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Priya

@nobo

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#21

Though not very much Visible always...Maanvi's Insecurity about her place & importance in her Di's life had always been there...even on show !!

Be it her negative attitude for J's marriage ...or be that little disappointment on her pregnancy 's news ...that was obvious enough from that number convo !! For her...her Di is No.1 ..always & she admits it often But she wants that same assurance from Jeevika ! Deep inside she very well knows that Jeevika loves her the most ...BUTT she wants to hear it from her...properly !!

Originally posted by: Neha.K.
.. .. Jaise har maa ke liye uske bache maayne rakhte hain waise hi tu hai mere liye..phir tune kaise soch liya ki main tujhe pyar ni karti... Koi khud ko khud se door kaise kar sakta hai... Tu hai toh Main hun and Main toh Tu hi hai na.... " On very next moment, she saw Manvi's lips getting wide with smile.. Jeevika also smiled knowing her heart surely heard her words

Wonderfully explained ⭐️

Again she just Can't help but feel envious of Viren...& Its so natural , someone getting the place that was yours ...only. She knows again deep inside that his place is also natural & she is the one whoz loved most...but still. You know Even Maanvi have some things...Jo Wo chah Kar bhi nahi badal sakti. Jaise aap Ek bache ko nahi Keh sakte ke wo maa ko lekar insecure na ho...Waise hi wo bhi ...

& also being the girl she is ...she can't help but Recall all those memories in Hrishikesh with her Di ... Both these things are Aweosmley penned down ...❤️

Originally posted by: Neha.K.
It was so magical days when she was in Hrishikesh with her Di.. Sahi maayne mein jise khoobsurat kehte hain waisi thi zindagi... subah uth te di ko dekhna..sara din masti karna, zindagi di se shuru hoke wahin pe khatam hoti thi... aur ab sab badal gaya... jagah badal gayi, rishte badal gaye, yahan tak ki Di bhi badal gayi, par main khud ko kyun nahin badal paa rahi... Kyun main mannu se Manvi nahin ban paa rahi Hun

😒 😔 KYUKI TU MANNU HI HAI !!!!!!!!!

. pal ab aap badal gayi ho di... aapne mujhe new year bhi jiju ke baad wish kiya... lohri pe bhi aapne jiju ke shath danchy ki... valentine week pe bhi aap jiju ke sath bahar chali gayi, aur aaj shivratri bhi... subah main aapka wait karti reh gayi aur aap jiju ko leke mandir chali gayi... thatsh nottt fair Mrs Vadhera... aap meli jagah kishi aul ko nai de shakti... jiju ko leke jaana tha toh leke jaati na pal mujhe kuuu bhool gayi aap di? :( aul phil jab main aapko prashad dene aayi toh aapne keh diya ki aap le chuki ho pehle hi... mele haath she bhi le leti toh kya ho jata di... aapko pata hai na hum kaise shivratri manaate the...shivratri kya har tyohar hum kaise manaate the... chote se chote din ko yaadon se bhar dete the... par ab waisa kuch nai hota... aur woh yaadein mujhe jeene nahin deti...My nanha dil hurtshhh...innna shaala , She said opening her arms wide...

Not fair didi...

Brilliant :) :) :) :)

Also the way she was baby talking ...student fisshttt , the way only Jeevika could handle her , I'll assume didi took mannu to her room in her arms

Awesome !!!!!!!

Now Coming to Flashbacks Hrishikesh Portion ...

What do I even say about that , So natural ,so easy to connect with ...Everything was awesome. I can so imagine that early in the morning scene ...she didn't asked her to ...par phir bhi Jaana tha !! Your mannu is like me...Subah subah kaun dekh raha hai .,,Chalo na aise hi ...aur pani thanda hai 😆 ( Though I say ..paani geela hai 😎 🤣 )

Her antics in water ...Pehle andar Jane ke liye...phir Bahar aane ke liye !!!! & most of all the way she trusted her with coming inside ⭐️

Best was Mannu ki pooja I can imagine mannu doing this ...as for her shivjee comes after her di...maa is first god na :)

Originally posted by: Neha.K.

As they reached near shivling, both bowed down for prayer... Jeevika slightly touched her forhead with shivling while Manvi bowed near Jeevika's feet...

As Jeevika felt something, she turned back "Mannu, tu itni peeche hoke maatha kyun tek rahi hai.. aage aa naa... bhagwan ji khush hote hain..."

"Mujhe bhi toh aapki khushi hi chahiye na Di... "She smiled..

hmm kya??"Jeevika asked as she cudnt hear what exactly manvi said

Kuch nai... aap karo na jai jai.. main bhi kar rahi hun.. " She said grinning wide.

Jeevika opened the milk packet and poured half on shivling and rest she gave to Manvi to do the same.. Manvi took the packet and poured it on Jeevika's feet.. Jeevika got shocked and stopped Manvi "Mannnuu kya kar rahi hai? Bhagwan ji pe chadhana hai.."

"Wohi toh kiya di... aapne apne bhagwan ji pe chadhaya na, maine kuch bola?? toh mujhe kyun tok rahi ho..."

⭐️ ⭐️ ❤️

Overall...It's Just Splendid :)

M glad I made that deal 😆

That was worth it :) :) :)

Edited by nobo - 12 years ago

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Ashirania

@Ashirania

Navigator

Posted: 12 years ago

#22

awww...sho shweet 😛 it was beautiful, perfectly fits mannu's personality...loved the way mannu spoke to jeevika when she was drunk!! thanks for the PM! and keep writing!!

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Fari_15

@Fari_15

Dazzler

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#23

Amazing!!
Loved the way u portrayed it!! 😊

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vishwa patel

@-vish-

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#24

amazing OS

beautifully written...loved it

thanx for pm

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sapphhire

@sapphhire

Inactive

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#25

I am in tears 😭

beautiful.

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_Ridz_

@_Ridz_

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#26

neha diii... mujhe yeh bohot pyaala laga...aap inna achha likhte ho ke mele aankhon me aansu aa jate hain... meli shweet neha di ke jaisi hi yeh sweet thi... mujhe bhi abhi danshyy kalni hain... ekdum JaaMan ke jaisi cute si OS thi... aap toh ho hi beshht... aul main aapse bohot pyaal kalti hu... love you ( in full maanvi mode ) 🤗

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Amii

@Amii90

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#27

Priya's comment - WOW :) Brilliant!

Edited by Amii90 - 12 years ago

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Anjali

@cutiepie2244

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#28

Awww it was damn awesome OS... loved it sooo muccchhh... it was really an emotional update n the title suits it in every ways... VIRMAN scenes was sooo sweet... waooo maanvi danced... u chose really a great song... felt bad 4 maanvi... she really missed jeevika though they both live in the same house but maanvi is missing her😭😭... JEEMAN scene was damn awesome... plz dear write more...

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Amii

@Amii90

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#29

I feel like copy pasting Priya's post as she said it all but then again don't wanna be sued for Plagiarism :p Anyhooo coming to the OS- I don't think there's even a room for any complaints or faults because its pretty much obvious that this work is nothing but a piece of perfection. And not forgetting the mastermind behind this, it makes it an automatic winner!

The theme was brilliantly presented- Unintentional Pain! Sometimes I think unintentional pain caused to others hurts more especially if that one is extremely close to you! Same is the case here with Jeevika, who unitentionally, ended up hurting Mannu through her actions/words or lack thereof actually! It brings more guilt when the person realizes or is made aware of the fact that they have caused so much to others unknowingly! It happens- very naturally- life is a walking in a crowd- you are bound to stumble upon people and step on their toes- likewise, we often stumble and step upon people's emotions!!! Very rarely people openly express that they got hurt because it takes lot of courage to do so but in this scenario, Mannu's drunk state became a handy prop that allowed her to pour her heart out! But like Priya mentioned, Mannu had been verbal about this in the show because it becomes essential to let the person know!

Though their relationship does not demand communication of an ordinary people; however, at times one does to need to hear those re-assuring words, to feel those loving gestures from the other person because like they say sometimes we regret the things we didn't do over the things we do; similarly sometimes we regret over unspoken words than the spoken words! Mannu, like a child, longs for those gestures, those words of her sister that she has been accustomed to hear ever since she was a kid. We often make mistake not being verbal or expressive of our love or care for our loved ones thinking our heart has a mirror that one can see through and get the message on their own but even if one knows you inside out- they still seek that assurance- that guarantee that Mannu always proudly endorses- that guarantee for her is only her DI- so once she doesn't get that- it is very natural for her to feel this way!!!

For the OS again- Perfect- sweet yet heart warming with emotions intact; especially loved the beginning scenes with REAL Mannu and her "Thanda Paani" fiasco lol! Superb job as always, I don't need to say this because I should to commend on your work! One cannot write this without conviction but your work is exlempary for that which is why its glues its readers too!!! Love it ❤️

Edited by Amii90 - 12 years ago