Virman-ff-two left feet - part 18-ii

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Kiekeboe

@Kiekeboe

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Posted: 12 years ago

#211

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Such a lovely morning for our lovers, then Maanvi teasing during the day ... *melting*

Virat possessive about Maanvi, then he drops the bomb about leaving for 2weeks... not nice Virat... 😲

Very well written and so lovely and sweet at the times. Do continue pls!

Edited by Kiekeboe - 12 years ago

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Kidrauhl

@Kidrauhl

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#212

Aw i loved the update to the core. Manvi and virat have a special bond and then when they were talking on the phone it was soo and cute. Manvi made aloo ke paranthe for him soo sweet and the friends teasing 😆. And then the bit when the talks abour leavibg for 2 WEEKS manvi ka kya haal hoga 😭 bechari.
Thanks for the pm and update soon
Pm me please 😃
Inayah 🤗 ❤️ 🤗

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Kanwal_chohan

@Kanwal_chohan

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Posted: 12 years ago

#213

Was damn awesome hope virat doesn't betray her
Beautiful update loved it to the core update soon
And do pm me

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Aenna

@Aenna

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+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#214

waooo fabulousss...
i hope virat also fall for manvi
in dis two weeks...
plzzz update asap

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Geminimanna

@Geminimanna

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Posted: 12 years ago

#215

Interesting twist. I really like this update and thanks for the pm.

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MadhuChowdary

@MadhuChowdary

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Posted: 12 years ago

#216

hey...u started another ss and already 8 parts...i m feeling guilty for not commenting...i m really really sorry...i was at home for holidays...so i wasn't visiting IF from past 3 weeks...i saw all ur pms...i m not commenting but still u didn't forget me...so sweet of u...thank u so so so much for the pms...

this ss...really a good one...title is good and different...i read all the parts...it took some time to complete all the parts...i liked this concept and all updates till now and i mean it...they forcefully got married...now they accepted each other...but virat is not committed completely...what will happen now...i m excited to read next parts...i want to see how it goes...u updated 8 parts in my absence...if possible update next part asap...thanks once again for pms and take care...

belated happy new year anu...i m late to wish...accept my sorry and wishes...

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Jannat

@Jannat94

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#217

hey dear
Love the update and how slowly it progress further and further
So virat went 4 camp hope he never hurt manvi after that
Manvi and his relationship and awww she made alooparatha 4 him
I like the way his coleague also made him understand dnt hurt her
Thanx 4 d pm
Waiting 4 ur next part
Update Soon

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Kiara_rocks

@Kiara_rocks

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Posted: 12 years ago

#218

loved the update to the core. Virat is so protective to Maanvi but still doesn't aware of his feelings...interesting!!!!!!!!!!!!! ...continue soon ...

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nikki1211

@nikki1211

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Posted: 12 years ago

#219

ohhkay...so like i said beautiful beautiful work...ryt from the concept to the way you hav created virman and their interactions...lovely...coz i missed like ryt from the beginning and read the stuff at one go i thought i wud comment chapter wise...

chap 2...the thing that just caught me was this line wen virat is thinking that he hears maanvi now wen she enters their room...wat with the bangles and the paayal...we all take these things for granted that a married woman wud wear all these things...yet i dont know why i loved that virat noticed it...his concern for her...whether dreams , her aspirations , her health...its all very virat-ish and true to character...also highly endearing that despite not being in love with her he cares so much... loved the end to this update...loved it...

chap 3...again a wonderful addition...virat's thoughts regarding maanvi especially the did she want more thing was so touching...i love how observing and sensible and practical virat is...nothing escapes him...i love your writing style...many a times it so happens that i see the scenes you wrote playing in front of me...that according to me is the biggest thing a writer can do...you know writing so well that the reader is so immersed he literally sees the scene...also you hav a true grasp of their characters...without being ott or ooc...also you portray virman's unique sense of humour quite well...its one of my fav attributes in virman...their humour and you bring that out really well...

maanvi in this fic is so innocence without being stupid or ignorant...i love that...her simple wishes...her attempts not to anger the elders , her efforts to become the perfect bahu...these touches of realism really add to her character...virta still sees maaya and maanvi doesnt know how to deal with that...she cant claim her rightful place as his wife considering this was a marriage of convenience yet cant stop herself from feeling that tinge of hurt and jealousy...a brilliant stroke...which again was very true to character...her tears , her hurt , the line "he doesnt want her" made me all teary eyed...and thank god thank god virat felt out of place at maaya's...thank god...again a beautiful update...

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nikki1211

@nikki1211

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#220

Chap 4...wat in the world is wrong with swamini????? why cant she just let people be????? i mean who really asks for her opinions and ideas that she is always so keen on bestowing her knowledge on everyone????

i hate swamz...like really...personally i believe in living and letting others live...hence hate busy-bodies like her...and then the param pujya dadaji...he and his rules...god another one of those tortured souls...cant be happy and cant let others remain happy...this update was again good growth...i love how ferociously virat fights for maanvi's independence and her freedom...i just love how for virat maanvi is his equal in all senses of the world...its a refreshing change and view in our current oppressing times...virat leaving the house...best decision he made...i always feel vadhera mansion has this oppressive vibe to it...it always tries to curb people and their freedom...always wanted virman to leave the VM in the show too...sadly that never happened...

khair...again loved virat's practical approach to leaving the place...it was so natural and well-thought of...maanvi needs freedom and focus to work on her efforts in order to become a doctor...and yup to your question...doctor couples are indeed hottt...

Chap 5...i loved the house you created for them...the pent house apartment at the top of the city...also loved the realism you added to it...virman's home is not perfect..they are not earning...i loved how you handled the money issue...in the last update i was half expecting virat to ask viren for money...thank god thats been taken care of...virman away from people , alone in their own world...just the thought makes me happy...i loved the Smile-scene...virat noticing maanvi's smile and getting the place just coz she likes it...aww...again the scene where you wrote abt maanvi standing and the breeze it was almost like this was happening ryt in front of me...beautiful...

and virat..he just makes me go all awww...he is the perfect mix of brains and looks and intellect and pragmatism...where do you find guys like him...moving on...loved loved this update specifically for the virman moving out of VM bit...

Edited by nikki1211 - 12 years ago