Lightning (An Ansh short story)

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Okay guys, my first story. Be kind.

Also, major respect for the FF and OS writers on this forum. I now realize just how tough it is.






There she is, standing under that yellow light a few meters away from the entrance of her haveli. She's looking at you with those dewy eyes and she is smiling just like she did when you first told her that you loved her. Her fingers twitch, almost imperceptibly and you know that there is something on her mind. There is something she wants to tell you.


You stare her down, she is unlike anyone you've ever met. Her innocence, her bravery, her compassion, her 'parvah' and most of all, the adoration you now saw in her eyes. This shadow of love which crossed her face whenever she beheld you. She had this way of making you feel strong, honored, nervous and weak, all with a single glance.

You had just spent your first "poora din" with her. Nothing fancy really. A day spent picnicking under the trees that stood by the lake where you first met her. You had cooked all her favorites and had taken great pleasure out of feeding her with your own hands. She was impressed by your culinary skills.

There was this one moment when you had cracked a joke and she was laughing and then she stopped and the sunlight hit strands of her hair, making it glow. She looked at you and said 'You're everything'.

You didn't know what to say to that. The moment passed and she started telling you about how, as a little girl, she thought that telling a lie would make her nose swell up. The sky was overcast and you couldn't stop laughing, wishing you had known her when she was a little girl.

A big fat drop of moisture fell on your nose. You looked up and noticed that the overcast sky had started drizzling. You scrambled, she scrambled. By the time you collected your picnic supplies, Mother nature was sending down sheets of water. You tried to ignore how her wet choli clung to her skin.

Had your life been a movie, you would have found a nice, deserted cabin nearby where you would have taken some, ahem, shelter of the promiscuous sort. But your life was not a movie and the two of you stood under a leafy banyan tree, waiting for the rain to abate.

But sometimes, life can be better than a movie, like when lightning struck and the booming thunder compelled a frightened Anandi to leap into your arms.

You stopped breathing as her wet body fell flush with your wet body. Her heaving chest was doing things to you, things that an innocent, village belle like Anandi would thoroughly disapprove of. And then you realized that you had been staring the places where your bodies were touching. The mighty thunder continued to rumble and roar, pulling you out of your reverie. You caught Anandi's eye, you wanted to reassure her that you were there and that she needn't be afraid of thunder.

You looked into her stricken eyes and the world went blank. Her fear seemed to have abated a little and she was staring at you with that intense, adoring look. You stammered some nonsense, which you honestly don't remember right now. It couldn't have been important given how Anandi ignored it. She lifted her hand and rested it against your cheek. She was so close, close enough that you could feel her breath on your skin. Her breath, the feel of her soft hand and her still-heaving chest, you went into auto-pilot. You kissed the wrist of the palm which rested on your face, you kissed up her hand, the crook of her elbow, her tricep, her shoulder, her collarbone, her neck. She was making these guttural sounds that were driving you wild. If she kept it up, you would lose control. Maybe to silence those moans, maybe because thunder had crashed again and you didn't know what else to do, or maybe just because you wanted to taste her, you kissed her.

She responded almost immediately. Maybe she was on autopilot too. You deepened the kiss and her knees buckled. You chortled and held her in your arms to steady her. She smiled against your lips. Her tiny little kisses were dancing the tango with your senses. Before she could feel your body's reaction, you stopped the kiss. She pouted. She was so freaking cute. She vibrated you on a whole new frequency.

The drive back home was a quiet affair. You enjoyed a companionable silence and she leaned her head out of your car window. Not caring that the wind would mess up her wet hair or that bugs might hit her eyes given the speed at which you were driving. You stopped the car a few meters away from her home, under this dirty yellow light that reminded you of car parks and oil stains.

And now you're just looking at her. Her adoring eyes and her quivering mouth. Though she's yet to say those three words, you can feel them on her breath and in her eyes and hidden in every nook and corner of her being.

Her hand ghosts across your cheek again and she lets herself out of the car. She beckons for you to lean over and you do. She whispers into your ear:

Main ek baat boloon?

Haan, bolo?


Mujhe lightning se darr nahi lagta.



She walked away, her hips asway, enticing you. She knows the effect she can have on you. Innocent village belle, as if!

She turned around and gave you a wicked smile.

Your shock wore off and you laughed into the night. This girl was dangerous!

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Hey dear Awesome writing...but may I give an advice??May be its ur writing style but it'd be great if u replace all you and yours with SHiv...it will do wonders.
Edited by Malika - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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You're right. It is the style. i went for the Tanya Davis feel.

If I ever write FF again, I'll be sure to keep it in mind :)
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Posted: 13 years ago
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awesome 👍🏼 cannot believe that its your first time at writing here! great work 👏 lovely OS ❤️
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Posted: 13 years ago
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WOW it's really very nice.👏 keep writing😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Huh!!! What was it?????????? I am dazed!!!!!!!!!!

Excellent...kya emtions jaga diye yaar...this is your first OS!!!!

U r making me thirsty aur KC wale din...not fair 😉

👏 👏 👏
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Posted: 13 years ago
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So simple yet so beautiful!! Loved it! 👏 👏
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Wonderful😳 what else can be said? Its really too good😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Wow😃😃😃 Initially I didnt like the "you" but believe me I'm loving your style of writing now😳😳 Excellent👏👏👏👏
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Love Anandi in this. I like her naughty naughty side. And I definately loveyour style of writing!!! CS is being played by a shararti Anandi... too cute ☺️

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