Han.."take me away..to a better place"..nice one!
Nice Han!
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: Nikki_SAS-holic

awww this ws soo lovely...amazingly well written...i cud ACTUALLY visualize it...kudos to u dear...👏👏👏...

u SHOULD write more on SaMud..n plz do pm me too whenvr u do tht..😊..

thnx for the pm regardin this os..🤗



Thanks dear for ur time!! Actually I am writing only in SaMud these days. I just got a bit lazy.
See u

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: archanamanav

Hello!
Very nicely written!..as always!..kumud sundari's feelings!..
U added certain stuff it appears!..those extra kisses!
There is a song Han.."take me away..to a better place"..nice one!
Nice Han!



Hey!! 😛 thanks for reading n for ur time.
Yes I have added m own touch n some things that wud have been great if shown 😳 u see dreaming mana nahin hain!! 😉
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Posted: 12 years ago
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When I saw the title first , I thought how u introduce P'nam and P'shone here.but nyway Its brilliant one...U were Going through the mind of Kumud. its wonderful.Exactly the same. Its very nice and U penned it beautifully.
Loved it :)👏👏
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Posted: 12 years ago
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@ kittenlover

Thank u dear!! Yes after the epi n looking at the precap I wanted to write abt Kumud n her feelings.
My heart squeezed seeing her asking Saras to take her with him. May b she subconsciously knows that he won't come back now!! 😭

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