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Originally posted by: 9n9i9s9h9u9
hello dear
me back with few lines😆😆😆don't know,how bad they areas my net is doing hide ad seek with meso write it ,without further readingmaan and geetwith their view and problemsmai ek sukhi pattitu ek surakh gulaabhum dono ka ek honajo na pura ho sake,hai woh ek khawaabtu nahi hai sukhi pattitu hai ek gahari chaav,jiske nicche do zindagifalaa rahi hai,apne paavaur agarhu mai gulaab ,to jaan lemere paas bhi hai ,kaate be hisaabnahi de sakti mai tujhe mera saaththak chuki hu mai ab itnake nahi kar sakti,thamne ke liya khushiyaanaage apna haathateet se hum chup nahi saktejo beet gayi hum pe,usse hum muker nahi saktejo hona tha woh ho gaya,maanta huissme hum dono ka kuch hissa kho gayachahe kuch bhi karle ussko to hum badal nahi saktejanti hu mein ,ku chahiye tujhe mera saathhai mere paas tera kuch aisajo lauta dega waapis khusiyaan tere haathpar tu kyu nahi dekh saktaun khushiyoon mai bhi hogi mere beete kal ki parchaaiyanjo degi har pal tujhe mere saath na chalne ki duhaaiyajo pal kal aayegawoh na tune dekha hai na menesaath woh kya laayegayeh na tu jaanti hai na meinisliyehaamare liye jo pal haiwoh bas yahi ek pal haijo beet gaya woh bhi ik kal haiaur jo aayega woh bhi ik kal haiaur woh kya laayega,yeh soch kar is pal ko na jeenajo aisa karre ,woh insaan toh mein nahi naokme done with my thoughtsplease forgive me for my spelling mistake.me waiting for your reply
I received a pm for this FF from ananya. I was curous to read it after reading the first poem you wrote about it. And i am so very glad I decided to open the link and read it.
As for the poem, there is absolutely nothing I could add to this poem. For this poem is just perfection., from the comparison of Geet to a dried twig to herself while comparing Maan to a lush rose.
From Maan's contradicting her statement and comparing her to a shady tree and himself a rose with thorns.
mai ek sukhi patti
tu ek surakh gulaab
hum dono ka ek hona
jo na pura ho sake,hai woh ek khawaab
tu nahi hai sukhi patti
tu hai ek gahari chaav,jiske nicche do zindagi
falaa rahi hai,apne paav
aur agar
hu mai gulaab ,to jaan le
mere paas bhi hai ,kaate be hisaab
Just absolutely beautiful.👏
Geet's fears and Maan's stubborn refusal to accept them and coaxing her to live in the present and let tomorrow take care of itself was explained so very perfectly by the following words.
janti hu mein ,ku chahiye tujhe mera saath
hai mere paas tera kuch aisa
jo lauta dega waapis khusiyaan tere haath
par tu kyu nahi dekh sakta
un khushiyoon mai bhi hogi mere beete kal ki parchaaiyan
jo degi har pal tujhe mere saath na chalne ki duhaaiya
jo beet gaya woh bhi ik kal hai
aur jo aayega woh bhi ik kal hai
aur woh kya laayega,yeh soch kar is pal ko na jeena
jo aisa karre ,woh insaan toh mein nahi na
This has been your best poem by far👏 and is definitely my favorite.
Aami Daakini
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