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Posted: 12 years ago
Chap 6(i)...i am flabbergasted by your sheer talent...your attention to detail and realism just mke this fic so much better i am running out of adjectives to aptly describe them...the thing that i loved most abt this update was how virman hav begun appreciating each other...they hav begun noticing things and started feeling for each other...i love the pace of this fic...neither too fast nor slow...and then the dance...again no words...virman hav this undeniable chemistry that just sizzles...and the kiss...it made me go all awww...why dont such scenarios come true in real life too?????? well perhaps coz real life doesnt hav virman in it...

Chap 6(ii)...i just love how intimately virat knows maanvi...he knows her mood swings , her temper tantrums and is also aware of her shifting body language...i love virat...and i adore maanvi...she has this innocence to her that is just too darn endearing and sweet...also loved maanvi's thought process during the bike-ride...like i mentioned earlier her innocence is one of the most endearing traits that she has...maanvi knows she like virat...i loved the fact that you didnt keep her clueless abt her growing feelings...again its something thats quite close to the real world...
all in all a brilliant part showcasing virman's developing feelings for each other...lovely...
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Posted: 12 years ago
maanvi likes virat and doesnt hesitate in telling him...the thing which i loved most abt this part was how maanvi told virat she likes him...maanvi is not one to hide things from anyone...also she is absolutely honest...i loved how maanvi didnt play coy and you know the typical-how-can-i-confess-my-feelings-i-am-a-girl thing...this is why i adore your virman...they are bindasss...
virat's concern and care is something that we hav always witnessed...and i liked how he was distant...he needed time to concentrate on his changing feelings...i liked how you added the discomfort and embarrassed distance post-kiss...
maanvi leaving to be with jeevika for the pooja and virat being all concerned and worried...i liked the explosive argument virman had...bt the thing i loved most was that his anger was not plain anger..it had this tinge of worry and fear...again the kiss was mind blowing...virman hav always been abt uninhibited passion and hawttt chemistry...you brought that out really well...

Chap 8...maanvi aur bholi...in which alternate reality????? hahahaha...just loved the way maanvi missed virat all day...Jealous virat...hmmm something that i hav always wanted to see in the show...why is it that you are writing all the things that i want bt the show doesnt provide...first Virman leaving VM and now jealous virat...ooohhh...
waiting desperately for you to update soon...
this is a beautiful fic...i just love how you create the most perfect scenarios using the most simple words...you are truly talented...update soon...
take care...
Edited by nikki1211 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago

Maanvi is badly and madly in love with viraat but if viraat is not sure so he had not consumate their marriage hope this don't create distance between them omg viraat going for two week it means maanvi alone how vl she manage
Love possessive viraat plz cont soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
Loved the whole update. Sorry for replying late.Loved the morning conversations between them, that too that 'tussi jaa rahe ho' and the hug and dialogues after that . Was visualizing that and dreaming them in that ..Manvi is so sweet .Loved the aloo parathas and the teasing part of Rahul, priya and his friends.Loved the conversation between Rahul and Virat. made Virat think how much Virat is committed to this relationship and how far he wants to take this relationship.Loved the jealous and angry Virat when he trashed that boys. 😃.And now he is going to leave her and go for two weeks. and his answer too was sweet when she asked will he be there for her. That last part was awesome.U showed his confusion and his fear well .Loved the whole update.Thanks for the pm. Sorry for commenting late😊
Edited by preetipc - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
luvd d update...manvi is madly in love with virat bt he is unnware of his own feelings...luvd virat's protective nature...nw he is going fr 2 weeks on camp hope he realise his love...
Awsm update as usual...cntn soon
thnx fr d pm swty...:)
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Posted: 12 years ago

***part 9***

Manvi had been sulking since she got to know Virat was leaving for two weeks. She didn't talk to him straight. She would make all his favorite khaana but would not talk with him while eating. When he went to spend some time with her, she said she was busy. He wanted to take her out, before he left, again she refused. Virat was scratching his head. 'pagal ladki' he thought.

He was sitting outside with Rahul and studying. Manvi came to give them both coffee; they had been studying since a long time. She handed the cup to Rahul with a smile but placed Virat's cup on the table and left, ignoring him. "Manvi?" he called, but she had already left.

"Yaaar, yeh ladki bhi ajeeeb hai! teek se baaat karna bhi ajuba hai is ghar main" he was getting a little upset.

"yeh hi toh pyaaar hai mere bhai, stop looking and start feeling mere baccha. Abhi deekho Priya bhi ruti huvi hai, jab se patha chala ki main akela jaa raha hu. It's their way to deal with separation. I toh find it cute anyways..par'I know.. ki, tera toh kuch nahi hone wala hai..abhi main jaa raha hu, bohot hogaya padayi wadayi..biwi time now!" he said getting up.

"maan na padaga yaaar, tu ne Ph.d kar raki hai haan? biwi ke psychology main, par yeh woh nahi hai. Iska screw deela hai bas, aur kuch nahi" he himself was actually surprised that Manvi's ignoring him was really getting to him.

"I told u, already, tera kuch nahi ho sakta, tujh pe koi kitna bhi pyaar barsaye, tuje toh gobar hi lagne wala hai." He said while leaving.

"Ohh plz..jao bhai, only your wife can handle this pathetic sense of humor of your's..muje baksh do..plzz" Virat sent him off.

Deep inside, he knew Rahul was not completely wrong. She had been acting weird since he told him about his camp. 'Isi liye main yeh sab main padna hi nahi chahta' he made a funny face and went inside. She was folding the laundry; he went and started to help her. She snatched the shirt away and glared at him.

V: "Yaar, kya problem hai? Kyu aaise behave kar rahi ho?"

M: " aaise kaise?"

V: "teek se baat nahi kar sakti?"

M: "tum ne kiya, teek se baat? Pehli batha nahi sakte the ki ja rahe ho?"

V: "abhi kya farak padtha hai manvi, ki bataya hai ki nahi bataya hai, kuch change thodi hota." He said annoyed.

She threw the shirt at him angrily and went inside...he followed her "Manvi!!"

He managed to hold her hand and stop her. She looked away and her hair was covering her face "Chodu muje" she was trying to free her hand. He pushed her hair back, held her chin and made her face him. She was resisting and trying to look the other way. He forcefully turned her face, two small drops of tears were rolling down her cheek.

For a second, he felt so bad. How could he not understand her emotions?

"alay alay..Mannu baby, lo lahi hai?? Lonaaa aa raha hai?" he talked funny trying to cheer her up.

She started hitting his chest softly and he ran away, she chased him all around the house. "Chodungi nahi tum ko aaj" Finally they both were so tired running like small kids that they collapsed on the opposite sides of the couch.

"yaar, roj aaise bagao muje, kya hai na aaj kal time nahi milta workout karne ka..isi bahane tum se daily dose ka ladayi aur workout, dono hojayega ." He laughed.

"Woh toh tab karungi na, jab tum yaha rahoge.." she said going back to her previous state folding her hands and pouting.

He smiled. He remembered how Rahul said he found the whole thing so cute, now he understood. He moved closer to her and put his arm around her.

"Manvi, main sirf doh hafton ke liye ja raha hoon, do saal ke liye nahi. I actually think it's a good thing, so much has happened between us, some time away from each other will give us space to process everything?"

"process what? Why do always use such big big words? Time away, Process, space, digest. I have nothing to process, tum har cheez ko itna complicate kyu karte ho?"

"Complicate nahi analyze karta hu. Kabhi kabhi tum bhi socha karo, warna battery dead hogaya ga." He was pointing his hand to her head.

"mujhe nahi karna analyze wanalyze..main toh wahi karti hu, jo mera maan karta hai, jo mujhe accha lagtha hai.." she said looking at him widening her eyes and smiling. He was looking into those wide eyes again, they were filled with so much life and brightness and so many surprises. She caught him looking at her and blushed.

He smiled at her "haye haye, meri mumtaz.." he smiled still looking, she blushed some more. "Yaar bachpan se tum ko dektha ayaa hoon, kaha chupa ke raka tha yein sab, I don't know, these natkat ankhein, yein ishare, yeh sharmana..tum sharmathi ho, toh waise lagthi ho, jaise woh old movies ke heroine ki tarah, ..I can't even describe it." He looked at her smitten.

She started blushing harder and laughed sweetly and he kept staring at her "Did Virat Vadhera just give me a compliment. I have to mark this day in the calendar."

V: "Shut up! I give you compliments all the time.."

M: "No, you don't"

V: "Yes!!!!! I do"'

M: "Achha baba leave it, waise, I am sorry, I am being such a brat. I am just worried about you, how much you will miss me."

V: hmmm..

M: You will miss me right.." She made a puppy face.

V: "See, that's what I was talking about, I haven't seen that one either" he was leaning in closer to her face.

M: "Stop it Virat, you are making me conscious." She buried her head behind him.

V:"Ofcourse, I will miss you, my jaan. But, I won't be able to focus on my work, if you are sad" He pulled her in front, closer to him.

M: "Ok, I promise, I won't be sad. But, I will mish u, like a lot.." she cuddled cozily in his arms.

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Next morning, Virat, Manvi and Rahul, Priya drove to the hospital. There was a bus waiting, to take them to the camp, which was in a rural area, very far away from the city. Priya was totally down, she wouldn't let go off Rahul's hand. Manvi was chirping like a parrot making Virat laugh like crazy.

"Manvi, stop it, behosh karne ka iraaada hain kya? Bas kar meri ma, kitna bologe?"

"Since, you won't be here for two weeks, I cannot tell you all these things, so I am getting everything out right now. Baad main math kehna, Manvi gussa thi, usne mujh se baath hi nahi kiya and all ok?"

"I don't think I will ever complain that you don't talk enough." he laughed.

They arrived at the college, but Rahul and Priya were not ready yet, so they got out giving them some privacy. They were standing below a tree by the bus.

M: "Ok, so I prepared a biwi speech" she stood straight in an attention pose.

V: "accha? Ok, lets hear it."

M: She started chanting like mantras "Eat your food on time, don't work too hard. Sleep on time. Acche se rahna. Kithaboh ko zyaada math pakana.."

V: "ok, ok I get it..plz..stop." he joined his hands. They looked at each other. She held his hand and he looked at her as she was trying her best, not to cry.

"Come here" he pulled her in his arms and squeezed her tightly and she hugged him back. "Please take care of yourself, stay alert and stay with Priya all the time ok? And call me, if you need anything, anything at all, I will take the next bus back." he touched her cheek.

She looked at him slowly and smiled, her eyes filling up "Husband speech??"

He smiled "Haan whatever you want to call it."

"I will miss you Virat." "I love you" she said. He gulped his words, he couldn't say anything, he was speechless for a second. He took a deep breath and kissed her lips softly. He didn't want to leave now. He was lost in her eyes. There was magic around her.

"Ahem..Ahem" Rahul and Priya coughed at them while walking toward the bus.

"The bus is starting Virat" they heard someone say from the window, they both looked up, it was Maya.

"Maya is coming with you?" Manvi asked raising her eyebrow.

"Apparently!" Virat was still looking at Manvi.

"Bye Manvi" he smiled. "Here, I got you something" he gave her a small box wrapped up with a ribbon on top.

"What's this?" she beamed forgetting all about Maya.

"Dekh lena aaram se" he said as the driver was honking.

"Hustle away now" he kissed her again quickly and ran into the bus as it started moving. He waved at her from the bus, gave her a flying kiss and disappeared inside.

Manvi and Priya waved lovingly to their respective husbands, until the bus was out of sight.

"Going away gift?" Priya asked wiping her tears.

Manvi smiled and hugged her. "Priya, I think we should exploit this time with just us girls, slumber party every night. What say??" she asked excitedly.

"Your loving husband reminded me 101 times or more to take care of you and you are consoling me? Collector's item you are" Priya laughed.

Manvi giggled and excitedly opened her gift. It was a phone.

"Wow new phone? Kis khushi main?"

Manvi just smiled.

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>>>part 10

Note: Sorry everyone, I haven't gotten to reply to your wonderful comments. I will do that, but I felt like, even you guys would appreciate an update better than 'thanks a lot' pm. So, here to go. Plz keep commenting, luv all long and lovely comments I got for last update. I can't tell you how happy they make me.😳😳😳

Edited by bluebolt - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
this part was highli8 of entire update fr me...

"Manvi, stop it, behosh karne ka iraaada hain kya? Bas kar meri ma, kitna bologe?"

"Since, you won't be here for two weeks, I cannot tell you all these things, so I am getting everything out right now. Baad main math kehna, Manvi gussa thi, usne mujh se baath hi nahi kiya and all ok?"

wat an update.. loving it... virat is still in confusion abt his feelings.. im curious to knw wat gonna happen as maya is going to be with virat all tym...

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Posted: 12 years ago
wow it was one sweet update.it was very nice.but i am feeling something wrong is going to happen becoz virat has not yet confessed his words to manvi and most off all maya is going with them.i am feeling scared.THANKS FOR THE PM.continue soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
Wow...such a cute update...really really loved it to the core...the way virat pacify manvi was too cute...their conversation was just great...n the goodbye scene of virman was juz amazing.. 😳 ...i was literally smiling reading this whole update...hope maya dun't create any problem between virman...as she will be with virat all the time...will be eagerly waiting for ur next update...thank u so much for the pm... 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
Wow... Fab update.. Virat still confused about his feelings... Hope Duriyaan works... And Maya with Virat for two weeks... So dhamaka in next update... right?? 😉
Cant wait... continue soon... loved it... Specially caring Virat... ❤️

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