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sravya

@rocksravya11

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Posted: 12 years ago

#41

amazing luvely...thnkzz fr dpm n sry fr d late reply

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*Eva*

@*Eva*

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Posted: 12 years ago

#42

NEHAPIE! 😲 NEHAPIE! 😲 NEHAPIE! 😲 OMG! 😲 OMG! 😲 OMG! 😲

ALL I HAVE TO SAY IS...🤓

O H E M G E E 😳 H O L Y M O L Y 😳 K Y A B A A T H A I 😳 S U P E R B 😳 A M A Z I N G 😳 P E R F E C T O 😳

THIS WAS ABSOLUTELY GORGEOUS!!!!!!! ❤️ From the very first word onwards...I WAS ALL EARS <3 *SIGH* You ALWAYS capture Didi and Mannu's TRUE characters and emotions...you know them, you understand them and you FEEL them...and believe me, you write like an absolute DREAM When you combine all those qualities, the result is in right front of your eyes...THIS STUNNING WORK OF ART ❤️ OMG, the beautiful flashback (Mannu in the water...CAN DI TEACH HER HOW TO SWIM? 🤣 and the beautiful bhagwan part...UFF, HOSH UDH GAYE!!! <3 Kyun ki woh uss mein rab dikhta hai...😭 AB TIME FOR.LEFT LEG AAGE AAGE RIGHT LEG PEECHE PEECHE 🤣) Mannu's dard-e-Di is the cause of dard-e-Evu 💔 😭 Especially the part where she looks at Jeevika and sings the "seena jalta hai" part...hai, Mannu bani Devdas 😭 Dil toot gaya </3 I loved Mannu's dard ka izhaar...the way she said it was so Mannu-like...cute baatein covered with der saara dard...*sigh* I could sense Di's heart breaking more and more as time went by..."she loved her...only and only her" </3 Kyun dard hai itna tere ishq mein, rabba ve...😭 I was totally picturing all of this going on in my head...Devdas Mannu, dard-bhari Di...ab toh I'm super despo to see this in the show :( WE NEED TO GET YOU ON THE NEXT PLANE TO MUMBAI JI...fire all the writers and LET'S START AFRESH =)) <3 I really wish they explored this more in the show too...we've seen Mannu's insecurities a few times, but aur bohat kuch baaki tha...aur abhi bhi hai *sigh* Every letter I read had so much FEELING in it...this was the most HEARTFELT piece of writing ever ❤️ I'm going to read it again raat ko pakka...I kept scrolling down to see if you had another part 🤣 NUMBER 1 FAN RIGHT HERE 😎 PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE keep making more masterpieces!!! I seriously can't get over how BRILLIANT your work is...your talent is just impeccable in every single way...it's already so rightfully appreciated on I-F, but with this kind of magic, I wouldn't be surprised if this was on TV <3 Nehapie!!! YOU'RE AMAZING!!! KEEP UP THE ABSOLUTELY BRILLIANT WORK!!!! <3 Lots and lots of love ❤️

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F.R.I.E.N.D

@F.R.I.E.N.D

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Posted: 12 years ago

#43

Beautiful!!

and loved the bachuu-Maanvi :)

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shine123

@shine123

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#44

first of all sry for commenting sooo late...

stilll heres my comment ...don't know does it make any sense or not jo mann mein likh diya...lol

This was amazing...

First the flashback in hrishikesh...so so so guuud

Mannu ke nakhre while going into the water then trusting her di phir uske antics in the water pure mannu style

Then matha tekna di touching her forehead wid the shivling while mannu touching her di's feet then the milk pouring...mannu pouring milk on di's feet ...ise gaana yaad aaya merko :

Tu hi hai tu hi mera jahaan

Tu hi rab, tu hi dua

For mannu everything is after her di even god ...

then to reality she missing her OLD di...

Her insecurities ...though she knows tht she is no 1 but somewhere it becomes doubtful to her even shown in the show too as it has not being specified by jeevika verbally

"As Manvi saw Jeevika, she stopped for a moment, looked at her with hurt eyes and started singing along with song

Seena jalta hai..peena padta hai.
dard ghat ta hai jaam chadhta hai...

As Jeevika looked back deeply in her eyes she noticed that there was something that hurt her really bad but what she wanted to know..."

<3 di ki line yaad aayi mjhe" Aankhein kya..Main teri saansein bhi padh sakti hun.."

Then manvi becoming restless ...Only di could handle mannu and she became silent only when di took her head in lap nd to her room...

Then talking like a baby ...shutedent frisht ...😊

Mannvi describing how she feels tht her di is no more her old di with whom she has spent her whole life ...was so nicely written⭐️❤️

Nd then di's feeling were too nicely described nd her guilt ...

Then mannu sleeping in di's lap nd the para:

""Jab aap mujhe aishe paal kalti ho na phil mujhe mumma ki bhi yaad ni aati... kyunki woh kami toh hamesha se aap poori karti aayi ho.. pal jaab aap ni hoti na phil mujhe mumma papa ki bhi yaad aane lagti hai... mujhshe doool na jaaya kalo.. mele ko uyii hoti hai yahan, " Manvi said placing her hand on her heart and in next second from her eyes one fat tear rolled down.. Jeevika quickly wiped it and hugged her back nd kept caressing her.. "

Pure Jeemanish ❤️

Then the last one di asking her to forgive her. nd telling her tht she is life to her..

"" " Koi khud ko khud se door kaise kar sakta hai... Tu hai toh Main hun and Main toh Tu hi hai na.... " On very next moment, she saw Manvi's lips getting wide with smile.. "

❤️❤️

Just brilliant, perfect, incredible ...super duper guuud ⭐️❤️

Luv u nd ur stories❤️